1import{D as v,F as k,G as T}from"./main-DrBhI0hH.js";import"./index-_tIqqp10.js";const m=[{id:"ielts-acad-2023-1a-a",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 1 · response A",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"bar_chart",officialBand:5,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 2 3You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 4 5The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. 6 7Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 8 9Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/ielts-27-ielts_academic_sample_tasks_2023_page_3.png",candidateResponse:`This is a bar chart of the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods. In 1970, Most of Men were studying part-time but from 1980, studying part-time was decreased and studying full-time was increased and in 1990, it was twice as many students as in 1970. 10On the other hand, Women studying full-time were increased and not only full-time, part-time also were increased. in 1990, studying full-time was three times as many students as in 1970. 11If compare Men and Women, as you see, in 1970, Men were studying more than women full-time or part-time but it changed from 1980 and then, in 1990, Women were studying part-time more than Men and studying full-time was same number. 12It shows you Women has a high education now.`,responseWordCount:132,examinerComment:"There is a good attempt to describe the overall trends but the content would have been greatly improved if the candidate had included some reference to the figures given on the graph. Without these, the reader is lacking some important information. The answer is quite difficult to follow and there are some punctuation errors that cause confusion. The structures are fairly simple and efforts to produce more complex sentences are not successful.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-academic-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 9",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-2023-1a-b",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 1 · response B",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"bar_chart",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 13 14You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 15 16The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. 17 18Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 19 20Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/ielts-27-ielts_academic_sample_tasks_2023_page_3.png",candidateResponse:`According to this graph, the number of men and women in further education in Britain shows the following pattern. 21In the case of male, the number of male has declined slightly from about 1000 thousands in 1970/71 to about 850 thousands in 1990/91. However, this figure rose back to about 850 thousands in 1990/91 from about 820 thousands in 1980/81. The proportion of full-time education has declined during this period. However, the proportion of part-time education has increased dramatically. 22On the other hand, in the case of female, the number of both full-time education and part-time education has increased during this period. 23From about 700 thousands in 1970/71, these figures rose to about 820 thousands in 1980/81, to about 1100 thousands in 1990/91. 24In terms of full-time education, this figure rose by about 260 to about 900 in 1990/91. 25On the other hand, with respect to part-time education, this figure rose dramatically between 1980/81 and 1970/71. However this figure rose slightly between 1980/81 and 1990/91.`,responseWordCount:165,examinerComment:"The candidate has made a good attempt to describe the graphs looking at global trends and more detailed figures. There is, however, some information missing and the information is inaccurate in minor areas. The answer flows quite smoothly although connectives are overused or inappropriate, and some of the points do not link up well. The grammatical accuracy is quite good and the language used to describe the trends is well-handled. However, there are problems with expression and the appropriate choice of words and whilst there is good structural control, the complexity and variation in the sentences are limited.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-academic-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 10",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-2023-1b-a",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 1 · response A",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"line_graph",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 26 27You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 28 29The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. 30 31Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 32 33Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/ielts-27-ielts_academic_sample_tasks_2023_page_4.png",candidateResponse:`The graph shows the percentage of audiences over 4 yrs old of UK follows the radio and television throughout the day during the peri
33od October - December 1992. 34It has been observed from the graph that less than 10% audiances follows the radio at 6:00 am and the percentage raised to a pick around 30% at 8 AM and decline gradually to around 10% during the period 2:00 to 4:00 PM and again raised a bit to around 12% between 4:00 to 6:00 PM. It has again dropped to below 10% at around 10 PM. The rate again raised to a bit between 10.00 PM to 12.00 PM and then dropped slowly by 4:00 AM. 35On the other hand, the rate of television audiances raises 0-10% during the period 6:00 to 8:00 am and remain steady up to 10.00 AM and then gradually goes down by 12.00 Noon. The percentage raised dramatically to around 15% by 2:00 PM which again raised to a pick above 40% between 6.00 - 8.00 PM and then gradually dropped between the period 12:00 PM to 4:00 AM.`,responseWordCount:183,examinerComment:"The answer has an appropriate introduction which the candidate has attempted to express in their own words. There is good coverage of the data and a brief reference to contrasting trends. The answer can be followed although it is rather repetitive and cohesive devices are overused. In order to gain a higher mark for content, the candidate would be expected to summarise the most important features of the graph in an overview, for example, âaudiences for radio peak in the morning, and for TV, in the eveningâ. There is some flexibility and precision in the range of vocabulary used. Sentences are long but do lack complexity. To score more highly there would be fewer errors in tense, verb form and spelling which interfere slightly with the flow of the answer.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-academic-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 11",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-2023-1b-b",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 1 · response B",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"line_graph",officialBand:7,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 36 37You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 38 39The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. 40 41Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 42 43Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/ielts-27-ielts_academic_sample_tasks_2023_page_4.png",candidateResponse:"The bold graph shows the television audiences throughout the day. It shows that the percentage of audiences is zero percent in early morning but it gradually rises upto ten percent at 8:00 am and maintains the same for the next two hours. There is a slight fall in percentage in next two hours however after that it rises sharp upto twenty percent within the next two hours. After this the graph rises very fast and attains it's peak at 10 pm which is about forty five percent. The the graph gradually falls down and at 2:00 am it is at five percent. The thinner graph shows the percentage of radio audiences. Unlike the television one the peak percentage of the radio audiences is at 8:00 am which is about 30 percent. Then it gradually falls and it corrosponds with the television one at two pm. After that it gradually falls but with a small incrase in percentage at 4:30 to 6:00 pm. The percentage of audiance then gradu. goes down and at four Am it is the lowest which is near 2 percentage. These graphs proves the progressive propularity of television.",responseWordCount:191,examinerComment:"The answer deals well with both the individual media trends and the overall comparison of these trends. The opening could be more fully developed with the inclusion of information relating to the groups studied and the period of time during which the study took place. There is a good variety of cohesive devices and the message can be followed quite easily although the expression is sometimes a little clumsy. Structures are complex and vocabulary is varied but there are errors in word forms, tense and voice though these do not impede communication.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-academic-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 12",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-2023-1c-a",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 1 · response A",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"process_diagram",officialBand:5,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 44 45You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 46 47The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. 48 49Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 50 51Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/ielts-27-ielts_academic_sample_tasks_2023_page_5.png",candidateResponse:`Bricks are small shaped figures which are used for building. 52First of all digger dig the ground untill the clay level. Next the type of sticky earth that is used for making bricks are on the metal grid which selected special parts of clay and throws them on the roller. Then in the manufacturing process sand + water are filled
52in. The sand gives the texture for bricks. After that the solid is put ready to go through wire cutter or moulding. 53This process makes shapes of the bricks. 54When the figures have got their shape, these items can be put in the drying oven, where they stayed for 24-48 hours. The temprature is moderate between 200°C and 980°C in the kiln and high between 870°C and 1300°C. 55Finally these hot items go to the cooling chamber and get cold from 48-72 hours. 56The last part of the manufacturing proces is packaging and delivery to the consumption.`,responseWordCount:157,examinerComment:"Although the basic process is accurately described, this script fails to present an overview and some of the key features are not adequately covered. The first sentence may have been an attempt at an overview but it simply causes confusion and detracts from the answer. Despite this, the overall progression is clear and there is effective, though mechanical, use of linkers and sequencers. There are also examples of substitution and referencing, although sentences are not always well linked. The vocabulary is minimally adequate for the task. Spelling is generally accurate but there are inappropriate word choices, omissions and errors in word form. Some attempts at subordination and complex nominalisations are made, but generally the structures are limited and there are frequent errors. Overall this is a good example of a Band 5 performance.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-academic-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 13",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-2023-1c-b",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 1 · response B",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"process_diagram",officialBand:7,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 57 58You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 59 60The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. 61 62Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 63 64Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/ielts-27-ielts_academic_sample_tasks_2023_page_5.png",candidateResponse:"Dear Sir, I am writing a report about brick manufacturing. The following are as follows. Brick manufacturing starts with choosing good quality clay. A large digger similar to a crane digs the clay. The process takes about half a day. after which it is put on metal grid to separate unwanted silt and impurities. The strained clay is then put in a large machine roller where it is mixed with sand and water to be moulded later to form the base of the brick. while it is still soft, wire cutters are used to perfectly cut the bricks, removing the rough edges. The soft, bricks are then put in a drying oven where it stays from 24-48 hours. After the pre-set drying time, the bricks are then put in large kilns where it is baked at moderate heat of about 200-980°C. The bricks are first put in moderate heat to avoid cracking. After about few minutes, the bricks are then fired to a high 870-1,300°C heat. This is the final heating or 'cooking' stage so to speak for the bricks. Just beside the kiln is the cooling chamber which is made up of large steel where the bricks will stay for about 48-72 hours. The bricks are then ready for packaging where the brick workers carefully pack the bricks in large container vans for delivery. The whole process is fairly an easy one because there are no sophisticated machines used. The only thing that bothered me was during the heating process because as the manager told me, I have to stay and observe while the clay is being 'cooked' because some of the clays do tend to crack easily because of the wrong sand and water mixture from the start IF this happened, the process has to be repeated again which can be quite lengthy.",responseWordCount:305,examinerComment:"This test taker uses an inappropriate format at times (e.g. the letter-style opening and personal comments) and this limits the band for Task Achievement. The process itself is adequately described, although some irrelevant information is included and there is no clear overview. Information is logically organised and there is a clear progression throughout the response. A range of cohesive devices is used appropriately, although there are occasional errors in referencing and linking, and paragraphing would have helped convey a clearer description of the stages. A wide range of sophisticated lexis is used to convey meaning with precision, but there are also occasional flaws in word choice that lead to some slightly awkward expressions. A wide range of structures is also used fluently with only occasional slight error and the majority of sentences are error-free. In spite of the high level of language proficiency, the flaws in format and organisation limit the rating for this response to Band 7.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-academic-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response pages 14, 15",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-2023-1c-c",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 1 · response C",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"process_diagram",officialBand:8.5,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 65 66You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 67 68The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. 69 70Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 71 72Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/ielts-27-ielts_academic_sample_tasks_2023_page_5.png",candidateResponse:`Brick Manufacturing 73 74The process by which clay bricks are manufactured for the building industry can be outlined in seven consecutive steps. First the raw material, clay, which lies just below the surface of soil in certain clay-rich areas has to be dug up by a digger. Then the lumps of clay are placed on a metal grid, in order to break up the big chunks of clay into much smaller ones, which fall through the metal grid onto a roller, whose motion further segregates the bits of clay. Sand and water are added to make a homogenous mixture, which is then either formed in moulds or cut into brick-shaped pieces by means of a wire cutter. 75 76Those fresh bricks are then kept in a drying oven for at least 24 and a maximum of 48 hours, several dozens if not hundreds of bricks at a time. The dried bricks are then transferred to a so-called kiln, another type of high temperature oven. First they are kept at a moderate temperature of 200°C - 980°C, then at a high temperature of 870°C - 1300°C. This process is followed by cooling down the finished bricks for 48 to 72 hours in a cooling chamber. Once the bricks have bee cooled down and have become hard, they get packaged and delivered to their final destination, for example be it a building site or storage.`,responseWordCount:231,examinerComment:"This response fully satisfies the requirements of the task. All key features of each stage of the process are appropriately and accurately presented. There is an overview in the first paragraph indicating that there are âseven consecutive stepsâ however for the highest score, a fuller overview would be needed, to summarise those key stages, for example; extracting the clay, then shaping, drying and delivering the bricks. The message is very easy to read with seamless cohesion. Paragraphing, linking and referencing are all skilfully managed. The language used is very fluent and sophisticated. A wide range of vocabulary and structures are used with full flexibility and accuracy within the scope of this task. Only rare minor errors can be found and these do not detract from communication or the high rating. This item is a good example of a very high-level response.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-academic-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response pages 16, 17",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-2023-2a-a",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 2 · response A",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"agree_disagree",officialBand:4,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 2 77You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
78Write about the following topic: 79 80Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. 81 82To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 83 84Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 85 86Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`I disagree that point about children brought up in families. 87because, I show that situation arounds me at our country parents. They want they had everything give to their children. but, their behavior is not good effect to them. 88 89On the other hands, children brought up by wealthy parents, they are strong, that means, they can do prepare to deal with the problems of adult life 90 91In my case, I start work from 20 ages I had social experience and I got a money for myself. however, My age is late to work by children ages and I heard about child doing work by another countries that countries had a culture about childrens 92 93That is they doing work for their pocketmoney. they could their money buy something or entrance to the bank. also, our country children's do this. but, many children's accept the money by their parents. which persons got a pocketmoney over the 20 ages. I think, if children's had a work and they study at money, they perfectly prepared their adult life after they must be parents.`,responseWordCount:179,examinerComment:"While it is obviously related to the topic, the introduction is confusing and the test takerâs position is difficult to identify. Ideas are limited and although the test taker attempts to support them with examples from experience, they remain unclear. There is no overall progression in the response and the ideas are not coherently linked. Although cohesive devices are used, they assist only minimally in achieving coherence. The range of vocabulary is basic and control is inadequate for the task. Language from the input material is used inappropriately and frequent errors in word choice and collocation cause severe problems for the reader. Similarly, the range of structures is very limited, the density of grammatical and punctuation error is high and these features cause some difficulty for the reader. Attempts to use complex structures, such as subordination, are rare and tend to be very inaccurate.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-academic-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 18",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-2023-2a-b",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 2 · response B",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"agree_disagree",officialBand:6.5,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 2 94You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 95Write about the following topic: 96 97Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. 98 99To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 100 101Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 102 103Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`I greatly support the idea about Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. I support it, because of the following reason - 104 105Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are raise in a certain psychological values. Such as the value of hardworking, dicipline, they are used to be in the condition where money doesn't come easily. They have to earn it, work for it. Oppose to it, a child who comes from a wealthy family is used to have money all the time. Whenever they wanted something, the money is eacilly gave to them as if everyday are their birthday. 106 107Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are well-trained to face adulthood. They are well-prepared to see the fact that the world is a very tough place. They watched their parent everyday worked very hard just to put food on the table. They have the advantage to see the reality and embrace it, set the
107ir mind that they too have work hard for their future, their own dreams, their authentic self. A child that came from a wealthy family doesn't always have this advantage. Thic is because their eyes are blinded by the power of money, that their parent has. They also have a dicadvantage of a family love life. Commonly wealthy parents express love by money. They love their children, so they bought them cars, expensive clothes, toys, but they are never home when their children needs them. The basic necessity of compassion isn't fulfilled in this kind of family. The impact to a child is that they will grow up and think that money is everything, that the source of happiness is money. They don't care about other people, they only care about money. The problem is they don't know how to get it, they've been spoiled all the time, so doesn't have the time to discovered the art of money making, only money spending. On the contrary children from families that do not have large amount of money will grow up with the sense of respect for money, they know how to get it and use it well. They know how to face adult life problems because they've been watching since they were achild. But a wealthy child is always to busy with himself to know that.`,responseWordCount:422,examinerComment:"The arguments in this response are generally well developed, ideas are appropriate and there is a clear position. (It is a shame that the first paragraph, and beginning of the second are mainly copied from the rubric.) Better use of paragraphing would have allowed a clearer focus to some of the supporting points and prevented the lapse into generalisation towards the end. Nevertheless, there is a generally clear progression with a good arrangement of opposing arguments. Referencing is usually accurate and effective, but better use of linkers would have improved the cohesion. Vocabulary is varied and used with some flexibility. The choice is not always precise but the test taker
107can evidently incorporate less common/idiomatic phrases into the argument and there is a good range that is generally accurate. The repetition of language from the rubric, while integrated, reveals a lack of ability to paraphrase. Regular errors detract from the use of a range of structures, although they do not detract from overall clarity. This is a generally good response to the task, but the weaknesses in organisation and grammatical control limit the rating to Band 6.5.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-academic-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response pages 19, 20",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-2023-2a-c",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 2 · response C",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"agree_disagree",officialBand:8.5,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 2 108You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 109Write about the following topic: 110 111Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. 112 113To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 114 115Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 116 117Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`I do agree to the statement that children brought up in poor families are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. 118 119Children of poor parents are prematurely exposed to the problems of adult life eg. learning to survive on a low family income, and sacrificing luxuries for essential items. These children begin to see the 'realities' of life in their home or social environment. Their parent's own struggles serve as an example to them. 120 121These children are taught necessary skills for survival as an adult from a very early age. Many children eg work in the weekends or holidays to either collect some pocket money or even contribute to their families' income. A good example is the many children who accompany their parents to sell produce at the market. They are making a direct contribution to their families in terms of labor or income. 122 123Children of poor families also are highly motivated. They tend to set high goals to improve their economic situation. A relevant example would be Mr Bill Gates (founder of Microsoft Corporation) He had an impoverished background but he used his talent and motivation to set up the worlds largest computer organisation. 124 125However, there are some problems that children from poor backgrounds do encounter. Many of these children who are 'robbed' of their childhood eg while working, may feel cheated. They often turn to crime. This however, is a small group. 126 127In summing up, children with impoverished backgrounds are able to deal with problems of adult life because of early exposure, family role models and sheer motivation.`,responseWordCount:270,examinerComment:"The topic is very well addressed and explored in depth. The position is clear throughout and directly answers the question. The ideas presented are relevant and very well supported, apart from some over-generalisation in the penultimate paragraph. However, there is no mention of how well children from âwealthy parentsâ deal with problems. Although this is not a requirement, it could be added to further improve the response. The ideas and information are very well organised and paragraphing is used appropriately throughout. The answer can be read with ease due to the sophisticated handling of cohesive devices, with only minimal lapses (for example, the use of âe.g.â). The writer uses a wide and very natural range of vocabulary with full flexibility. There are many examples of appropriate modification, collocation and precise vocabulary choice. Syntax is equally varied and sophisticated. There are only occasional errors in an otherwise very accurate answer. Overall this is a very strong performance and a good example of Band 8.5.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-academic-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response pages 21, 22",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-2023-2b-a",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 2 · response A",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"advantages_disadvantages",officialBand:5.5,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 2 128You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
129Write about the following topic: 130 131International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. 132 133Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? 134 135Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 136 137Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time there is concern about it's impaction on local inhabitants and the environment. 138 139Do the disadvantapes of international tourism outweight the advantapes? 140 141In my opinion advantapes outweight the disadvantapes. Firstly, many countries like Egypt or Tailond live from tourism. Lots of people work there as a seilomens or tourist guides. These countries without support of tourists wouldn't be able to function properly. 142 143Secondly, in countries visited by tourists are plenty of places where people just can't pass because of rare animals or pleuts. 144 145Another thing is that people like traveling and seeing new exotic places. They like lie on the beach or swim in ocean. Furthermore, tourism is now more growing industry highering tousands of people. There are makeing new places to work and to have fun. 146 147But on the other hand, people often forget that they aren't the only beings on the plenet. 148 149Many tourists are living garbage just anywhere. Some of them want an exotic suvenir so they pay for illegal things like dead or live animals or some sculpure. 150 151To sum up I think international traveling is a good thing but people must realise that there is something else besides them. They need to know that flora and fauna needs to be protected. People have to enjoy their holidays but alsow protect environment.`,responseWordCount:228,examinerComment:"The first five lines of this response are directly copied rubric; no credit is given for copied rubric. The topic is addressed and a relevant position is expressed, although there are patches (as in the fourth paragraph) where the development is unclear. Other ideas are more evidently relevant, but are sometimes insufficiently developed. In spite of this, ideas are clearly organised and there is an overall progression within the response. There is some effective use of a range of cohesive devices, including referencing, but there is also some mechanical use of linkers in places. Paragraphs are sometimes rather too short and inappropriate. A range of vocabulary is attempted and this is adequate for a good response to the task. However, control is weak and there are frequent spelling errors that can cause some difficulties for the reader, thus keeping the rating down for the lexical criterion. The test taker uses a mix of simple and complex structures with frequent subordinate clauses. Control of complex structures is variable, and although errors are noticeable they only rarely impede communication. Although there are some features of a higher band in this response, flaws in the paragraphing and the errors in vocabulary limit this rating to Band 5.5.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-academic-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response pages 23, 24",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-2023-2b-b",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 2 · response B",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"advantages_disadvantages",officialBand:7.5,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 2 152You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 153Write about the following topic: 154 155International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. 156 157Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? 158 159Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 160 161Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`'Tourism' - friend or foe? 162 163Tourism is a very big industry in the modern time and is growing quite rapidly. Thousands of people travel everywhere to various destinations every year. Arguments have come up regarding the benefits and negative impacts of tourism on places and on its local inhabitants and environment; however, I believe there are more advantages than disadvantages of international tourism. 164 165People travel for various reasons; we travel for business purpose, holidays, visit friends and relatives etc. Travelling is mostly seen as a recreational activity. Tourism has many advantages. Tourism can play a tremendous part in a countrys economy, the more tourists visit a country and spend money there the better it is for the country; that way more money is circulated within the country and even the stability of their currency rate of exchange persists if not improve. Vendors and shops get to sell more goods and make an income. Tourism also has
165its non-monetary advantages; it brings cultures and people closer. People from all around the world get to share their culture with each other and even learn more. This is a good opportunity in education. 166 167Tourism seems to have some disadvantages too; However, I believe the problems caused by tourism are not something that cannot be solved or prevented. A lot of people believe that tourism can destroy or deviate culture and cause quite an impact on visited locations such as pollution and littering. People can adhere to their own beliefs and way of life if they want to; no one can really forcefully influence someone to change from their morals and ethics Pollution can be avoided by increasing usage of environmental friendly vehicles used for tours and rents, warnings and visual education on littering and smoking, Specific times can be allocated for tours to certain areas, such as peak times where local inhabitants feel uncomfortable due to too many foreigners. 168 169Where there are problems there can always be solutions. Tourism brings great amount of advantages for any place in many ways and is a 'win-win' exchange process. The very few problems caused can always be avoided or taken care of. I believe tourism should be highly promoted, specially in traditional and poor countries with natural beauty such as Bangladesh.`,responseWordCount:375,examinerComment:"The test taker addresses both aspects of the task and presents a clear position throughout the response. Ideas are relevant, well extended and supported, although there are occasional lapses in content (as in the opening of paragraph 2 and the tendency to âpresent solutions to the disadvantagesâ in paragraph 3). However, ideas are logically organised and there is a clear progression. A range of cohesive devices is used effectively, but some under-use of connectives and substitution and some lapses in the use of referencing are noticeable. A wide range of vocabulary is used flexibly. The test taker
169can convey precise meanings, and although awkward expressions or inappropriacies in word choice occur, these are only occasional and do not limit the rating for this criterion. Likewise, a good range of sentence structures is used with a high level of accuracy resulting in frequent error-free sentences. Minor systematic errors persist, however, and punctuation is unhelpful at times. The strength of the appropriate response to the task, and the lexical resource in particular, mean overall this response is a good example of Band 7.5.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-academic-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response pages 25, 26",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-gt-2023-1a-a",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"General Training · Task 1 · response A",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"letter",officialBand:5.5,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 170 171You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 172 173You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. 174 175Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter 176 177⢠describe the situation 178⢠explain your problems and why it is difficult to work 179⢠say what kind of accommodation you would prefer 180 181Write at least 150 words. 182 183You do NOT need to write any addresses. 184 185Begin your letter as follows: 186 187Dear Sir or Madam,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`5th. March 1996 188 189Dear Sir / Madam, 190 191I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my room-mate. As you know we share one room, I can not study in the room at all any more if I still stay there. 192 193She always has friend visiting and has parties in the room. They make lots of noise and switch on the radio very loudly, for me this environment is very difficult to study and I need a quiet room. Even borrows my things without asking, it is very impolite. 194 195I request you can give me a new room next term because I have been asked her has parties in other place many times they still have parties in the room. I really can not stay in the same room with her. 196 197I would be grateful if you could change me a single room. 198 199Your faithfully, 200Catherine.`,responseWordCount:145,examinerComment:"This response does address the requirements of the task and appears in a letter format. The second bullet point is well covered, with multiple âproblemsâ presented. However, overall there is some repetition of the task rubric, and there is room for more detail to be included, for example, coverage of the third bullet point. The organisation of ideas is not wholly logical and points are not always linked together well. Despite these problems, the introduction to the letter is appropriate and the purpose of the writer is clear. There is a range of vocabulary which is generally adequate and appropriate for the task. Complex structures are attempted but, overall, sentences are kept quite simple, grammatical errors are frequent and they do cause some difficulty for the reader.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-general-training-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 8",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-gt-2023-1a-b",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"General Training · Task 1 · response B",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"letter",officialBand:7,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 201 202You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 203 204You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. 205 206Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter 207 208⢠describe the situation 209⢠explain your problems and why it is difficult to work 210⢠say what kind of accommodation you would prefer 211 212Write at least 150 words. 213 214You do NOT need to write any addresses. 215 216Begin your letter as follows: 217 218Dear Sir or Madam,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Accommodation Officer 21913, Kings Road 220Edinburgh 221 222Dear Sir, Dear Madam, 223 224I am writing you to express my dissatisfaction with my room mate and request for another accommodation next term. 225 226My main problem is that I cannot study in my room because my room-mate always has friends visiting. He also has parties, which usually ends early in the morning, several times a week. Furthermore he often borrows my things without asking me. I cannot accept this situation any longer. Especially because I have very imporant exams next term and I really must study hard. This is why I would be very grateful if I could have another room next term. It would be most convenient for me if I haden't to share my room with somebody else. 227 228I am looking forward to hear from you soon. 229 230yours faithfully, Anja Schweizer`,responseWordCount:139,examinerComment:"The content of the letter is relevant to the task. The first two bullet points are covered in detail, with several âproblemsâ given; the third bullet point could be more fully illustrated, with details of what kind of accommodation (not just a single room). The information in the letter is logically organised and the appropriate use of linking devices means that it reads quite fluently. Vocabulary is used well, spelling is accurate and there are some less common words and expressions [borrows | having to share]. There is evidence of more complex sentence structures but also some grammatical errors, although these do not affect the reader greatly.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-general-training-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 9",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-gt-2023-1b-a",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"General Training · Task 1 · response A",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"letter",officialBand:3,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 231 232You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 233 234Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. 235In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. 236 237Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter 238 239⢠describe what you like about the library 240⢠say what you donât like 241⢠make suggestions for improvements 242 243Write at least 150 words. 244 245You do NOT need to write any addresses. 246 247Begin your letter as follows: 248 249Dear Sir or Madam,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`DEAR SIR OR MADAM 250 251The local public library wants to make improvements to. their services and facilites. In order to get ideas the public. The local public library need to bring old and new boock from all countris. That is the becuse All people want to know for the world 252Stories 253 254The local public library want to big spece for cabinet to put good type line for the boock. Their is resolt becouse when peopel came to the library to get a boock easily. your library dont huve boock properly becouse their are one boock is another plese and another is another line so not get a easeur. 255 256The every boock put line with each cuntry to gether an year put difrent difrent year put sepred. Then your library put cline and good type and good man. Even you cane put man to give people servis at home to dileverd for boock som old piople are problem to come your library to take boock that is my opinion for your local public library want 257 258your fiyethfuly`,responseWordCount:176,examinerComment:"With some effort, the reader can discern ideas related to two of the bullet points but the first bullet is not covered. There is a definite attempt to address the task but the purpose of the letter is not clear and there is repetition of the minimal ideas produced. The ideas in the response are not organised in any logical way and, although linkers are present, they are not always used correctly and fail to help the reader follow the message. The lexical resource is inadequate for the task. Errors in word choice and spelling do impede meaning; some words cannot be deciphered. There is an attempt to produce sentences but this is often unsuccessful. Overall, errors predominate and there are no correct sentences, other than those that rely on the input material. This is a good example of a Band 3 performance.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-general-training-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 10",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"}
258,{id:"ielts-gt-2023-1b-b",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"General Training · Task 1 · response B",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"letter",officialBand:5.5,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 259 260You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 261 262Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. 263In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. 264 265Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter 266 267⢠describe what you like about the library 268⢠say what you donât like 269⢠make suggestions for improvements 270 271Write at least 150 words. 272 273You do NOT need to write any addresses. 274 275Begin your letter as follows: 276 277Dear Sir or Madam,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Dear Sir or Madam, 278 279I'm going to suggest some of my ideas about our local library Fist of all I would like to have a bigger parking space so that it will be more easyer for those who use the library This parking space can be done undernet the library which it will be provided with a lift. I think that this is the main problem for those who came to the library because everyone talkes about it and argue for the time wasthing to park the car around so by means of this idea the main problem can be solved. Another thing that I want to see to be ganged is to give the place a new look because it has been like this for at least 25 years. I would suggest to make a new referbisment like painting, carpentry work and more natural light espacially inside by means of big windows and sky lights. I even suggest that there can also be a small lift because elder people con take advantage of this too. 280 281In conclution the costomer care section must be prepared also to help people finding books more quicker and give them some advice as well so that this local public library will be more efficent to all kind of people`,responseWordCount:215,examinerComment:"This is a good attempt at addressing the task but unfortunately the first bullet point is completely omitted and the letter format is incomplete, as there is no âclosingâ (e.g. Best wishes, Yours Faithfully). These errors reduce the rating for Task Achievement. The other bullet points are highlighted and well covered. The response has quite a natural, clear progression, although paragraphing would assist this. There is a good range of cohesive devices that have been used appropriately and s
281ome good examples of referencing. Despite the range and effective use of lexis, there are noticeable spelling errors, but they only rarely impede communication. Sentence types are mixed and there are many attempts at complex structures, but control is uneven and there are punctuation errors. Although the response shows some features of higher-level performance, the omission of bullet point one and the incomplete letter closing limit the overall rating.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-general-training-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 11",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-gt-2023-1b-c",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"General Training · Task 1 · response C",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"letter",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 282 283You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 284 285Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. 286In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. 287 288Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter 289 290⢠describe what you like about the library 291⢠say what you donât like 292⢠make suggestions for improvements 293 294Write at least 150 words. 295 296You do NOT need to write any addresses. 297 298Begin your letter as follows: 299 300Dear Sir or Madam,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Dear Sir or Madam, 301 302This is im reference to your enquiry regarding The Suggestions to library I would like give opinion im this regard. I visited the library So many times and found facilities and Problem Side by Side. 303 304A library must Consist of Substantial amount of books, CDS and Cassets. These material Should be Placed and Organise im a Scientific manner So thet most of the people Can be benefited im the Same time. Im your library 305 306I liked the numbers of books you have. It almost Covers the major part of the requirment of People but the availability of the books at the right Place and time is the biggest Concern. In library Seating arrangements are very good too. The opening and Closing Timing realy Suits the People. 307 308But, the Situation is not at its best. You dor not have the facolity of Electronic material which you normally finds now a days. As I said the Placement of books must be given attention. I have also faced Problems when wanted to take away the books. you Should relax the Problem in this Procedure. 309 310Library Should be Calm and Safe. All the books Should be arranged as Per Catalog. This Sequential arrangement will not only ease the Pressure on Staff but also reduce the Complaints. More Electronic equipments Should indulg im the library facilities and matter available im the Shelves. 311 312Thanking you for your efforts to improve the Services for the better mant of the people im the locality.`,responseWordCount:250,examinerComment:"The test taker
312covers the task requirements and the content of the letter is relevant. The format of the letter is incomplete as there is no âclosingâ (e.g. Yours Faithfully, Best wishes), this impacts Task Achievement. All bullet points are covered and the purpose is clearly presented. The tone, though assertive, is consistently polite. There is a clear overall progression, but the arrangement of ideas within paragraphs at times detracts from the clarity of the letter. At other times, the sentences are not as fluently linked as they might be. There is a good range of vocabulary that is more than adequate. Although there are errors in collocation and word choice, there are also many examples of accurate choice and appropriate modification. A mix of simple and complex structures is used, but mistakes in punctuation and in areas such as article use and subject-verb agreements, limit the rating for this criterion. This response shows some features of higher-level performance, but weaknesses in format, organisation and grammatical control limit the overall rating to Band 6.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-general-training-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response pages 12, 13",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-gt-2023-1b-d",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"General Training · Task 1 · response D",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"letter",officialBand:7,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 1 313 314You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 315 316Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. 317In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. 318 319Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter 320 321⢠describe what you like about the library 322⢠say what you donât like 323⢠make suggestions for improvements 324 325Write at least 150 words. 326 327You do NOT need to write any addresses. 328 329Begin your letter as follows: 330 331Dear Sir or Madam,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Dear Sir or Madam, 332 333I am writing this letter to express my opinion about library services and send some suggestions to improve your operation. I have been using your library services for 25 years and even my son has started to use it as well. I really enjoy of your personel staff and the way they serve the library users. They are always polite, friendly and easy find what you want to. 334 335The library is equipped with the comfortable furniture which helps user to feel freely and work efficient. You also have the reading room with the daily newspapers, magazines and other informatic resources. I really appreciate all above-mentioned things in your library. But, I have some concerns I would like to share with you. The thing is I can not find anymore the recent edition books or books of authors of the current century. Of course, I understand we can always find them in the bookstores or in Internet. But everybody will agree with me that there is a great pleasure to read a book alive than in computer or others.resources. So, it would be nice if you check with your management to update it. And plus, I know, it would be costly but may be saving your time, to buy a computer and load a data base of your collection of books. 336 337We live and work in the 21st of century. 338 339That is all I would like to share with you. 340 341Yours faithfully,`,responseWordCount:245,examinerComment:"This is a strong response, presented in an appropriate letter format. All bullet points are clearly presented and illustrated. The presentation of information is clear throughout and cohesive devices, referencing and substitution are flexibly used, with occasional error, although the absence of effective paragraphing prevents the award of the highest ratings for this criterion. Vocabulary is also used with some flexibility and there is a good range, with evidence that the test taker
341can use less common expressions and has an awareness of collocation. There is occasional error in word form and choice. Although a variety of structures is apparent, with a mix of simple and complex sentences, the level and regularity of errors in articles, prepositions and some verb phrases limit the rating for this criterion. The density of grammatical error prevents this response from fully satisfying the descriptors of the higher band.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-general-training-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response pages 14, 15",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-gt-2023-2a-a",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"General Training · Task 2 · response A",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"opinion",officialBand:5,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 2 342 343You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 344 345Write about the following topic: 346 347In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. 348 349Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? 350 351Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 352 353Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`who should be responsible for our People. 354 355It's true that the old Peoples situation gets worse in the many countries. The first question must be what they wants and what they needs?. Especially their necessity are more benefit more respect more quiet life. 356 357If they have been working for a long time, in the any company or in the Public sector, and when they get old that's means during their retiring retire's time, company or Goverment must be responsible of their welfare, it's just my opinion. They should take care of them. 358 359In addition to company or Goverment. If they have good money they can look after theirselves, we can do something to make easier their life. 360 361for example an organization, or a voluntary association, unions. The families or Relatives's responsibility depends on their wealthy situations. If they could do, they should do anything. 362 363Goverments or their former place could supply them with life insurence and a good Social Security policy. The Social community center or old age Pensioner like in the Britain, are very useful for them. For All of them life is hard and gets harder in the their old ages. They expect more attention for and good life. 364 365The old People, if don't want lost them we should do anything that what we're able to do. 366 367Ä°. BOZYÄ°L 368P. Bozyil`,responseWordCount:223,examinerComment:"There are quite a lot of relevant ideas in the answer but they are not always well developed and sometimes they are unclear. There are some areas in the answer where the organisation becomes weak and the reader finds the message difficult to follow. Linked to this, paragraphing is not very helpful in terms of grouping ideas around a central topic. Nevertheless, the writerâs view is apparent and there is a logical flow to the points given. Although there is some appropriate vocabulary, there are a lot of errors throughout. There are some complex structures used but, overall, sentence control is very weak and this makes some parts, such as the conclusion, very hard to follow. Note: the corrections made by the test taker in this hand-written response make it difficult to read. It is better to cross out an error and rewrite the word so that the final response is clear.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-general-training-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response pages 16, 17",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-gt-2023-2a-b",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"General Training · Task 2 · response B",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"opinion",officialBand:8,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 2 369 370You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 371 372Write about the following topic: 373 374In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. 375 376Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? 377 378Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 379 380Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Who should be responsible for our old people? 381 382One of the most challeging problems of today's society is the question who should be responsible for our old people. It's not only a financial problem but also a question of the system we want our society to have. In my essay I would like to four different models 383 384Firstly, the company can be responsible for their retired employees. For this reason a special fund could be established. The advantage of this model is, if you belief in the capitalist system, that it should be the cheapest solution. A possible problem is that the companies might have competition disadvantage due to higher staff costs. 385 386A second solution is that the goveunment has to take the responsibilitiy for the old people's care. It can finance this with its tax incomes. Actually, this is the most democratic model since everybody gets as much money as he or she needs. Unfortunately, as the persent situation in our country shows, this solution seems not to work very well. The govermneent can no longer afford supporting all the old peoples. 387 388Another way of solving this problem is to give back the responsibilitiy to the individual. That means that everybody has to save money during their working life for the time after their retirement. This seems to be not a very fair model because their will certainly exist people who can't afford to save part of their salary. In this case the govermument would have to care for them. 389 390A last solution is to go back to the old model of the "big family" who cares for all their members. I don't think this is possible in our days society because the family structures have so much changed. 391 392To sum up I have to admitt that I can't find a really good solution for this problem. All models have advantges and disadvantage. Certainly we have to think about this topic much more in the future`,responseWordCount:327,examinerComment:"This is a very well-organised response which anal
392yses the topic from four different angles and fully answers the question. The ideas are relevant and well supported. The answer is easy to read. There are some inaccuracies in word choice but they have minimal impact on the reader. There are also occasional errors in spelling and grammatical structure, which prevent the awarding of the highest band scores.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-general-training-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response pages 18, 19",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-gt-2023-2b-a",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"General Training · Task 2 · response A",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"direct_questions",officialBand:4,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 2 393 394You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 395 396Write about the following topic: 397 398Shopping is becoming more and more popular as a leisure activity. However, some people feel that this has both positive and negative effects. 399 400Why is shopping so popular? 401 402What effects does its increase in popularity have on individuals and on society? 403 404Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 405 406Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`I think shopping is becoming more and more popular as a leisure activity. For example Tee Tree Plaza Shopping Cener as a biggest shopping center in Adelaide. I'm working at the take way shop in the T.T.P Shopping Center. There are huge number of costmer working around in the center every day. Many people buy lots of foods, drinks, clothes and they are hand carry or they put in the trolly. On the other hand some peple are only window shopping. 407 408I sometime worry about people who bought many things into trollys, because I think may be they are use money alot, and also some ladies who wear a looks expencive juellies. I have one friend who bankrupt his self, because he had a expencive car, a expencive cloth, etc. I think bad effect is many loan campany established these year. People easy to borrow money from loan campany and easy to go to bankalpt. People must concider about when they go to the shopping. Therefore before buy something people must consider about shopping such as for your self.`,responseWordCount:179,examinerComment:"The first part of the task (Why is shopping so popular?) is not addressed. The opening paragraph describes a large shopping centre but does not tell us why shopping is popular. The second paragraph presents the effect on individuals, but not on society as a whole. We can see that the writer thinks there are negative effects but the main ideas presented do not relate directly to this question. The relationship between ideas can be followed but there is a lack of progression in relation to the question. Some cohesive devices are used, but not always correctly and this leads to some repetition. Spelling errors are intrusive and cause strain. There is some relevant vocabulary, but overall the range is inadequate for the task. Frequent errors in syntax, verb phrases and articles keep the rating down, despite basic structures being present. The failure to address the task and the weaknesses in vocabulary and grammar limit this response to an overall Band 4.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-general-training-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 20",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-gt-2023-2b-b",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"General Training · Task 2 · response B",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"direct_questions",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 2 409 410You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 411 412Write about the following topic: 413 414Shopping is becoming more and more popular as a leisure activity. However, some people feel that this has both positive and negative effects. 415 416Why is shopping so popular? 417 418What effects does its increase in popularity have on individuals and on society? 419 420Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 421 422Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Shopping as a leisure activity is an issue that araises an endless debates. There are, therefore, many arguments about positive and negative effects, In this essay I am writing to about the reasons of shopping's popularity and the effects on individuals and on society 423 424To begin with, shopping is regarded as a kind of leisure activities such as sports, reading books and watching movies. Sometimes shopping makes a person feel relexed, it is especially true for people who have a lot of money. Most of all many shopper feel proxy satisfaction when they have the right to choose something. 425
426Of course the effects of its popularity depend on individuals and society. But there are a number of effects on individual and society in general 427Over consumption is a major problem. The excessive preference of shopping might result in over consuming And abnormal consumption lead to a violence of nature 428 429To satisfy consumers' need, a lot of companies have to exploit the nature 430 431The excessive consumption beyond normal shopping is responsible for social tension and class divisions. Because many person who can not effort to buy life commodities might feel anti-society attitude. 432 433from the above we considered two issues. These are very important issues because shopping is an inevitable part of our life. In the future I can hope that shoppers have to consider the influence on the other persons, the nature and society. And the government educate the general public do sound consumption`,responseWordCount:243,examinerComment:"The main parts of the task are addressed, although the first part (Why is shopping so popular?) is presented more fully than the second (the effects). Ideas are relevant but there is a lack of clarity which prevents a higher band score. Nevertheless, there is a clear overall progression in the response because ideas are logically organised. A range of markers is used effectively to link ideas, although there are errors in the use of some basic connectives. The test taker attempts to use a range of vocabulary and introduces some less common expressions, although with mixed success. Some expressions remain unclear, while others are used repetitively. Nevertheless, there is sufficient range and control to be adequate for the task. A mix of simple and complex structures is evident, but errors in grammar and punctuation occur and indicate limitations in control, although these errors generally do not reduce communication.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-general-training-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response pages 21, 22",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-gt-2023-2b-c",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"General Training · Task 2 · response C",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"direct_questions",officialBand:8.5,taskPrompt:`WRITING TASK 2 434 435You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 436 437Write about the following topic: 438 439Shopping is becoming more and more popular as a leisure activity. However, some people feel that this has both positive and negative effects. 440 441Why is shopping so popular? 442 443What effects does its increase in popularity have on individuals and on society? 444 445Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 446 447Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Shopping is very popular among the majority of the population, despite their age or social standards. This is due to the fact that most people find shopping as an experience which makes a difference in their day to day life Some people find themselves in a different world, surrounded by various material things which they may or may not be able to purchase. Even if they are not able to finance these, they find much pleasure in looking and feeling these things and imagining owning them some day, some people go shopping when they really want to purchase things and they prefer to look around and compare the prices before buying them. I think most people love to go shopping because, then they could meet friends, make contacts with people, and get to know what is in the latest trend. It provides them a pleasant distraction from their routine and sometimes dull life. 448 449The most important effect shopping has on an individual is that it nourishes the self-esteem, An individual may find the social-contact most gratifying and this makes people come out of their shells and be more extrovert. Purchasing something, as well as knowing that you are financially able to purchase something give more self confidence to people. 450 451The increase in popularity to go shopping has many effects on the society. People may be encouraged to go into new businesses and it will improve the economy. More job opportunities will be created for people in these businesses. Encouraged by the increase of popularity manufacturers will try to improve their products, so that the consumers can have a wide range of products at competitive prices. The overall quality of the product as well as the services provided by the sales staff will be improved. 452 453More job opportunities will be created in advertising as the manufacturers try to
453sell their product Consumers will have a better knowledge of the product so that they will not be misleaded by inferior quality products. 454 455I find shopping an interesting and pleasurable experience, as each year passes by, simply because it enriches my heart and mind.`,responseWordCount:351,examinerComment:"This is a very strong response which directly answers the question. Each part of the task is explored in depth, ideas are set out clearly and well-developed. There is a clear progression throughout the response and lapses in coherence and cohesion are minimal. The personal comment in the final paragraph means that the ending does not relate directly to the question, but this is considered a minor lapse. A wide range of vocabulary is used with flexibility and precision throughout the response and errors are very rare. The occasional minor errors or omissions in structures do not detract from the wide range, flexible and accurate use generally, and the majority of structures are error-free. This is a clear example of a strong performance at overall Band 8.5.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/Sample-tests/ielts-general-training-writing-sample-tasks-2023.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response pages 23, 24",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-cd-p1-r1",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 1 · response candidate_response_1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"bar_chart",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. 456 457The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. 458 459Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/ielts-27-computer_academic_part_1.png",candidateResponse:`The chart gives you information on how children travelled to and from school in the years 1990 and 2010. The modes of transport were by car, walking, cycling, walking and by bus and by bus only. 460A striking feature in this chart is that the number of children who travelled by car has increased from 1990 to 2010. In 1990 the most number of trips per year by children were by walking. However in 2010 it reduced to up to 6 million trips per year. The total number of trips to school by cycling and walking and bus were approximately 6 million in 1990. 461However the number of trips to school by cycling reduced to 2 million and the number of trips to school by walking and bus reduced to about 3 million in 2010. There isnât a significant change to the number of trips to school by bus. In 1990 it was about 7 million and in 2010 it came down to approximately 5 million. 462In 1990 the amount of children who travelled to and from school by car was significantly lower than the children who travelled by walking. In contrast in 2010 the number of children who travelled to school by car increased and the number of children walking to school has decreased. In 2010 children travelled to school by bus more than they cycled to school.`,responseWordCount:229,examinerComment:"The key features which are selected are covered and clearly highlighted, but reporting is somewhat mechanical and data is provided to support only some of the descriptions. There is a relevant overview in the final paragraph, with a summary of the main changes. Information and ideas are generally arranged coherently, though there is some repetition [number of trips]. Cohesive devices are used effectively and there is a clear progression overall. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility, with some less common items. For a higher band, a wider range of vocabulary could be used, within the scope of the task. There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, used fairly accurately, but again, there is not a wide enough variety of structures to achieve a higher band.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/computer-delivered-sample-tests-academic-writing/ielts-academic-writing-example-responses-to-parts-1-and-2-with-band-scores-and-examiner-comments.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 2",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-cd-p1-r2",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 1 · response candidate_response_2",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"bar_chart",officialBand:4,taskPrompt:`You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. 463 464The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. 465 466Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/ielts-27-computer_academic_part_1.png",candidateResponse:`The statistice show the number of tripe mad by children in one country over the past to years to travel to end from school using different modes of transport. 467children walking (13 million) are the by far highset, while, the children use bus (7 million) are a bit higher than the children use car in 1990. However, The children use car (11 million) in 2010 significant higher than The children use bus (5 million) in 2010. In contrest, The children walking (6 million) are Twice as high as the children use cycling (3 million) in 2010. 468overall, At the end priod there were 12,000,000 children walking in 1990, 11,000,000 children use care in 2010 and 5,000,000 children use bus.`,responseWordCount:119,examinerComment:"This response does generally try to address the requirements of the task but the key features are not adequately covered. Limited detail is provided, for example, there is no reference to the âwalking and busâ categories. Information is presented, but it is difficult to identify organisation and there is no clear progression within the response. There are some cohesive devices but these are mostly inaccurate. The range of vocabulary is not minimally adequate for the task, it is basic and used repetitively. There is limited control over spelling, and errors cause confusion [tripe mad/trips made]. A limited range of sentence forms is used and although some structures are produced accurately, errors are frequent and this does impede meaning.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/computer-delivered-sample-tests-academic-writing/ielts-academic-writing-example-responses-to-parts-1-and-2-with-band-scores-and-examiner-comments.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 3",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-cd-p2-r1",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 2 · response candidate_response_1",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"opinion",officialBand:5.5,taskPrompt:`You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words. 469 470Write about the following topic: 471 472The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. 473 474To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? 475 476Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`I completly disagree with the written statment. I believe that most of the people in the world have more information about their health and also about how they can improve their healthy conditions. 477Nowadays, information about how harmful is to smoke for our bodies can be seen in many packets of cigars. This is a clear example how things can change from our recent past. 478There is a clear trend in the diminishing of smokers and if this continues it will have a positive impact in our health. 479On the other hand, the alimentation habbits are changing all over the world and this can affect peopleâs health. However every one can choose what to eat every day. Mostly everybody, from developed societies, know the importance of having a healthy diet. 480Advances such as the information showed in the menus of fast food restaurants will help people to have a clever choice before they choose what to eat. 481Another important issue that I would like to mention is how medicine is changing. There are new discovers and treatments almost every week and that is an inequivoque sintom of how things are changing in order to improve the worldâs health.`,responseWordCount:198,examinerComment:"A clear position is presented from the outset, supported by relevant ideas. These would require further development to achieve a higher score. It is also useful to note, this response does not meet the minimum word count for Task 2 of 250 words, so there is room for further development. Information and ideas are generally arranged coherently and there is a clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are used effectively, but paragraphing is not always logical. A range of vocabulary is attempted, although there is a lack of precision in word choice and there are some errors in spelling and word formation. There also appears to be some interference from the test takerâs first language, e.g. âalimentationâ, but these features do not make the answer difficult to understand. There is a mix of sentence forms, but the level of error is too high to achieve a higher band score.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/computer-delivered-sample-tests-academic-writing/ielts-academic-writing-example-responses-to-parts-1-and-2-with-band-scores-and-examiner-comments.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 4",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"ielts-acad-cd-p2-r2",sourceKey:"ielts-27",sourceLabel:"IELTS official sample tasks",sourceReference:"Academic · Task 2 · response candidate_response_2",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"opinion",officialBand:7.5,taskPrompt:`You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words. 482 483Write about the following topic: 484 485The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. 486 487To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? 488 489Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Recently, there have been a lot of discussions about health and whether it is going to improve or not. In my opinion, I think that people will become unhealthier in the future than they are now. 490There are many reasons that support the idea of people becoming unhealthy in the future. 491Firstly, one reason is that of food. People tend to eat more fast food nowadays. They tend to treat themselves with sweets and chocolate whenever they want. This appears to be because people are busier now than they used to be. So, people donât have a chance to cook or even learn the art of cookery. Also, having a lot of unhealthy food can lead to obesity and it could be a serious issue in the future. Another reason is that technology is developing everyday. Young people enjoy buying new gadgets and the latest devices. This has a negative impact on their health, especially when they enjoy video games. Spending long hours looking at a screen can lead to bad eyesight and obesity as well. Yet another reason is that laziness is a big issue. Different forms of exercise might disappear in the future because people donât like sports. Also, people prefer spending most of their time on the internet and the internet is growing every single day. 492Other people might disagree and say that health will improve in the future. They believe that new sports and new ways to exercise will appear in the future. However, I donât think it can happen since the majority of people spend less time outdoors. Moreover, other people believe that technology will try and help people improve their health. For example, there have been some games released on the Wii console that makes people exercise but technology is developing more in a negative way. For instance, many phone industries are developing new applications everyday and todayâs generation likes to follow every trend. 493This prevents people to go outside to exercise. They like to spend more time on the internet downloading new programmes or reading gossips about celebraties. This affects peopleâs health badly. 494In conclusion, I believe that peopleâs health is affected negatively by fast food, technology and sports and it will be a problem in the future.`,responseWordCount:375,examinerComment:"This is a strong response. A clear position is presented at the outset and some ideas are explored to support it. An alternative position is also considered but rejected. Ideas are logically organised and there is a clear progression throughout the response. Cohesive devices are generally used flexibly, but there is some overuse of sequencers in paragraph 2 [Firstly | So | Also | Yet]. Paragraphing is generally effective but could perhaps be used more appropriately by breaking down paragraphs 2 and 3. There is a wide range of vocabulary with good use of less common items as well as evidence of higher-level features, such as âsofteningâ, e.g. âThey tend toâ, âThis appears to beâ, and âmight disagreeâ. Errors in spelling and word formation are rare. There is also a variety of complex structures with frequent error-free sentences, though some errors do occur and there is some overuse of rather short sentence forms.",sourceUrl:"https://ielts.org/cdn/computer-delivered-sample-tests-academic-writing/ielts-academic-writing-example-responses-to-parts-1-and-2-with-band-scores-and-examiner-comments.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Official PDF · response page 5",sourceConfidence:"official_public_pdf"},{id:"oipm1-academic-example-1-task-1-response-1",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 1 with Audio CD",sourceReference:"Volume 1 · Academic example 1 · response 1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:5,taskPrompt:`The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. 495 496Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 497 498Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/practice-materials-oipm1_academic_example_1_task_1.jpg",candidateResponse:`The Japanese Tourists started travelling to Australia in 1985 were around 4.5 millions and in the following year it had gone up 1/4 million more than 1985 The number of tourist increased steadily till 1990 from 1/2 million to 1 1/2 million and at the same time there was a fall in the figure in 1991 about 1/4 million tourists comparing the 1990 as one can say it surge. In 1992 it picked up again and gone upto 11 3/4 million tourists (ie) 3/4 million more than the year 1991. In 1993 it reached up 12 million tourists and in 1994 and gone steadily increased till 1995. In 1994 it reached 13 3/4 million and in 1995 it touched around 15 1/2 million tourists. 499In the same time if you talk in percentage of the Japanese tourists between 1985 to 1995 (ie) Australia's share of Japan's tourist Market it stood from 2 percentage to 6 percentage in 1995 and at the same time it reached its peak in 1994 more than 6.25%. When you see the graph it gone upto 4.9% in 1989 and there was a surge again in 1990, and it was about 4.25%. The increasement started from 1991 till 1994 at the rate of 2% approximately every year and at last in 1995 the percentage dropped about .25%. 500The highest Japanese tourists travelling abroad was in 1995 and at the same time highest percentage was in 1994 (ie) 6.25%`,responseWordCount:242,examinerComment:"This answer includes the main points of the information but these are inaccurately reported and hard to identify because so much detail is given. The figures are confused and sometimes inaccurate. The candidate has tried to organise the information logically, but linking is repetitive and not always clear. The range of vocabulary is enough to describe the information, and spelling is quite well controlled. The writer tries to use a wider range at times but makes errors in word choice and word f
500ormation. Similarly, the writer tries to use some complex sentences, but errors in grammar, especially in verb phrases, are common and make the writing difficult to understand in places. This is a good example of a Band 5 response.",sourceUrl:"https://books.google.com/books/about/Official_IELTS_Practice_Materials_1_with.html?id=QQI3ngAACAAJ",sourcePageLabel:"Book page 64",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm1-academic-example-1-task-2-response-2",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 1 with Audio CD",sourceReference:"Volume 1 · Academic example 1 · response 2",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:3.5,taskPrompt:`In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. 501 502Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 503 504Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 505 506Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`There are many kinds of work people interested in at companies. 507Young people are not enough work experience in their lives so they consider to try to work in a shop. 508 509Most people need to work experience in their lives before they apply to the many kinds of companies. They interested in work in their live and have experience because they want to know how to do work in a area of position in their lives. 510 511People enjoy their work experience. When young people are learn to how to work they have good experience because they can understand and their parents of work for the stricts. However if they do not have work experience they don't understand what do they feel therefore It is important to them. 512 513Many people have confidence and resposibility. When they have work experience. They need to have confidence about their work because. If they do not have their confidence their job is not succeed so they need to have confidence. Also they need to have responsibility because if they do not have responsibility they have trouble with customer therefore that company is not reliable from coustomer. Also consumer have give to claim to the company so the company have problem. However when young people learn to these things it is good for them. 514 515Many countries children do not know how to strict area about work place. They usually go to school and studying so they do not know how to strict place therefore if they have work experience they can lean and think about work.`,responseWordCount:260,examinerComment:"This answer is obviously related to the topic, but there is no clear response to any part of the question and it is difficult to identify any relevant point of view. There is some attempt to use paragraphs and basic connectives, but there is little logical progression. Instead the ideas are very repetitive and circular both within and between paragraphs. The range of vocabulary is limited and so there is frequent repetition of basic vocabulary and words taken from the question. There are occasional examples of a wider range but there are also errors in word choice and spelling that confuse the reader. The candidate attempts to use a range of structures, but the lack of control of grammar and punctuation results in strain for the reader. Although the writing has some features of Band 4 performance, no part of the question is successfully addressed and this limits the rating to Band 3.5.",sourceUrl:"https://books.google.com/books/about/Official_IELTS_Practice_Materials_1_with.html?id=QQI3ngAACAAJ",sourcePageLabel:"Book page 65",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm1-academic-example-2-task-1-response-3",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 1 with Audio CD",sourceReference:"Volume 1 · Academic example 2 · response 3",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:7,taskPrompt:`The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity. 516 517Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 518 519Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/practice-materials-oipm1_academic_example_2_task_1.jpg",candidateResponse:`The diagram illustrates how to use water in order to generate electricity. 520 521The diagram shows that the process of producing electricity involves as natural resources, like water, as well as special human-built equipment. 522
523First of all, the sun energy evaporates some of the water from a sea. Evaporation forces clouds to form. While the rain goes the water is collected in a purpose built reservoir. Afterwards, from a dam the water goes through a valve. This movement force a turbine to rotate and this process generates electricity. 524 525Finally, the electricity is transferred by high voltage Cables to a transformer station. The stransformer station supplies city buildings such as schools and hospitals with electricity. 526 527Moreover, the diagram indicates that the water which is involved in the process is used repeatedly. From the tourbin it goes to a pump and than returnes to the reservoir. 528 529Overall, the illustration shows that there are 3 main steps in order to generate electricity: collecting the water, rotating the tourbin and accumulating electricity in the transformer station.`,responseWordCount:171,examinerComment:"This answer includes a clear overview of the process and the information is well-selected with good coverage of the key points. Some of the points could however be further extended. The candidate has organised the information logically with a clear progression of information through the answer. Some good linkers are used although there are occasional mistakes in their use. The writer has made efforts to adapt the vocabulary in the task but there are spelling mistakes with some words. There are a number of complex grammatical structures which are used accurately and although there are some errors in word order and the use of articles, these do not reduce the clarity of the writing.",sourceUrl:"https://books.google.com/books/about/Official_IELTS_Practice_Materials_1_with.html?id=QQI3ngAACAAJ",sourcePageLabel:"Book page 66",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm1-academic-example-2-task-2-response-4",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 1 with Audio CD",sourceReference:"Volume 1 · Academic example 2 · response 4",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`Many old buildings are protected by law because they are part of a nation's history. However, some people think old buildings should be knocked down to make way for new ones because people need houses and offices. 530 531How important is it to maintain old buildings? 532Should history stand in the way of progress? 533 534Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 535 536Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Old buildings not only are still useful, but also keep the history alive. Not all of them have enough history to say that it's better to maintain it. In my opinion only the buildings that really involve nation's history could be maintain, because its will remain to the people the traditions, culture, and stories that relavant people lived before, and this is part of the formal education of each person. 537 538Most of the countries of the world at least have important people that help to constructed the nation, or fight for the independence, or are just important because They changed the social, political, economical or even musical environment of their countries. When people see the places where this people lived and where they develop their acts, these places or buildings help to reconstruct the stories and are useful for imagine how was the situation before. So every time that people will see This buildings or monuments they are able to remain the history and also learn about it. Finally nowadays human beings are capable to maintain this buildings in good conditions, even they can modernize them but without change their principal structure and fronts. 539 540On the other hand it's true that the cities of the world have to continue with its development. Therefore they have to build new buildings that allow people work with better and modern environments that let them work efficiently and also that offer development resources. New buildings brings new technologye as well, that could improve the efficiency, productivity and production of different c
540ompanies, organizations, shops, offices, etc. 541 542In conclussion some buildings would be knocked down to make way progress and development. However that old buildings that have important history for human beings should be maintain. If we knocked down these buildings we would knocked down our traditions, culture, history and even some part of our lives.`,responseWordCount:310,examinerComment:"The answer addresses both questions in the task, but the second question is only treated in a general way and so this aspect is not sufficiently developed. Nevertheless there is a clear argument that progresses logically in spite of some repetition. Connectives are used but linking between sentences is sometimes omitted, while referencing is not always clear. The range of language is adequate for the task, and there are examples of some less common words, which are used appropriately. The candidate makes mistakes in word form and spelling, but the meaning is still clear. There is a range of structures, though complex structures are not always successful and errors in grammar and tense are noticeable. However, these do not usually cause problems for the reader. Overall this is a clear example of a Band 6 response.",sourceUrl:"https://books.google.com/books/about/Official_IELTS_Practice_Materials_1_with.html?id=QQI3ngAACAAJ",sourcePageLabel:"Book pages 67, 68",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm1-academic-example-3-task-1-response-5",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 1 with Audio CD",sourceReference:"Volume 1 · Academic example 3 · response 5",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:4,taskPrompt:`The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996. 543 544Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 545 546Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/practice-materials-oipm1_academic_example_3_task_1.jpg",candidateResponse:`When we see the graph, domestic household is different of others. According to the graph number of complaints remained stable about factories noise from 1984 to 1966. It means most of skills and something made from factories. However society is getting change, so in the future people don't have to go factories, they can do most of things, at home. Maybe factories will be decrease. Number of complaints dropped steadily about road works from 1980 to 1996. It shows us most of road works, were formed in the past. Now days people don't have to road works because there already were todays. Number of complaints increased sharply about traffic noise from 1990 to 1996. It remained the same from 1980 to 1984. then it dropped from 1985 to 1988. However it increased from 1988, it means, many people have their own car and society is getting change. Now-days cars are necessary in our life and it will be increase continues. 547 548Number of complaints reached almost peak about domestic household in 1996. It increased suddenly from 1990, and it is highest to others. It means people want domestic and many people did that.`,responseWordCount:192,examinerComment:"There is no introduction to the topic in this answer, so the opening is rather confusing. The candidate has tried to describe the key information but gives no figures and the focus is lost in the irrelevant explanations and excessive detail. The information is not well selected or logically organised, so it is difficult to follow the message. New points are not linked into the summary and relationships between points are not clearly signalled, although some basic linking words are used. The range of vocabulary is limited and even though the writer tries to use a range of structures, there is a lack of grammatical control and frequent errors in quite basic structures. This is a good example of a Band 4 response.",sourceUrl:"https://books.google.com/books/about/Official_IELTS_Practice_Materials_1_with.html?id=QQI3ngAACAAJ",sourcePageLabel:"Book page 69",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm1-academic-example-3-task-2-response-6",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 1 with Audio CD",sourceReference:"Volume 1 · Academic example 3 · response 6",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:5,taskPrompt:`Television is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television. 549 550To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 551 552Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 553 554Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`the evolution in technology nowadays is very rampant. People do not even recognize changes from one to another. There are a lot of modern equipment, appli
554ances and even simple machines are available in the market. Competitors in business industries keep doing transformation, product development and more research works. Sometimes their own products compete each other. One of these modern equipments or appliances in the market that is very saleable is the telivision. 555 556Telivision dominates the communication and entertainment industries long time ago. Starting from the Black and White TV, here comes the Colored TV. In addition, Cable TV is now available in the market. In Southeast Asia, particularly in the Philippines, the most saleable appliances in the market is the television. Even the ordinary vendors in the market or in the side walk avail one so that they can watch telivision while working. Businessmen and employees watch TV for news and general information. Housekeepers and housewives, together with the children entertain themselves with the variety shows and soap operas through television. Everyone, in all walk of life uses telivision as one of their 'mate' in life there are some issues that modernization, new technology including television is dangerous for children or for the whole family because it destroys a sense of community and belongingness and sometime it influence the young people in their principle in life. 557 558In conclusion, telivision is a modern appliance that can help a lot in the life of each and everyone. It has it's own disadvantages too. It can do good or can influence bad paradigms to the people, but I believe that the result of the use or watching TV depends on the person or family themselves. Together w/ the development is the consequence of having great discipline in oneself.`,responseWordCount:295,examinerComment:"This answer does not focus sufficiently on the question and a lot of irrelevant material is included. It is difficult to identify the candidate's position on the topic or to extract the main ideas. There is some organisation, but the development of the answer is not wholly logical. A range of linking words is used, but these are sometimes inaccurate and in some sections the candidate does not clearly signal how ideas relate to each other. There is a clear attempt to use an ambitious range of vocabulary, but there are a lot of inappropriate choices that indicate limited control. Similarly, the writer uses a mix of complex and simple sentences but makes fairly basic errors. Although there are some features of higher level performance in this script, the lack of focus and clear development limit the overall rating to Band 5.",sourceUrl:"https://books.google.com/books/about/Official_IELTS_Practice_Materials_1_with.html?id=QQI3ngAACAAJ",sourcePageLabel:"Book page 70",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm1-general-training-example-1-task-1-response-7",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 1 with Audio CD",sourceReference:"Volume 1 · General Training example 1 · response 7",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"general_task1",officialBand:6.5,taskPrompt:`There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. 559 560Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter 561- describe the problems 562- explain how these problems are affecting the public 563- suggest what changes could be made 564 565Write at least 150 words. 566 567You do NOT need to write any addresses. 568 569Begin your letter as follows: 570Dear Sir or Madam,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Dear Sir or Madam, 571Hi. I write you this letter to report some problems with public transport in my area recently. 572I live in 'Blair Athol' and usually take Bus 224 from my home to Mawson Lakes Campus. But in the last 4 weeks, the bus has been frequently late. Sometimes the bus arrived late up to 20 minutes. The timetable seems useless. As a result, I have been caught late for the courses several times, which is embarrassing. I don't know what the reason is for the problem, but it's obviously affecting people's regular lives. For instance, if a staff comes to work late, he may lose his customers, and even worse, he may lose his job. People may endure a few times of the late transport, but they cannot hold on for many times. People need precise and accurate arrangement with their lives. 573So, I suggest you could solve this problem as soon as possible. Please notify the drivers to be on time. If current timetable is outdated, please notify the public the change. I wish this can be solved after you receive my letter. 574Thanks for your attention. 575Regards 576Yours`,responseWordCount:193,examinerComment:"This letter has a clear purpose and all the content is relevant. The bullet points are well-covered but could be more fully extended. Apart from the overly informal opening and closing, the tone of the letter is consistently appropriate. The organisation of the letter is logical and there is very good use throughout of linking devices. The vocabulary resource is large enough to allow for some flexible and precise use, although there are some inappropriacies and occasional spelling errors. Errors in word order are noticeable, as is omission of prepositions and articles, but complex sentences including relative clauses and conditionals are accurate.",sourceUrl:"https://books.google.com/books/about/Official_IELTS_Practice_Materials_1_with.html?id=QQI3ngAACAAJ",sourcePageLabel:"Book page 71",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm1-general-training-example-1-task-2-response-8",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 1 with Audio CD",sourceReference:"Volume 1 · General Training example 1 · response 8",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:7,taskPrompt:`Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family than eating out in restaurants or canteens. 577 578Do you agree or disagree? 579 580Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 581 582Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Everyone has to eat. The question is, where to eat ? You may cook and eat at home, or just eat out in restourants or canteens. My personal opinion is that eating at home is better for the individual and the family than eating out. 583
584First, it has no doubt that cooking and eating at home can save a lot of money. Generally, the cost of eating in restourants is much higher than eating at home. By cooking at home, you don't have to pay the labor fee for the chef, and don't have to pay tips to the waiter. What you have to do is just a little hand operation and a little time. From supermarkets, you can buy cheap vegetables and meat, which may cost only 10 percent of the same food in a restourant. Sometimes, you can get cheaper food in discount time. Especially, a big family may enjoy the method, as the monthly cost would be less. 585 586Second, you can freely select your favorite food to cook. A restaurant cannot always provide you with delicious food. The taste of food in restourants is usually designed for the public, which is not suitable for a particular guest. If you miss the taste of your mum's soup, it's not likely to find the same one in a restourant. In this case, the best choice is to cook by yourself, to reproduce your mum's food to the best you can. 587 588Finaly, it's obvious that eating at home is more healthy and clean. You don't know whether it's dirty in the restourants, and also you don't know whether the food is fresh. But by cooking at home, you can know everything about the cooking materials. Moreover, it's easy to control the usage of fat and oil, unless you don't care to become too fat. 589 590In brief, I believe that eating at home is healthy and clean. If people want to save money, eating at home is also a good choice. In addition, people can cook what they like as well. So I personally prefer eating at home.`,responseWordCount:347,examinerComment:"This writer states a clear position at the outset and maintains it to the end, where all the arguments are summed up and the position re-stated. The answer progresses clearly to its conclusion, with some good use of cohesive devices. Paragraphing is also well-handled and helps the reader. The ideas are logically organised and each main idea is supported with additional information. There are some errors in referencing. The range of vocabulary includes some original and less frequent items specific to the task. There are some inappropriate word choices, but the meaning is still clear. Spelling errors are rare, and there is a good variety of sentence structures.",sourceUrl:"https://books.google.com/books/about/Official_IELTS_Practice_Materials_1_with.html?id=QQI3ngAACAAJ",sourcePageLabel:"Book pages 72, 73",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm1-general-training-example-2-task-1-response-9",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 1 with Audio CD",sourceReference:"Volume 1 · General Training example 2 · response 9",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"general_task1",officialBand:5.5,taskPrompt:`You recently bought a large expensive item but when it was delivered to your home you found some problems with it. 591 592Write a letter to the manager of the shop. In your letter 593- give details of what you bought 594- describe the problems with your item 595- say what you want the shop to do 596 597Write at least 150 words. 598 599You do NOT need to write any addresses. 600 601Begin your letter as follows: 602Dear Sir or Madam,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Dear Sir or Madam 603 604I feel I must express my disappointment. 605I have received a new air conditioning system which has heating system as well. It is a new design in this year, convenient button function, and can fix on the wall. When I received, I was absolutely delighted. However I was using for 3 nights. Unfortunately I found some problems with it. Firstly If I switch it on it was such a big noisy. Secondly, as we all know nowadays very cold. Thus I bought this incredibly heating system doesn't working. if I turn on the heating switch only blew the cold wind. 606 607Consequently I couldn't sleep over very well. 608In addition, I had ordered marvelous violet colour. However I received fair beige colour. it was quite unbalance with my furnitures. I am still very upsetting. I think that is not reasonable cost. I paid over £2000. 609I think you would consider to give me discount it if I go to your shop again. And Changing the another air conditiong system and heating system which is violet colour as soon as possible. 610I look forward to hearing from you shortly 611 612Yours faithfully`,responseWordCount:193,examinerComment:"This answer generally provides all the information required by the task, but the purpose seems incomplete without reference to the shop at the start of the letter. There is no reference to this being an item bought at the shop, even though it is evident that the writer is complaining. The answer is organised and there is a clear progression in the letter. The writing contains a range of connectives and s
612ome of these are used effectively to relate ideas. In some sections, however, these cohesive devices are used mechanically at the start of almost every sentence. The range of vocabulary is sufficient for the task and is a strong feature of the answer, in spite of some inappropriate word choice and some errors in word form. There is also a range of structures, with a mix of simple and complex sentences. However, control of syntax, basic grammar and punctuation is weak at times and errors are quite frequent. The flaws in setting out the purpose of the letter and the frequent grammatical errors limit this script to Band 5.5.",sourceUrl:"https://books.google.com/books/about/Official_IELTS_Practice_Materials_1_with.html?id=QQI3ngAACAAJ",sourcePageLabel:"Book page 74",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm1-general-training-example-2-task-2-response-10",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 1 with Audio CD",sourceReference:"Volume 1 · General Training example 2 · response 10",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:4.5,taskPrompt:`People should be allowed to continue to work for as long as they want to, and not be forced to retire at a particular age such as 60 or 65. 613 614Do you agree or disagree? 615 616Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 617 618Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`In this task two, I want to like the people should be allowed to continue to work for as long as they want to. 619 620If the people are working some concern, or the Government, they are always very free in mind, and they can "earn more money". If one can earn lot, he spend it some thing. Like most of the people want to build a house first, than they get many facilities. All are wanted now-a-days earn more money and they buy a car, all well furnished house, furniture, good articles, [espicially ladies spend lot of the money in her valuable articles, such as gold chain, hellace, bangles, and earings etc...]. 621 622In this context, I want to clarify one thing. That is if the Government or such concern are to restrict once "retirement", All of a sudden people will depressed. 623 624In my opinion, one who is elegible for working in his line, the company or the Government will not "disturbed" or forced to retire the people. 625 626The concern can give all the facilities to their employers, like, House Rent, conveyance allowance, educational allowance and the most important thing is the medical facilities are provide for their employers. one who satisfied in his or her job, they can wonderfully worked for (his or her) concern. So the Government or any other companies are always give much more important to the employers. 627 628In my opinion again I will tell the companies & Governments "do not forced to retire at a particular age such as 60 or 65" In a person who is not able to work in his 50th year, then he applied voluntary retirement. In this aspect the concern must provide all the benefit to this person. Such as, provident fund, ESI, Medical allowance and retirement-benefits. 629 630One who is satisfied his job, his life is automatically pleasent and his mind is peacefull. So the major companies are give more and more facilities. 631 632Finally, I would like to request all the concerns, do not forced to retire at a particular age limit in his employers. Please allowed people should enjoy and continue to work for as long as they want. This is in my view point, to tell the good companies and all the Governments. 633 634Thanking you.`,responseWordCount:376,examinerComment:"The answer focuses on the question, but is quite repetitive. Ideas are not well developed and lack clarity, and some supporting ideas seem to be irrelevant. It is difficult to follow the argument or to understand how ideas relate to each other. Linking expressions and paragraphing are used, but not appropriately, and this creates problems for the reader. The range of vocabulary is the best feature of this answer as it is sufficient for a discussion of the topic, in spite of repetition of some inappropriate word choices. The control of grammar and sentence structures is weak, however, and the number of errors makes it difficult for the reader to extract the meaning at times. The range of vocabulary raises this
634script to Band 4.5.",sourceUrl:"https://books.google.com/books/about/Official_IELTS_Practice_Materials_1_with.html?id=QQI3ngAACAAJ",sourcePageLabel:"Book pages 75, 76",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm2-academic-example-1-task-1-response-1",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 2 with DVD",sourceReference:"Volume 2 · Academic example 1 · response 1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:5.5,taskPrompt:`The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. 635 636Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 637 638Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/practice-materials-oipm2_a_t1_r1_task.jpg",candidateResponse:`The charts shows the oil resources held, together with the proportions consumed within the same area each year, in different areas of the world 639 640It is obvious that the region holding the most oil sources is the Middle East, with 56.52%, over a half of total world oil resources. While in the United States and Asia, the level of oil consumed each year is far more away from the oil resources they hold. The percentage of total world oil consumption of United States and Asia are 23.48% and 26.21% respectively. They are the two highest oil consumption region in the world. 641 642Another place that is worth mentioned will be the Western Europe. With about twenty percent of total world oil consumption, the Western Europe merely holds less than 1.5% of the oil resources in the world. 643 644Regions that are not mentioned above have the close percentage between oil holding and consuming. Whereas Canada has the higher level of oil holding than consuming, the respective figures are 14.84% and 2.48%. 645 646Overall, the charts suggest that Middle East is the only majority of oil resources held, While Asia, United States and Western have the highest level of oil resources imported.`,responseWordCount:198,examinerComment:"This response describes the main points of the bar graphs and provides a summary of their most significant features. However, the figures are not well selected to support or highlight the key features, there are some minor inaccuracies, and details are missing, with only half of the countries on the graphs being mentioned. There is an overall progression to the response, though the middle section could have been structured more clearly and coherently by use of linkers. There are no errors in spelling, but this accuracy is achieved by staying within a limited range of vocabulary, and by relying on repetition of the phrases supplied on the question paper. Grammatical errors occur but are not frequent or serious enough to affect communication, and there is a range of sentence types which includes some complex structures.",sourceUrl:"https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/take-ielts/prepare/books",sourcePageLabel:"Book page 64",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm2-academic-example-1-task-2-response-2",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 2 with DVD",sourceReference:"Volume 2 · Academic example 1 · response 2",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:4.5,taskPrompt:`In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people. 647 648What do you think may be the reasons for this? 649What problems might this cause in society? 650 651Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 652 653Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`It's generally supposed that the younger people should respect and take care of older people. Nowadays, many people think that the older people are the problem of modern society. However, How people should give the important older people in this present time for preventing the problem in society. 654 655In many countries are facing of this problem because many people are responsible everything in their lifes, For example, One person has many roles in society such as parents, boss and teacher etc. This reason make someone who forget older people. Some countries, many older people live alone which the government has not pe
655nsion and facilities for them. In my country this is the problem because older population are increasing every year. They don't have a house for living, don't have money and children and cousins don't take care of them. The government must be help them by providing many houses which this case invest a lot of money to making this project. 656 657On the other hand, In some countries, The government help and support the older people for instance, European people have pension and good facilities such as, free for seeing doctor don't paying when taking the public transportation. I totally agree with this view that my country provide it for them. It is the good reason`,responseWordCount:216,examinerComment:"There are two main problems with this response. Firstly, it is too short and does not meet the length requirement for a Task 2 response (a minimum of 250 words). Secondly, most of this response is irrelevant. From the seventh line, it goes off the topic of respect and instead discusses what provisions governments should make for the elderly. Apart from these two major weaknesses, there are some good points about this response. It shows evidence of organisation in terms of an opening paragraph which introduces the topic, and two concluding sentences at the end. Linking devices are quite well used throughout to connect the different ideas (although the response as a whole lacks coherence in relation to the actual question). The vocabulary is the best feature of this writing: in spite of the largely irrelevant argument, there is a sufficient range of words which specifically relate to the topic, and spelling errors are very few. As for grammar, the writer attempts complex structures, but these are faulty, and mistakes occur with even simple present verbs.",sourceUrl:"https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/take-ielts/prepare/books",sourcePageLabel:"Book page 65",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm2-academic-example-2-task-1-response-3",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 2 with DVD",sourceReference:"Volume 2 · Academic example 2 · response 3",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:7.5,taskPrompt:`The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. 658 659Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 660 661Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/practice-materials-oipm2_a_t1_r3_task.jpg",candidateResponse:`The diagrams indicate the alterations being made to the school from 2004 to 2024 to accomodate for the predicted increase in student numbers from 600 to 1,000. In 2004, the school only has one car park with a path leading from the main entrance to the sports field. The path seperates the two school buildings which, together with the sports field, are located north. Trees are present north, north-east, east, and west of the school. In comparison the school planned for 2024 has two carparks and three school buildings. The path in the 2024 plan links building three to buildings one and two, which are planned to be joined together by building infrastructure. A road is envisioned to connect carpark two with carpark one. In addition the sports field will be reduced in size and relocated south of its previous location below carpark two. The surrounding trees remain in similar positions only requiring a few trees to be repositioned or replanted around new infrastructure. 662 663These changes to the school buildings, road, path, carparks and sportsfield aim to house the extra 400 students planned to be attending the school in 2024. The only decrease in size of any part of the school from 2004 to 2024 is the sports field in order to accomodate school building number three.`,responseWordCount:217,examinerComment:"This is a very accurate description of the two diagrams, which covers every aspect of the information shown. There is nothing inaccurate or irrelevant in this response with regard to content. It has a clear introductory sentence, and a summing-up at the end. The middle section of the response is logically arranged by year, though this first paragraph is rather long and could usefully have been split into three. Cohesive devices are few, but flexible, and help the reader when they are used. The range of vocabulary used is quite wide and precise, and includes several low-frequency items used appropriately. Errors in word choice and spelling occur rarely. A wide range of grammatical structures and all punctuation are accurately used throughout, but this criterion is not a 9 as the choice of tense could be more precise and consistent.",sourceUrl:"https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/take-ielts/prepare/books",sourcePageLabel:"Book page 66",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm2-academic-example-2-task-2-response-4",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 2 with DVD",sourceReference:"Volume 2 · Academic example 2 · response 4",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:7,taskPrompt:`It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. 664 665To what extent do you agree or disagree? 666 667Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 668 669Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`I MOST DEFINITELY AGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT, AN
669D I AM CONVINCED THAT IF MORE PEOPLE WOULD SHARE THIS AGREEMENT, MANY OF TODAY'S PROBLEMS COULD BE AVOIDED AND, UNDER THE RISK OF SOUNDING CANDID, "THE WORLD WOULD BE A BETTER PLACE". 670 671IF ONE IS AWARE OF THE GENERAL, WESTERN (WELL, GLOBAL REALLY) CIVILIZATIONAL TENDENCY TOWARDS LIVING WITHIN CLOSED GROUPS, ALMOST FROM "BIRTH TO DEATH", ONE MAY FIND THAT ADRESSING THE SUBJECT AT THE EARLIEST MOMENT POSSIBLE IS A REASONABLE POSSIBILITY OF STARTING TO FIGHT THAT TENDENCY. CHILDREN ARE NATURALLY KEPT, IN THE FIRST FEW YEARS OF THEIR LIVES, IN A VERY LIMITED, CONTROLLED ENVIRONMENT, AND THEN GRADUALLY START OPENING UP TO THE WORLD AROUND THEM. SO IT'S VERY IMPORTANT THAT, WHEN THEY START DOING SO, THEY ALSO BEGIN TO UNDERSTAND WHAT SURROUNDS THEM - PEOPLE, RACES, SOCIAL BACKGROUNDS, FAMILY STRUCTURES, RELIGIOUS BELIEFS, ETC. - AS PART OF THE REAL WORLD WHERE THEY WILL LIVE AND BE CALLED TO CHANGE, IMPROVE OR CONDITION. 672 673THE ALTERNATIVE TO THIS WILL BE, AS IT IS ALREADY TODAY, THAT CHILDREN WILL LIVE MORE AND MORE ISOLATED FROM REALITY IN ALL ITS VARIED, AND SOMETIMES CRUEL, FEATURES. I BELIEVE THESE CHILDREN, NOT HAVING HAD A CHANCE TO DIRECTLY COMMUNICATE AND INTERACT WITH OTHER KINDS OF CHILDREN, WILL FEAR AND EVEN REJECT SUCH DIFFERENCES. IGNORANCE AND MISUNDERSTANDING IS (HAS BEEN AND WILL BE) ONE IMPORTANT SOURCE OF CONFLICT, AND SOCIAL CONFLICT IN THE FIRST INSTANCE. 674 675I THINK I CAN SAY I WAS FORTUNATE ENOUGH TO HAVE ATTENDED AN ELEMENTARY SCHOOL WHICH WAS CHARACTERIZED, AMONG OTHER THINGS, FOR JUST SUCH A FEATURE: EVEN THOUGH IT WAS A PRIVATE SCHOOL, WHERE PARENTS WHO COULD AFFORD IT HAD TO PAY A SUBSTANCIAL FEE, IT HAD A POLICY OF TAKING IN CHILDREN WITH ALL KINDS OF DIFFERENCES. I GOT ACCOSTUMED TO HAVING COLEAGUES AND FRIENDS OF LOWER SOCIAL BACKGROUNDS (ECONOMICALLY SPEAKING), WHO WHERE STATE-FINANCED TO ATTEND THE SCHOOL; WITH DIFFERENT LEARNING HABILITIES (DEAF, MENTALLY DISAVANTAGED, ETC.); AND OF DIFFERENT ETHNIC BACKGROUNDS (ASIAN AND FROM PORTUGUESE AFRICAN EX-COLONIES). 676 677I AM VERY CERTAIN THAT THIS PART OF MY EDUCATION HELPED ME BETTER UNDERSTANDING AND ACCEPTING THE WORLD AROUND ME; STILL NOWADAYS I HAVE ALL KINDS OF FRIENDS AND LIKE TO KNOW THINGS ABOUT ALL KINDS OF PEOPLE, AND I KNOW NOT EVERYONE AROUND ME DOES THE SAME.`,responseWordCount:383,examinerComment:"Although the topic could be more precisely introduced, this response opens with a clear statement of the writer's opinion, and goes on to develop its position clearly and logically, right through to the end. The conclusion would possibly be stronger if it referred back to the actual topic rather than being wholly personal. Paragraphs are used to good effect, and the writing flows well, helped by skilful use of referencing pronouns to link sentences. There is quite a wide range of vocabulary used, with a natural feel for style and collocation, although there are also occasional errors in both word choice and spelling. The grammar consists of a wide range of sentence types used flexibly and accurately; though occasional mistakes occur in verb form and word order, these do not impede communication, and the majority of sentences are error free.",sourceUrl:"https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/take-ielts/prepare/books",sourcePageLabel:"Book pages 67, 68",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm2-academic-example-3-task-1-response-5",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 2 with DVD",sourceReference:"Volume 2 · Academic example 3 · response 5",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:4,taskPrompt:`The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. 678 679Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 680 681Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/practice-materials-oipm2_a_t1_r5_task.jpg",candidateResponse:`I am going to talk about summarise. Firstly Republic of Korea people workes in underground probable 22% in this job. 682Inadition, some of people has a Incineration, I think about 9% they are workes in this job. we can see 66% of the people workes in recycling more than hafe of people they did these job. Secondly sweden the must of people they are workes in the underground, In order to 25% of the people workes in the recycling. Also 20% of Sweden peo
682ple workes in the Incineration. 683Thirdly United kingdom they have more than two jobs. For example, British people likes to worke in the Underground because, the contry has a lots of things to do wit in the Underground. that's more the Dumping at sea in the summey. Also the chemical treatmend and Incinevetion they are needed. as much as any job.`,responseWordCount:144,examinerComment:"This response illustrates the need to read the question very carefully before beginning to write. Due to a misunderstanding of the three pie charts given, this writer does not describe the actual topic, but discusses types of job instead. This means that all the information stated in this response is inaccurate. However, the response is organised and some connectives are used to link the sentences together â this is the strongest feature of the response. Even so, it is not always easy to follow the overall development. There are many spelling mistakes on even basic words, and the range of vocabulary is very limited. Errors in sentence structure and grammar are frequent and there are few attempts at complex sentences. Although some structures within sentences are accurate, no whole sentence is correct, and this causes some strain for the reader.",sourceUrl:"https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/take-ielts/prepare/books",sourcePageLabel:"Book page 69",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm2-academic-example-3-task-2-response-6",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 2 with DVD",sourceReference:"Volume 2 · Academic example 3 · response 6",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:3.5,taskPrompt:`Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. 684 685Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 686 687Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 688 689Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Nowaday, the technolodge is much developed than before, and people owened a car is quite normal. however, the car gives us more easier life also takes many problems. every year has many people dead in traffic accidents. Some people think that reduce transport accidents the key is strict punishments for driving offences, I think that is the way and can be done. 690 691For me, traffic accident is well-known, as my father had met an accident, and because he drove too fast and too tired. If I told him strict punishments, don't so hurry, this accident might be should n't happen. When people always think that speed can take us excieting, wonderful feeling and forget their family worried about them, their future should be fantastic if they take care, Strict punishment is especially important. 692 693However, On the other hand, many ways can improve road safety, for example, more educate in usual life, more adverting on TV, radio, newspapers, limit speed on the road, stronger fines. I think that the most important is foundation, everything happened, nothing can do more. but before it happen, we can learn a plenty of from others accidents, why we drive so fast, why we forget the friends, family's love and worry. Father have to educate children, because of yours mistake, you may be broken two families or more families's happiness. This responsibility is huge that you can't imagin. So, I think foundation is the most need thing to do. 694 695let Every one need know about that car or other transports we invented is our life to be easier, not bring us sad, many years ago, not so developed society as now, but the world still turned very good, people's life still happy. why when the technolodge become so develop, lots of unhappy things happened, government should think about it, also our people need attention this problem, than our life will be more comfortable and more safety.`,responseWordCount:320,examinerComment:"This answer is an attempt to address the three parts of the prompt (two opposing views and the writer's own opinion) but there are few relevant ideas. Instead, the writing is somewhat anecdotal and the last paragraph in particular is vague and seems to be dealing with a different topic, namely technology. The writing is laid out in paragraphs, but within each paragraph, ideas are not clearly grouped and seem to be repeated across paragraphs. Despite the use of linking words there is no logical sequencing of ideas, and they are difficult to relate to each other, so the argument is very difficult for the reader to follow. There are some relevant words, but control of spelling is so poor that several words are unintelligible. When we look at the grammar, some structures are correct but overall many sentences are lacking a main verb, so that although the meaning can be followed, this is only managed with difficulty.",sourceUrl:"https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/take-ielts/prepare/books",sourcePageLabel:"Book pages 70, 71",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm2-general-training-example-1-task-1-response-7",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 2 with DVD",sourceReference:"Volume 2 · General Training example 1 · response 7",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"general_task1",officialBand:7.5,taskPrompt:`You have heard about plans to build new apartments in a public park near your home. You want to give your opinion about this. 696 697Write a letter to the editor of your local newspaper. In your letter 698- explain how you learnt about these plans 699- say what you think of the park 700- give your opinion on the plans 701 702Write at least 150 words. 703 704You do NOT need to write any addresses. 705 706Begin your letter as follows: 707Dear Sir or Madam,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Dear Sir or Madam, 708 709It is Mohammad khatib, one of the fans of your newspaper. I am writing this letter to you to let you know of some, I hope, rumors I have heard recently about construction plans in our popular public park. 710 711As you know, this is the only park within our immediate vicinity, and many people go there for refreshment and relaxing. So many children also play in this park with their peers. I have recently heard from some of my neighbors that Royal construction company intends to build some apartment blocks in the park. At first I did not take it serious until yesterday that I saw some engineers measuring and calculating diffrent dimensions of the park. 712 713We all like our local park including its beautiful fountain; its playground and amusing facilities for children. So, I, as the representative of most of the neighbors have collected signatures against this project. 714 715Therefore, we, as local neighbors, disagree with the plan and ask you to please kindly write an article about the disadvantages of this action and express our great disapproval of the plan. We are looking forward to seeing your article as our voice soon. 716 717Thanks from your cooperation in advance. 718 719Yours faithfully, 720Mohammad khatib`,responseWordCount:207,examinerComment:"This letter covers all three parts of the question very well. Its content is relevant and well illustrated, and the writer's purpose is very clear. The tone of the letter is also consistently appropriate throughout: polite and suitable for addressing the editor of a newspaper. It is easy for the reader to follow the message of this letter, because it has a clear structure and the ideas are presented in a logical order. Connecting words, referencing and skilful paragraphing all contribute to the coherence of the letter. Lexical errors occasionally occur in word form, word choice and spelling. However the grammar is highly accurate.",sourceUrl:"https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/take-ielts/prepare/books",sourcePageLabel:"Book pages 72, 73",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm2-general-training-example-1-task-2-response-8",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 2 with DVD",sourceReference:"Volume 2 · General Training example 1 · response 8",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health, more and more people are eating it. 721 722Why are more people eating fast food? 723What can be done about this problem? 724 725Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 726 727Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Unfortunately as the world goes on improving people more and more are eager to have fast foods. It's now a kind of habit for kids and also adults to spend their leisure time at fast food restaurants. On my opinion one of the major reason of using fast foods in many countries is the shortage of time that people face with. It should be investigated properly to solve this subject. 728 729As a matter of fact nowadays people in all over the world ought to work outdoors more than before. You know that living expenses are so high that spouses should work together in order to gain more. Therefore they have little time to spend on cooking. 730 731Another reason is the great advertisements which being done by TV programs or magazines, tempting every body to use fast food. Now, parents are paying more attention to their children's needs regardless of how much logically they are. They are about to provide their needs even if children are addicted to take fast foods or so. 732 733You know that obesity, high cholestrol, diabete and laziness are some outcomes of fast food, and if it is neglected may lead to serious problems. 734 735I think nutrition experts are expected to offer more warning programs to people about this matter. Government should spend a special budget on giving people some solution about this subjects. For example making animation programs bearing warning messages for the children is one way to make them aware of it's fate. Or cooking programs which learn how to prepare a healthy food in short time seemed to be usefull in solving this problem. 736 737In conclusion, it needs to plan a serious plan and spend more time and budget to find a way on solving the peril of its widespread. I hope every person would be more careful about his or her health especially on nutrition case.`,responseWordCount:313,examinerComment:"Both parts of the question are addressed in this response, and the content is appropriate for the topic. The writer's position is clear, and there are plenty of relevant ideas which are developed and supported. These are arranged in an organised way, and paragraphing is helpfully used, so that the response as a whole generally progresses coherently to the conclusion. There are errors in word choice and spelling, but the range of vocabulary is quite wide and includes some less common words which specifically relate to the topic. With regard to the grammar, there is a mix of sentence types, but errors occur with plurals, prepositions, word order and punctuation, and with passives and verbs in complex structures.",sourceUrl:"https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/take-ielts/prepare/books",sourcePageLabel:"Book pages 74, 75",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm2-general-training-example-2-task-1-response-9",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 2 with DVD",sourceReference:"Volume 2 · General Training example 2 · response 9",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"general_task1",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. 738 739Write a letter to your employer. In your letter 740- explain why you need this time off 741- give details of when you want the time off 742- say who can do your work when you are away 743 744Write at least 150 words. 745 746You do NOT need to write any addresses. 747 748Begin your letter as follows: 749Dear ............,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Dear Mr. White, 750 751I am writing this letter to explain why I need to take two weeks off and the time about my holidays. 752 753I started work in our company at July 2008. Since then I did not go back to China. I found it out in the next few weeks our department do not has lots work to do, So I think maybe it is a good chance for me to take two weeks off and go back to China enjoy the holidays with my family and friends. 754 755I checked the next avalieable ticket will be at 01 August 2009, So I am thinking take my holiday from 01/08/2009 to 15/08/2009. I talked with Brian Kiby today, he said he will c
755over my work during the time I will in China, and I will bring my laptop with me, everyday I will check my emails and will resolve any problems Brian can not fix. 756 757Thanks again for your attention, I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. 758 759Yours Sincerely`,responseWordCount:171,examinerComment:"This letter addresses the requirements of the task in that it adequately covers all three of the bullet points, and the writer's purpose is generally clear. The tone of the letter is suitable for writing to an employer, and all of the content is relevant and accurate. The letter is easy to read because of the coherent arrangement of information, the logical sequencing of sentences and the use of connectives within paragraphs. A range of vocabulary is attempted and there are some examples of less common words, but errors are quite frequent in noun phrases and spelling. With regard to grammar, there are frequent errors in verb forms and subject/verb agreement, especially in complex structures, but there is a good mix of sentence types.",sourceUrl:"https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/take-ielts/prepare/books",sourcePageLabel:"Book page 76",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"oipm2-general-training-example-2-task-2-response-10",sourceKey:"practice-materials",sourceLabel:"Official IELTS Practice Materials 2 with DVD",sourceReference:"Volume 2 · General Training example 2 · response 10",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:5,taskPrompt:`Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. 760 761Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 762 763Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 764 765Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Zoos. We Need You or Not. 766 767Last month, I went to the Dublin Zoo with my best friend Jack and his families. I can not remember When was the last time I went to the Zoo and see the animals. anyway it is long time ago. that time I was a kid and I was very very happy. 768 769We arrived the zoo around 11:00 AM, Jack's two children they so exciting, Keep running. Keep asking questions Keep taking photos.... but I did not feel happy any more, I saw the "wild animals" were locked in a small cage, they even didn't move at all, you can not believe they lived in the forest before. I felt sorry for them. I talked with Jack about what I felt, he answered, "Pal, I had the same feeling. if you think you give the foods and water to the animals that is enough, no, you wrong, they need freedom, the same as human." Human can fight for their freedom, use their hands, guns, even use their lifes But poor animals they want to do it, but against with their enermy - human. they will never win. 770 771When we left the zoo around 4:00 PM in the afternoon, We saw a group deers crossed the road. I saw them running, I even saw their smelling faces. 772 773On the other hand, zoos still have some advantages. First, the kids love the zoos, they can get knowledges the books and DVDs can not give to them, use there as a class to teach them love our world, love our earth. Second, you can save the animals, some animals they nearly disapper from the earth, like panda, we have to protect them. Let the number grow up again, and later we can let them back to their real home. 774 775Trade the animals as your friend, even if they are in the Zoo, I hope in the future, all the animals will free from the Zoo, enjoy their lifes.`,responseWordCount:331,examinerComment:"This candidate has chosen to take an unusually personal approach to the topic, so that the basis of the response is an extended narrative of an event. This is not an appropriate format for a task that requires a discursive text. Although the content of the story is relevant, the extent of this personal account detracts from the overall response to the question. Rather than being used just as an illustrative example, the narrative takes over the whole response so that the story of the zoo visit outweighs the general discussion. However, both viewpoints are discussed, albeit too indirectly, and the writer's own opinion comes through clearly. There is some organisation to the response. However, the content is not always arranged coherently, and the paragraphing is not always adequate. The vocabulary used is fairly simple, and there are errors of spelling, word form and word choice. However, the vocabulary resource is just sufficient to achieve",sourceUrl:"https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/take-ielts/prepare/books",sourcePageLabel:"Book pages 77, 78",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c18-a-1-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 18 Academic Student's Book with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 18 · Academic Test 1 · Task 1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. 776 777Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 778 779Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/cambridge-18-20-c18-a-1-t1.png",candidateResponse:`The line graph illustrates the proportion of urban citizens in Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia between 1970 and 2020, with the expected population in 2030 and 2040. 780 781Overall, it can be easily seen that all four countries has a dramatic rise in population, starting at the lowest point in 1970 and being projected to reach the peak in 2040. 782 783Malaysia and Indonesia saw a slightly rise in population, respectively from 30 to about 45 and around 12 to over 20 percent from 1970 to 1990. After that, both countries has climbed rapidly until now before being predicted to continue increasing for the next 20 years. 784 785After almost remaining in the 70s, Philippines percentage increased dramatically to reach about 47 percent on 1990 and dropped to 40% in 2010. Then, this country faced slightly rise in 2020. 786 787Meanwhile, Thailand reached approximate 30% in 1990 and saw not much changes until 2020. Both two countries are projected to increase in population in 2030 and 2040.`,responseWordCount:163,examinerComment:"This response covers the requirements of the task. There is an overview in the second paragraph and ke
787y features are presented for each country, with main trends identified. Ideas are grouped together with a clear overall progression: countries with a similar trend are presented in the same paragraph, first Malaysia and Indonesia, then Thailand and the Philippines. There is some effective use of linkers [Overall | After that | Meanwhile] and other cohesive devices [respectively | this country], but a few errors remain [Both two]. Vocabulary includes a range, with some less common examples [proportion | expected population | dramatic rise | projected to reach the peak]. There are some errors [slightly I slight | almost remaining | approximate / approximately], which do not impede communication. The mix of grammatical structures is good, with some complex sentence forms [being predicted to continue increasing for the next 20 years]. Some errors remain, but they rarely reduce communication. To improve the Band Score for this response, there could be more detail on the similarity of the trends on the graph, more detail on data from 1990 onwards and fewer errors in spelling and grammar. However, this is a good response that does address the requirements of the task.",sourceUrl:"https://assets.cambridge.org/97810092/75187/frontmatter/9781009275187_frontmatter.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c18-a-2-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 18 Academic Student's Book with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 18 · Academic Test 2 · Task 1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:5.5,taskPrompt:`The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. 788 789Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 790 791Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/cambridge-18-20-c18-a-2-t1.webp",candidateResponse:`The graph illustrats the data of different levels of annual wage of families in the united states in 2007, 2011 and 2015. 792 793As far as the number of families whose annual income was less than $25,000, it began with around >5 million in 2007, then increased to approximately 27 million in 2011, but decreased by 2 million 4 years later. Similarly, those of families that earned $25,000 to $49,999 were about 25 million in 2007, after that it rose to nearly 30 million in 2011. Finally it decreased to around 27 million in 2015. 794 795By contrast, the groups of families which have high income, including $75,000 to $99.999 and $100,000 or more, experienced a drop in 2011, but their data went up in 2015. 796 797Interesting things could be seen in the group of middle income, the data remain the same in 2007, 2011 and 2015.`,responseWordCount:145,examinerComment:"This response does present most of the data within the bar chart and the key features required. To improve the response, an overview of the information should be included, for example: Across the 8 years, households with incomes below $50,000 rose, then fell back slightly, households with incomes of over $75,000 fell slightly then increased and those with the mid-level incomes remained the same. The information is arranged coherently, starting with the details for the lower-income households, then the higher, then the mid-section. There are some effective cohesive devices [As far as Similarly By contrast]. The vocabulary is suitable for the task, but there is an error [>5 million / 25 million] which is not helpful when reporting the details. There is a mix of simple and complex structures, with sentences that contain multiple clauses. There are some examples of missing capitalisation [united states / United States] with some errors [remain I remained]. To improve the response, it is important to re-read to check for small errors with vocabulary and to include an overview or summary of the salient information.",sourceUrl:"https://assets.cambridge.org/97810092/75187/frontmatter/9781009275187_frontmatter.pdf",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-a-1-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · Academic Test 1 · Task 1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:6.5,taskPrompt:`The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the peri
797od 2000 to 2020. 798 799Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 800 801Write at least 150 words. 802 803Number of participants, by activity 2000-2020`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/cambridge-18-20-c19-a-1-t1.png",candidateResponse:`The line graph highlights data about how many people participated in 5 various activities at one social club in Melbourne, Australia for the first two decades of XXI century. 804 805Overall, over the years more participants got involved in activities on Table tennis and Musical plays, while Amateur dramatics lost its interest for public. Being flactuated, two types of activities, which are Film club and Martial arts levelled off. Another striking point is that over a twenty â year period between 2000 and 2020, the Film club kept its position as the most popular activity. 806 807Looking at the details of Table tennis, in 2000, there were about 15 participants in club for it. In the next 10 years, it attracted 5 more members, before dramatic surge from 20 to below 60 participants. In 2005, the activity on Musical performances introduced and over the following 15 years, it saw a steady increase on the number of participants by about 20 in the last year. 808 809Regarding next two activities, Film club and Martial arts, the saw fluactions, but without any changes in the overall position. Film club started the process with about 60 members and finished it just below 70, while the participants of Martial arts kept their numbers at around 35. 810 811The number of participants of amateurs on draturgy was about 25 and it saw a steady decrease then by 10.`,responseWordCount:229,examinerComment:"This good response begins with an introduction, then in the second paragraph summarises the main trends. The next few paragraphs contain the data and cover each of the participant groups. The information is organised logically and a range of linking devices are used [Overall | Another striking point | In the next 10 years]. There is also some flexible reference and substitution [while | which | it | their] with a few inaccuracies. Vocabulary is generally good [got involved in | levelled off | dramatic surge], but there are some errors [flactuated / fluctuated | amateurs on draturgy / amateur dramatics]. This response has a variety of grammatical structures and the past simple tense is well controlled. There are sentences with multiple clauses, including superlatives (most popular], but also some errors in verb forms [introduced / was introduced], some missing articles [public / the public | dramatic surge / a dramatic surge | next two / the next two], some errors with prepositions [in club for it / in the club | by about 20 / to about 20] and inconsistent capitalisation. The candidate should demonstrate a greater level of accuracy with grammatical structures.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-a-1-t2",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · Academic Test 1 · Task 2",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. 812 813Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 814 815Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 816 817Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:"In my opinion competition at work, at school and in daily life can both be a good thing and a bad thing. Why? because I think too much of anything can be destructive. Yes, itâs a very good thing to be competitive but donât overdo it! Having no competition in your life at all can be very depressing, because you have no motivation, no goals you want to achieve, everytime you wake up in the morning. I donât believe that there is such thing as âco-operatingâ too much, when you work with someone you should work together as a team and co-operate, but also do things for yourself, like something career-wise. You should think of your future in your work. That goes the same if you are still in school, take my school life for example. If I am very good at one subject in particular, lots of other student may come up to me and ask for pointers. I would be very glad to help them. If there is any homework, school mates may come over to do it together. this is also fine and very good for building relationship. But sometimes there are people who think you are so nice and ask you to do their work for them. This is where you should draw the line, yes you are friends and you should help each other, but that doesnât mean that you have to do their homework or give them answer when there is a test. Remember life is a competition, be a winner.",responseWordCount:257,examinerComment:"This response covers the task and is engaging to read. The candidate starts by saying competition can be good and bad, too much can be [destructive] and too little can be [depressing] as you would have [no motivation, no goals]. No specific examples are given, and they would improve the response. The rest of the response addresses âcooperationâ but is mostly about how people can cooperate rather than comparing âcooperationâ with âcompetitionâ in line with the question. The conclusion [⦠be a winner] slightly contradicts the earlier point [/ donât believe that there is such a thing as âco-operatingâ too much]. Unfortunately, there is no paragraphing to group ideas together or indicate main topics. This affects the rating for coherence and cohesion. There is some higher-level vocabulary [destructive | motivation | career-wise] with some idiomatic use [draw the line] which makes vocabulary the strongest area in this response. A wider range would be needed for a higher score. There is a range of grammatical structures, including comparative forms and conditional [if) structures. Although they do address the task and present relevant ideas, to achieve a higher score, the candidate should organise the response into paragraphs and discuss both views. They could also demonstrate a greater level of accuracy with vocabulary and grammatical structures.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-a-2-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · Academic Test 2 · Task 1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:6.5,taskPrompt:`The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. 818 819Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 820 821Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/cambridge-18-20-c19-a-2-t1.png",candidateResponse:`The maps give the information about the improvement of the Porth Harbour from 2000 to today. 822 823The first impression is that the Harbour today made use of more areas than in the past. 824 825It can be seen that there are several areas that still stay the same today as in 2000. These include the Carpark and the Showers and Toilets which are located in the north west of the map. However, one more Showers and Toilets are built between the two Carpark today. Besides, the Porth Harbour today also has one more Passenger ferries which right next to the left of the existing one from 2000. Moreover, an area for Cafés and shops is added next to the Lifeboat one. Another significant difference is the relocation of the Marina (private yachts) and the fishing boats areas. Today, the Marina is moved down to the place of the old Fishing boats area to have more space and vice-versa, the Fishing boats area is relocated at the old Marina area. The last noticeable change in this Harbour is the Construction in the South East. The disused old Castle was destroyed and a new Hotel was built there today and another Hotel Is also added in the Private beach area. 826 827Overall, even that the harbour still keeps some areas unchanged, there are many reconstructions and improvements for the Porth Harbour today.`,responseWordCount:228,examinerComment:"Overall, this is a strong response. The candidate has covered the main features of the changes and has included an overview to summarise the changes, in the first and the last paragraph. The main details are accurate, apart from the addition of [another Hotel)
827in the private beach area. The reader can follow the ideas as they are logically organised. This is due to the linking words [However | Besides | also | Another | Overall] and cohesive features [existing one | vice-versa], but there are some errors. Vocabulary demonstrates some flexibility [first impression | relocated | noticeable change], but there is also some inaccuracy and repetition. The weakest area, though, is the use of grammatical structures. There is a mix of sentence forms, with some good complex use [made use of | can be seen that | These include ⦠which are] but some errors, such as inaccurate use of the plural [one more Showers | boats areas] (because the candidate has copied the plural form from the question) and incorrect verb form [is moved down | has been moved down]. To achieve a higher score, the candidate should present an overview to summarise the main stages, for example: The changes to the harbour between 2000 and now focus on improvements that are targeted towards attracting visitors or tourists to the harbour, and include a new hotel, with private beach, more capacity for the passenger ferries and expanded facilities.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-a-2-t2",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · Academic Test 2 · Task 2",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. 828 829Do you agree or disagree? 830 831Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 832 833Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`I personally disagree with the issue whether the working days should be one day less. By no means should we make the weekend three days long. There are two aspects that support my point of view. 834 835First of all, now all over the world are facing an unprecedented economic recession caused by COVID-19. Many factories are forced to close and the shops shut down. The economic loss is substantial. Nevertheless, with the advent of vaccine, I perceive that now people can go back to their work. This would certainly be conducive to our economy. If we reduce one day from work, even just from a week, it would cause repercussions on our society in terms of the development of economy. 836 837Secondly, I am used to do my leisure activities in Saturday and Sunday. If there is one day more, I would wonder what to do on that day, and that means I have to rearrange my weekend plans. I think it would be tiring. Most importantly, I come to admit that, too some degree, I am a workaholic. I cannot even image if I am separated from my favourite place â my office. It is the place where I retreat to when I feel anxious and want to get rid of everything. Working, indeed, gives me a sense of achievement and contentment. I, therefore, would oppose to the idea of cutting one working day. 838 839Though some people may argue that they need one day more in the week to reduce their stress from work, it could be harmful to our economic growth in this harsh time. Also, I believe that many people are used to the current working system, which provides two days for break. The sudden change will make people contused. Unless the government enacts a comprehensive policy for this new system, I think the idea does not work, and it would surely brings chaos in our society.`,responseWordCount:319,examinerComment:"In this good response, the candidate presents their opinion at the start, then gives two main points about why the current working week should not change: economic development and the disruption to our existing pattern of a two-day weekend. In the final paragraph, they consider the other side of the argument and people who might like an additional day off. (However, a counter argument is not necessary for this type of question.) Overall, ideas are presented in a clear order, and there is some good use of linking words and expressions [First of all | Nevertheless | Most importantly | Unless]. The response contains some good vocabulary with effective collocation [unprecedented economic recession | conducive to | sense of achievement], and there is a range of structures including conditionals [if), modals [would | may | could] and multi-clause sentences. There are some errors in prepositions and other structures [/ am used to do / I am used to doing], but the impact is not disruptive. To achieve a higher score, ideas could be more fully extended, for example, by giving more detail on how removing a working day could be negative for the economy or for workers.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-a-3-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · Academic Test 3 · Task 1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:6.5,taskPrompt:`The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. 840 841Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 842 843Write at least 150 words. 844 845Biofuel Production: How Ethanol is Made`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/cambridge-18-20-c19-a-3-t1.jpg",candidateResponse:`The given diagram illustrates the various stages in the process of producing ethanol, a kind of biofuel. 846 847Overall, there are about 9 main phrases in the ethanol production, starting with growing plants and tress, and finishing with supplying ethanol for transportation and gas mission. 848 849At the first stage in the process of making ethanol, a large number of trees and plants are grown. Thanks to the source of energy from sunlight and carbon dioxide from humman and transportattin, plants and trees grow up and are haverested when they are mature enough. After being collected by machine, they are put into another machine where slice them into small pieces to form cellulose. This step is call pre-processing. 850 851In the following stage, cellulose are taken to a factory where âprocessingâ stage occurs. Subsequently, Sugars are extracted from original cellulose before microbes are added to make ethanol. It is then used as a tupe of fuel for a lot of means of transportation such as cars, trucks, airplanes. Finally, a huge amount of carbon dioxide which is released into the air become energy for process of âphotosynthesisâ of plants and trees.`,responseWordCount:188,examinerComment:"This is a strong response. The first short paragraph is an introduction, then the second paragraph contains an overview of the process [starting with growing plants] and [finishing with supplying ethanol]. This is sufficient as an overview, but the candidate should also summarise the main stages. The rest of the response presents and highlights the process. Ideas are logically organised and the response follows the order given in the diagram. There is good use of linking words to describe a process [At the first stage | After being | Subsequently] and other linking devices, including reference and substitution [they | then used). The candidate uses vocabulary well with some flexibility [extracted | photosynthesis], but there are a handful of errors [phrases / phases | tress / trees || humman / human | transportattin / transportation | tupe / type]. These errors do not get in the way of the meaning. Grammatical range is quite broad and there is a variety of complex structures and sentences with multiple clauses. There are a few errors [where slice them / which slices them]. To achieve a higher score, an overview which summarises the main stages should be presented, for example: This cycle for biofuel production involves three main stages: harvesting and preparing plant material for processing, producing ethanol by chemical processing, then using the fuel for transportation, before the cycle begins again.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-a-3-t2",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · Academic Test 3 · Task 2",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:7,taskPrompt:`It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. 852 853To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? 854 855Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 856 857Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Saving money for the future is always a very good idea. First of all money is something that is needed in almost all areas in life. Whether you are young or old you need money to buy everyday things like food, clothing, etc. living etc. 858 859young people are often full of enthusiasm about their future. They are looking forward to their first job, to meeting new people or to getting to know as much of the world as they can. Many tend to live in the present rather than
859in the future so that they donât always plan ahead. 860 861When you people get older and settle down they realize that buying a house, starting a family or caring for your health takes up a good considerable amount of money and everybody who began saving money in younger years is glad to have done so. However, saving money is not always possible. Sometimes unforeseen expenses cannot be avoided, life situations are suddenly changing or there is never even enough money available even for the most necessary things. So how could you save money for the future in this case? In general, you have to ask yourself what your priorities in life are. What are the things you cherish most? Is it more important for you to plan ahead or do you prefer to just enjoy the moment that you live in? 862 863Everybody has to make own choices and to consider what is really essential for him or herself. 864 865In any age taking a moment to f reflect on your life and looking back at the things you have already done is always a good thing to do. 866 867If you know yourself well and about all the things that really make you happy you will be able to make the right decisions in financial issues as well as other areas in life. 868 869In what way money plays an important role will be easy to be found out then. Perhaps you need less than you first thought years ago.`,responseWordCount:336,examinerComment:"This is a strong response to the task. In the first paragraph, the candidate makes their view clear, agreeing with the statement that saving money for the future is a good idea. In the next two paragraphs, they present ideas on how saving money is actually quite challenging: young people can [tend to live in the present), so [donât always plan ahead, the cost of housing, starting families and health care can be high, and [unforeseen expenses cannot be avoided). The rest of the response is about how people can decide how much to spend and how much to save. The last line [Perhaps you need less than you first thought years ago] suggests that saving is not the answer for everyone. The ending gives advice to the reader, rather than summarising the main ideas. Ideas are easy to follow and logically organised. Linking expressions are well integrated [Whether | Sometimes | Perhaps] and generally accurate, and cohesive devices are used well [Many tend to | everybody who] with some errors [own choices / their own choices]. Paragraphing at the start is appropriate, but the last four sentences are set out separately and inappropriately, which affects the score. There is some higher-level vocabulary, with effective collocation [full of enthusiasm | tend to live in the present | settle down | unforeseen expenses]. The candidate uses a variety of structures, including comparative forms [rather than | do you prefer], conditionals [/f] and a range of multi-clause sentences. Errors remain, with some missing punctuation and incorrect tenses [be found out / find out] and prepositions [In any age / At any age], but this does not affect the readerâs understanding. To achieve a higher score, the candidate should ensure that the conclusion summarises the main ideas, and use effective paragraphing, especially in the second half of the response.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-a-4-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · Academic Test 4 · Task 1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:5,taskPrompt:`The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. 870 871Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 872 873Write at least 150 words. 874 875Location of Dance Classes`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/cambridge-18-20-c19-a-4-t1.png",candidateResponse:`The table and chart provide information about the location and different types of dance class undertaken by young people in Australia. 876 877The chart says In Private Studios 48% young people are taking dance classes. 878
879And in community halls and other 18% folks are taking dance classes And other location. After school classes 24% people are taking classes and other last one location college based studios these are 10% percent people Taking classes. The table reveal in Ballet type dance 600 students under age of 11 learning. And 300 age of 11-16 are learning. And 420 students age of 11-16 learning and last type of Dance Modern these are 515 students are learning who are under age of 11 and 300 other students who are age of 11-16. 880 881To conclusion in Private Studio the numbers of people much higher than other locations. And type of ballet dance classes number of student Much higher in under age of 11 than other type of dance classes.`,responseWordCount:163,examinerComment:"This candidate has worked hard to report all data contained in the graphs. The key areas are covered, but the overall effect is rather mechanical, as each point is presented in a linear sequence. The ideas are set out in the correct order, following the order of the graphs in the question, but linking between and within the sentences is not strong. The format is quite repetitive [taking classes | learning] because of the lack of linking devices. Similarly, vocabulary is limited and a wider range would be needed for a higher score. Grammatical range is also minimal. There is a noticeable level of error, but the reader is still able to understand the message. To improve the score, this candidate should use a wider range of linking devices and take a less mechanical approach. A stronger and wider range of vocabulary and grammar would also be beneficial.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-a-4-t2",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · Academic Test 4 · Task 2",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. 882 883Do you think this is a positive or negative development? 884 885Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 886 887Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Today there are a lot of different shops where we can buy all kind of stuff produced all over the world. Is it right to buy food produced in other countries? Is this idea useful for people nowadays? 888 889I suppose this to be a good idea. When supermarkets and even small shops provide people food from abroad then there are much more possibilities for us to choose something. When shops have only food and things produced in our country, it is really hard to make a good choise. Sometimes people want to try something new and interesting maybe even something extraordinary which they never buy before. In this cases food which is produced in other countries will help them to be satisfied with their demands. When supermarkets have a good suply of different food produced anywhere than people can find delicious things depending on their tastes. For example, people who like French products can buy some kinds of french cheese or wine not only in France. 890 891Food from other countries is also very good when you want to buy some fresh vegetables and fruits in winter. It is really useful thing because some people are vegetarians and they need vegetables and fruits during the whole year. 892 893The only disadvantage of food which is produced in other countries is the way how it has been delivered. in some cases products can be not so fresh especialy in summer, when it is very hot outside. 894 895To sum it up, I can surely say that buying products from other countries is a good thing to become more closer to other culturies. You can certainly cook something unusial at home and it will taste like in very good expensive restaurant somewhere abroad.`,responseWordCount:288,examinerComment:"This is a good response to the task. The candidate clearly agrees with the idea that people should be able to buy international food in supermarkets. The main reason given is that people want to try something [new and interesting] and different. Examples are given of French products and seasonal produce for vegetarians. One disadvantage is given, related to the impact of hot weather on transportation. The conclusion includes bringing cultures together through food but does not summarise the points made in the full answer. A more relevant conclusion would help the candidate achieve a higher score, as well as further extending the ideas. Generally, the candidate organises the ideas well, and we can follow them clearly. Some good linking devices are used [where | maybe even | which | who], but some errors remain [this cases / these cases | than / then]. The response is set out across five paragraphs, but three of them have only two sentences. These are short paragraphs and could be extended to illustrate the central topic in more detail. Again, vocabulary is generally appropriate for the question, with some strong examples [extraordinary | depending on their tastes], but there is a lack of precision [stuff] and frequent minor spelling errors [choise | suply | especialy | culturies | unusial. However, we can still understand what is meant. There are attempts at a wider range of structures and a number of multi-clause sentences. However, the level of error [which they never buy before / which they have never bought before | the way how it has been delivered / the way it has been delivered] detracts from the score. Overall, a more comprehensive conclusion, longer paragraphs, a wider range of vocabulary and fewer grammatical slips would improve the response and achieve a higher score.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-gt-1-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · General Training Test 1 · Task 1",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"general_task1",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time. 896 897Write a letter to your boss. In your letter 898 899explain why you want to reduce your working hours 900 901say which hours you would like to work 902 903describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer 904 905Write at least 150 words. 906 907You do NOT need to write any addresses. 908 909Begin your letter as follows: 910 911Dearâ¦â¦â¦â¦..,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Dear Mr. Brent, 912 913I hope this letter finds you well. 914 915I am writing this letter to request my working hours in Lancom Technology to be reduced to 30 hours from 40 hours in a weekly basic. 916 917I am requesting hours change due to study part-time. I have enrolled myself in Diploma of Logistics and Freight Forwarding. The part-time course is to be completed in 2 years time. 918
919I would like to work from Monday to Friday from 7am to 1pm, so I could attend my classes on the afternoon session. 920 921I hope this arrangement would allow me to gain more skills and knowledges, which I am confidently to contribute to our logistic department. Besides, the society exposure from lecturers and fellow schoolmates could contribute to our logistic network. 922 923I am appreciate if you could look into this request and approve it. I am delighted to have face-to-face meeting with you to discuss any alternative. 924 925Please do not hesitate to contact if you have any question. I am looking forward to hearing from you. 926 927Thank you. 928 929Yours sincerely.`,responseWordCount:177,examinerComment:"This letter is a good response to the task, the tone is suitable for writing to a manager and all aspects of the bullet points are presented. Benefits to the employer include [more skills and knowledges] that can be shared across the team, and an increased [logistic network]. The message can be followed as there is a clear progression, although due to the very short paragraphs, this does appear more like a list of information rather than a letter. Vocabulary has some good elements [enrolled | contribute to | discuss any alternative], but there is some lack of precision in word choice [weekly basic / weekly schedule | confidently to contribute / confident will contribute]. Grammatical structures are varied but limited overall. Strengths include [reduced to ⦠from | is to be completed | so 1 could attend], but there are some errors, including missing articles (Diploma / a Diploma] and third person âsâ [logistic network / logistics network | any question / any questions], and use of modal forms [/ am appreciate / I would appreciate | I am delighted / I would be delighted]. To improve the rating, the ideas should be better organised into paragraphs within the letter. Instead of starting each sentence with [1, the candidate could introduce more variety with linking and grammatical structures.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-gt-1-t2",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · General Training Test 1 · Task 2",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place. 930 931Why do you think this is happening? 932 933Is it a positive or a negative trend? 934 935Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 936 937Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Photography is actually be come trend. Now a day due to impact of Social Media People are not looking at the place they visit but rather concentrate on taking photographs of the place thinking that they will post them on facebook or instagram. They get a different kind of pleasure when they get more likes on their posts in the Social Media. 938 939These are many reasons behind??? the fact that people have access to camera and internet and social media at their fingertips they have forgotten the value of the nature of the place they are visiting. 940 941There are negative and positive impact over this situation. Firstly when we look at good things it is good that the Technology has given an advanced accebility to the high speed internet in our pockets and high defination cameras at a cheapest price. 942 943This helps us to capture all that we need immediately. Secondly, there is no skill or learning of a certification required for that, even a kid is able to capture beautiful pictures using Mobile Phones. 944 945Thirdly, it is giving opportunity as not to miss any thing that we capture to share at affortable price. 946 947Though there are positive aspects for this practices, as bad also follows good, there are negative points that we need to think about as well. 948 949One among these is privacy, when we post some of the photographs in social media, Every one will get to know as what is happening our life. The privacy is effected. 950 951Secondly it is giving an opportunity for fradsterâs to collect information like our address, Date of birth Age and so forth that they can get access to the Banking information and Scam and Rob the Money. 952 953To conclude the positive things only give satification but the negative once are the real threats to personal information and individuals life.`,responseWordCount:308,examinerComment:"This response covers each main area of the task: brief reasons are given on why people are taking photographs of themselves without looking at the place they are visiting (the impact of social media and the pleasure people get from the likesâ on pictures they post) and much more detail is provided on the âpositive or negativeâ aspects of the trend. There is a clear progression overall and some good cohesive features [Firstly | Secondly | like | but]. However, there is repetition and error [These / There | good | privacy) and paragraphing is not very helpful. There is some higher-level vocabulary [impact of | concentrate on | different kind of pleasure | get access to] but also, some error in spelling [accebility | high defination | affortable | fradsterâs | satification] and inaccuracy [Rob / steal | once / one] which impacts the rating here. Grammatical structures are mi
953xed, with some good use (they have forgotten the value | need to | can], but generally, the level of error is quite high. A greater degree of accuracy in these structures would increase the score. Overall, to achieve a higher score, the candidate should add more on âWhy do you think this is happening?â and should provide a more comprehensive conclusion. It is also important to use paragraphing more effectively, to group ideas together.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-gt-2-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · General Training Test 2 · Task 1",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"general_task1",officialBand:5,taskPrompt:`You are a member of an International Studentsâ club. The club is organising an event to celebrate popular food from around the world. 954 955Write a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter 956 957offer to make a popular dish from your country 958 959describe what this dish is 960 961explain why it should be included in the event 962 963Write at least 150 words. 964 965You do NOT need to write any addresses. 966 967Begin your letter as follows: 968 969Dear Luis,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Dear Luis, 970 971I am writing to inform you that if it is possible can you please tell the couzine to prepare some special traditional food from my country. Which is called baby corn grill for me. 972 973This very healthy and sweet as you probably know. We are going to do a physical exercise in the club, I need to have it, because it has a huge benefit for me to against the other team. I had an experience in my country everyone must have this dish and they have done a good job, because of the digestive of the food. However, you must not eat a lot because it contains variaty of proteins. 974 975Just normal grill without any seasoning and addictives. 976 977You should remember to let them know about that if not I will not do my best in this event. 978 979Hopefully itâs ready before we start. 980 981I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. 982 983Kind regards,`,responseWordCount:160,examinerComment:"This response is an attempt to address the question, but the candidate has misunderstood the requirements. The bullet points ask them to offer to make this popular dish for the club event, but this response asks the manager to arrange for the dish to be prepared. This also affects the third bullet point, where instead of explaining why the dish should be included in the International Studentsâ club event to celebrate food, the candidate explains why their sporting team would benefit. The score for Task Achievement is affected by this inaccurate content. Apart from the inaccurate details, there is a sense of coherence within the letter. There are linking devices [because | However | Hopefully] with some use of referencing [it | me | other team | this], but there are errors [This very healthy / It is very healthy). Vocabulary is good enough for the task. There is some accurate use [special traditional food | seasoning] but with frequent lapses in word choice [couzine | digestive of the food and spelling [variaty / variety | addictives / additives]. Similarly, grammatical structures are limited. There are some accurate structures, including if clauses, modals, and a range of tenses [if it is possible | need to have | have done | must not | should remember]. However, errors do occur frequently, and punctuation is faulty and missing altogether in some places [about that if not I will not]. To achieve a higher score, the letter needs to fully address the task, and demonstrate a greater level of accuracy with vocabulary and grammatical structures.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-gt-2-t2",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · General Training Test 2 · Task 2",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:6.5,taskPrompt:`It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you donât want to do, or donât have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children. 984 985Is this a good way of providing work for others? 986 987Should people do these things themselves? 988 989Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 990 991Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Nowadays it is becoming more difficult to find the necessary time to do the home work. Even tasks as simple as cleaning the house and cooking the dinner or as important as childcare, are being delegated to third parties such as nannies or private companies. 992 993Some people could say it is helpful to have someone who support ourselves at home. Not only because we usually do not have time to do it, but because we can promote jobs for other people. 994 995However I strongly believe that we should spend less hours at the office and much more hours at home. Doing that we should be able to carry on all the duties we use to have in the houses. 996 997I think there certain activities we should not pass to others. For instance, taking care of our children. This is something that we, as parents, should do for ourselves. No one else could provide the kids all the love, understanding and friendship that a mother or father give to them. 998 999I remember that when I was a child, my mother quit her job and she dedicated all her time and effort to look after my brothers and I. Now, I realized that it was an invaluable time impossible to have with somebody else different from our own mother. 1000 1001Summarizing, even though some people found useful to have others helping us in our duties at home, I think we should do it for ourselves because it provides valuable time at home. So that we should work less and spend more time sharing with our families. No matter if it is household chores or looking after children.`,responseWordCount:274,examinerComment:"This is a strong response to the question and the candidateâs position is clear from the beginning. The candidate argues that people will find most satisfaction doing the work themselves at home. There is some consideration of the other side, and the conclusion is clear and relevant. Ideas are sequenced logically and cohesion is managed well with some good cohesive devices [Doing that | Summarizing] but some overuse. There are a few slips [who support ourselves / to support us]. Each paragraph presents a clear central topic. Vocabulary is natural and accurate [certain activities | quit | invaluable time]. Sentence structure shows a variety of complex structures including multi-clause sentences, but a higher degree of accuracy would improve the response.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-gt-3-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · General Training Test 3 · Task 1",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"general_task1",officialBand:5.5,taskPrompt:`Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to
1001stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. 1002 1003Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter 1004 1005say how long you now want to rent the apartment for 1006 1007explain why your plans have changed 1008 1009tell the owner about a problem in the apartment 1010 1011Write at least 150 words. 1012 1013You do NOT need to write any addresses. 1014 1015Begin your letter as follows: 1016 1017Dearâ¦â¦,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Dear Mr Banks 1018 1019As you know, my 6 month lease is about to expierd next month and Iâm writing to you with a request to extand it for 6 more month, as my sircumstents had changed. 1020 1021When I just arrived to Adelaide I wasnt sure that iâll be able to stay more then 6 month. I got a 6 month contract with my work place and that was suppuse to be it. Last week my boss who is apperoutly have a good imprassion of me, ask me to stay and maunage another project here in the city. So, if itâs possible, iâll love to extand ower agreement. I really love the apartment, the view is lovely and the nightbrohood is friendly, although I do have one problem? The back door is broken and iâll aprishiate you help in that metter, espisialy if Iâm going to stay throw the winter, which I understan can be quit cold and windy around here. 1022 1023Thank you very much`,responseWordCount:164,examinerComment:"This letter covers each area of the task and provides a nice level of detail. The request is to extend the lease for a further six months, plans have changed due to a work opportunity and a problem with the back door is highlighted. The tone is suitable for writing to the owner of the apartment. Ideas are organised coherently and progression is clear. There are a range of cohesive devices [So | although] and helpful use of referencing [it | who | which]. Unfortunately, there is a high level of error in spelling. This does detract from the score, which is a shame as this writer is clearly trying hard to include a good range of vocabulary. Unfortunately, the errors are noticeable because there are so many of them [expierd / expired | apperoutly / apparently | extand ower / extend our | nightbrohood / neighbourhood | espisialy / especially]. There is a mix of simple and complex grammatical structures, with some good examples [is about to | if itâs possible | if Iâm going to stay]. However, again, the level of error is quite high and is noticeable. There are errors in plural forms [6 more month / 6 more months] in use of past tenses [ask / asked] and future forms [âI love to / Iâd love to]. The content of this letter covers each area of the task, but to achieve a higher score, the candidate should demonstrate a greater level of accuracy with vocabulary and grammatical structures.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-gt-3-t2",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · General Training Test 3 · Task 2",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:5.5,taskPrompt:`Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods. 1024 1025What are the reasons for this? 1026 1027Is this a positive or a negative trend? 1028 1029Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 1030 1031Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Yes, this is a positive trend, but when you know about that manufacturer company, about their service, quality, quantity etc. If you buy goods from you known brand then it is good for you because you get good product. 1032 1033Goods are produced in local areas are cheaper than imported gods. There is a big price difference in local and imported goods. All people are not reached so those who are not afford imported goods they automatically turn to local goods. 1034 1035If you buying any goods from our local brand then the money remain in our area & this is very helpful to make our economy strong. We have to buy only those product that made or produced in our area because it gives money, job to our area. 1036 1037There are verious frouad companies selling duplicate of first copy imported goods. So this is also the one reason or kind of fear for not buying imported goods. There are verious charges applied when we buy imported goods and for local goods there are no such charges or taxes applied. 1038 1039Hear I would like to share my experience. I buy a jeans of Lewis brand of rs 4000 after some days the colour of pant become lighter day by day, I feel very bad because I invest 4000 rs on jeans only because Lewis is an imported brand, then I thought if I buy jeans from local area then I get 4 jeans in 4000 & I realised I did mistake & from that day I choose to buy goods that are produced in my local area rather than
1039imported goods. 1040 1041I suggest you that, I you want to be a part of our developing country then buy goods from our local brands this helps to keep our money in our country.`,responseWordCount:300,examinerComment:"This response addresses both parts of the question: the reasons for consumers buying local goods, and whether this is positive or negative. In the first line, we see the writer thinks it is a positive trend. Then reasons are given for buying local goods rather than imported goods: if the product is local, it will be a good product; locally produced goods will be cheaper; the money will remain in the local area, helping the local economy with jobs and money; and buying local will avoid buying fake goods. A personal example is given to illustrate the positive trend. The conclusion is really âgiving adviceâ to consumers to buy local brands to develop their local economy. There is progression through the response, but linking expressions are largely missing or incorrect [Hear / Here | / suggest you that / | suggest that]. However, cohesive devices are sometimes used well [those who | our | those product that) but can be faulty. Vocabulary has an adequate range, with some good collocation, [known brand | price difference | no such charges or taxes applied] despite some errors in spelling [verious frouad / various fraud]. There are some examples of complex sentence forms, for example, in the fourth paragraph, but there are quite frequent grammatical errors. To achieve a higher score, the candidate should present the ideas around the âpositive and negative trendâ more clearly. Their conclusion should summarise the main arguments, rather than âgive adviceâ to local consumers. They should also demonstrate a greater level of accuracy with vocabulary and grammatical structures.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-gt-4-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · General Training Test 4 · Task 1",module:"general_training",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"general_task1",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`You started in your present job two years ago. And you now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company. 1042 1043Write a letter to your manager. In your letter 1044 1045say what you have learned in your present job 1046 1047suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department 1048 1049explain why you do not wish to leave the company 1050 1051Write at least 150 words. 1052 1053You do NOT need to write any addresses. 1054 1055Begin your letter as follows: 1056 1057Dearâ¦â¦,`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Dear Sir. 1058 1059I am writing to ask for a permition about changing my position. As you know, I have already work in sales department for two years which let me learn a lot of skills of sales and helped me becoming the best sales man the season. However, I would like to require moving to Design department and I would state my reason in the following paragraphs. 1060 1061First of all, I would like to thank you for giving me many chances to equip my sales skills, such as negociating with clients, promoting product and most importantly, getting over fears of meeting strangers. 1062 1063However, inspite of sales skills, I eager to learn more skills in the company. Especially, I am always interest in design our companyâs product. Moreover, I have got some certificates from self learning and understand some design skills when I was asistanted my colleage from design department. 1064 1065Besides, I really love this company. The environment and working feeling are perfect here. So, those are why I am keen to stay in this company. 1066 1067Thanks you for your reading and I look forward to hearing from you soon. 1068 1069Yours faithfully,`,responseWordCount:191,examinerComment:"This letter is a good response to the task and the letter format is appropriate and helpful. However, the second bullet point, which is to suggest how the company would benefit, is not well covered. In the third paragraph, there is mention of an increased understanding of design skills from another department, but it is not entirely clear how this benefits the company. More could be added on this point to improve the response. Nevertheless, ideas are arranged coherently and there is good progression. Some useful linking devices are used [However | First of all | Moreover | Besides], although they all come at the beginning of the sentence. We also have reference and substitution (in the following paragraphs | are perfect here], but there are errors [those / that is]. There is some good vocabulary, but there are also errors which detract from the score [permition / permission | asistanted / assisting] but do not have too much impact. Grammatical structures contain some stronger examples [would like to thank you for | why I am keen to stay], but overall, the level of error is quite high. In order to score more highly, the candidate should clearly highlight all three bullet points and extend responses. There should also be greater accuracy in spelling and fewer errors in the grammatical structures.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c19-gt-4-t2",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 19 Academic / General Training Student's Books with Answers with Audio",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 19 · General Training Test 4 · Task 2",module:"general_training",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:6.5,taskPrompt:`Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people. 1070 1071Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 1072 1073Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 1074 1075Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`It is always a debatable topic whether photographers should follow famous people to get information about their lives. One
1075class of people says it is good and photographers should do it while another class comments that it is not good to interferes someoneâs life. Before giving my opinion, I would like to discuss both the view points in detail as given in coming paragraphs. 1076 1077There is one group of people who believe that photographers should always follow well known celebrities and try to get photos and information about their life. As the fans of that particular celebrity are very interested in such news and information. By getting this type of details, fans would love to follow that personâs habits, style, clothing, etc. For example, one of my friend Ketul is a big fan of famous filmstar Salman Khan. He used to follow him and wearning same clothes, Keeps similar hairstyle as Salman Khan is having. One more reason is that the photographers taking pictures of such famous personalities and spreading it via different social media makes that person more famous. In many cases, that celebrities like this thing. 1078 1079On the other hand, another group of people believe that photographers should not do this. Following someone and taking pictures of his/her personal life is wrong. Celebrities are also a human being. 1080 1081They also want some space apart from their career. There are some cases where these personalities were upset and angry on photographers for doing this. For example, in December 2011, Priyanka Chopra (a famous actress) field a case against a photographer for the same. 1082 1083In conclusion, I would like to say that the photographers should do this but with the permission of that celebrities. Taking pictures of someone without informing is always wrong. Getting pictures of famous personality is peopleâs demand and famous people should always satisfy his/her fans by allowing photographers to take their pictures.`,responseWordCount:316,examinerComment:"This is a good response. The candidate presents ideas on both sides (whether it is right or wrong for photographers to follow famous people) and gives a clear opinion at the end. There is a demand for photographs of famous people; some people think it is acceptable for photographers to go ahead, as the fans demand it (an example is given of a famous film star) and some celebrities like it, as it makes them more famous; and others think it is wrong, as celebrities are also human beings who deserve some [space] (an example is given of another celebrity). The conclusion draws both sides together. The response is logically organised. There are a range of linking devices [Before | One more reason | On the other hand] and the candidate uses cohesive devices within sentences effectively, such as referencing [people who | that person | this type]. Vocabulary is good with some higher-level collocation [particular celebrity | taking pictures]. There are a few errors in spelling [wearning / wearing] and word choice, but they do not impede communication. There are a variety of complex structures and frequent sentences with multiple clauses. To achieve a higher score, the candidate should demonstrate a greater level of accuracy with vocabulary and grammatical structures.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/family/2100113118",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c20-a-1-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 20 Practice Test Academic Student's Book with Answers with Digital Pack",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 1 · Task 1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:5.5,taskPrompt:`The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period. 1084 1085Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 1086 1087Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/cambridge-18-20-c20-a-1-t1.png",candidateResponse:`The first table shows changes in total population of New York city from 1800 to 2000. In 1800, New York's population was 79.216 then in 100 years the population sharply increased as over 4 times in 1800. Next 100 years, it still became more as it increased over twice as much as in 1800. Other two tables show changes of population in five different areas in New York. In 1800 Manhattan has 60.515 On the other hand other four areas, Brookly, Bronx, Queens and Staten Island had only 18.701. Manhattan has almost three times more than group of other four cities also. It had 76% of population in New York. It tells us Manhattan was the busiest city in New York. In 1900, Manhattan's populat increased sharply however, other broughs had bigger change. Population rate rise dramatically as 1587.109. 1088 1089In 2000 other broughs had 6471.089 and 81% of population of New York. On the other hand Manhattan's population has dicreased and it became only 19% of New York population. Last 200 years people chose to live differant cities in New York.`,responseWordCount:181,examinerComment:"This response is a good attempt at the task; however, selected information is limited and there are some inaccuracies. For example, data for Manhattan are minimal, and there is some inaccuracy, [in 1900 other broughs had bigger change]. There is also a small error in the final sentence, [chose to live differant cities], this should be 'different districts' because the city is New York City. The score is also impacted by the lack of an overview. The last sentence is an attempt at an overview, but is not sufficiently specific. The information is arranged coherently, with some good use of cohesive devices [then in | on the other hand | it | however] but there is repetition [on the other hand | in], and the range could be wider. Vocabulary is generally adequate, with some good examples [sharply increased | dramatically | chose to live], but there are some noticeable spelling errors [populat | dicreased | differant]. Similarly, grammatical range is limited in this response. Some good use of comparative structures [increased over twice as much as | has almost three times more than | was the busiest]; however, there are errors, including choice of tenses and missing articles.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/product/2700250101",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c20-a-1-t2",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 20 Practice Test Academic Student's Book with Answers with Digital Pack",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 1 · Task 2",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:6.5,taskPrompt:`Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. 1090 1091Do you agree or disagree? 1092 1093Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 1094 1095Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Access to pure clean water is for sure a necessary right for all human beings. It is one of the things needed to survive on this planet. Now, some people might argue that only and only water is required and the state of cleanliness of it should be a secondary thing to ensure, while other argue that there is no point in having water which, in some cases is not clean. can result to be fatal. 1096 1097However all this debate comes down to one point whether or not this water shall be free of cost for humans. Let us look at it from a more fimiliar approach. All humans on earth have free will and a sight to life; what will happen if one day someone comes up to us and says that is is he or she who owns the air that we breathe in and just like that forces us to pay for over lives. This would not be acceptable to any human and they would be taking measures against. 1098 1099Just like that our earth was created with all the water it had even before humans came into existence hence proving us that no person or no government is the sole protector of the earth's water resources. 1100 1101Water was created for the dwellers of soil and creatures of the sea and all mankind to utilize. The creator of it did not ask us to pay for it by any means of money then who are we to charge for such a basic thing which we do not even own? 1102 1103We all have seen countries going to war claiming the ownership of the water resources and if one of them does win all the effort goes down to nothing when in the end they tax their own countrymen for it. 1104 1105It is clear that access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have water supply is free. It is the responsibility of the authorities to look after the needs of the people as it them who declared clean water as a basic right.`,responseWordCount:349,examinerComment:"This is a good response that provides relevant ideas. The writer expresses their position, and agrees with the statement that access to clean water should be free, although there is some repetition and some lack of clarity within the main ideas expressed. There are supporting arguments that include: whether any kind of water, or only 'clean water' should be provided, whether people should be allowed to 'own' the air we breathe and force people to pay for it, whether any person should be the [sole protector] of the water supply and whether the aim is to [tax their own countrymen] for water. The conclusion states that governments have declared that clean water is a basic right, and so they should look after the needs of the people, and provide [every home] with a free water supply. Ideas are generally logically organised, but there is a lack of progression around the sections that refer to the ownership of water on planet earth, with repetition across three paragraphs (2, 3 and 4). However, generally, ideas are arranged in order and we can follow the progression through the response. Cohesive devices are used to some good effect, including referencing within sentences [while | us | who | their own countrymen]. However, paragraphing is not used effectively to sequence ideas, so more effective paragraphing could increase the score. There are some strong examples of vocabulary [comes down to one point | forces us to | look after the needs of] with some higher-level collocation. However, the level of error is quite high and detracts from the score for lexis. Grammatical range is also fairly wide, but again, the errors and missing punctuation mean that the response cannot score more highly. To achieve a higher score, the candidate should provide greater clarity when extending the main ideas, and use more effective paragraphing to organise ideas and improve progression.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/product/2700250101",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c20-a-2-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 20 Practice Test Academic Student's Book with Answers with Digital Pack",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 2 · Task 1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. 1106 1107Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 1108 1109Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/cambridge-18-20-c20-a-2-t1.png",candidateResponse:`If we look at the pictures we will see how Beechwood Farm has changed along the time. 1110 1111Years ago, in 1950, Beachwood Farm was a tipycal farm. A track crossed the farm, so farmers could reach the barn and the farmhouse passing by the fruit trees, and the place where the soft fruits and the vegetables were growing. At the opposite side of the truck, was the field where the sheeps were situated. That was close to the farmhouse, were chickens were also situated. All the farm was sourrounded, at the south, by a river. 1112 1113Nowadeys, the farm has suffered changes. Modern life brought to the farm some needs to survive. The main change was the road that replaced the track. Now is easyer to arrive any place in the farm. 1114 1115There is a parking zone near the road where the sheeps used to eat grass. We can also find a camping field and Solar panels in that zone. Another parking zone can be find where the solar panels are situated. Just in front of the first parking zone we can see a farm shop. The old barn was replaced for a holiday cottoges, and relocated close to the chickens, near the river. 1116 1117Lot of things have changed since 1950, and Beechwood Farm is not an exception. Modern times had come, and everyone had to be adju
1117sted to new ways of living. We still have Beechwood Farm, but a new sophisticated and modern one.`,responseWordCount:244,examinerComment:"This response addresses all of the changes illustrated in the farm plans. The writer describes how the farm looked in 1950, then moves on to the present-day plan. There is an overview in the last paragraph [Lot of things have changed since 1950, and Beechwood Farm ... a new sophisticated and modern one] but it does not mention the link to attracting visitors, so is not complete. Information is generally arranged coherently. The first two paragraphs cover the 1950s site, with the remainder focused on the farm today. There is evidence of linking expressions [At the opposite side | That | Nowadeys]; however, there is a lack of reference, resulting in repetition [farm | zone]. Vocabulary is generally good [parking zone | relocated | exception | adjusted | sophisticated] but errors remain [along the time / over time | tipycal | sourrounded | Nowadeys | easyer | cottoges]. Grammatical range is mixed. There are examples of complex sentence forms, including [If] clauses and modal forms [could reach | can also find] but there are also a range of errors which preclude a higher score. To improve the score, an overview that summarises the main changes should be added. It would also be beneficial to show greater accuracy in vocabulary and use of grammatical structures.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/product/2700250101",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c20-a-2-t2",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 20 Practice Test Academic Student's Book with Answers with Digital Pack",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 2 · Task 2",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:7,taskPrompt:`In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays. 1118 1119What is the value of long school holidays? 1120What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays? 1121 1122Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 1123 1124Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`In today's world, education is a must to every child and individual across every country. The duration of summer holidays became a major thing in terms of priority in some countries like in middle eastern location. Where as cold countries which experience long winters have concentrated less on summer holidays giving only few weeks for summer vacations. 1125 1126On the other side, a regular family would like to spend most of the time in summer holidays by travelling to their homeland, meeting their relatives and seek long durations for summer, so that children can spend valuable time with cousins and relatives making valuable memories. On the other hand, some parents who work 365 days would find it difficult to take care of children during summer holidays as they have to work and prefer shorter period of holidays. 1127 1128This has become a major problem and is affecting children in a bad way. Childhood is to cherish some good valuable memories along with studies. Longer summer breaks allow the children to make time to visit family relatives and this early relationship helps to maintain a stronger bond for the rest of the life. Once they are out of school, they have to work and make a living for themselves where they won't find time for their loved ones. 1129 1130Coming to shorter school holidays, they help the children from falling back in studies (or) having interest. With longer duration of holidays children take a lot of time to get back their concentration after the school starts. It has both positive and negative side to it. Shorter school holidays help the student to maintain concentration, performance but at the same time they won't form special bonds which are really important. 1131 1132From my perspective, maintaining strong relationship bonds is more important than just education which requires a longer duration of summer holidays.`,responseWordCount:306,examinerComment:"This is an appropriate response, with a series of ideas for each part, presented effectively. It starts with a note that different c
1132ountries have different patterns. The value of long holidays include families being able to travel and spend time with relatives, as once children leave school, they won't have the free time to develop these strong bonds. The arguments for shorter holidays mention families where parents work and cannot take so much leave, and that it helps children not to fall behind in their studies. The candidate concludes that stronger family bonds are more important, so longer holidays are best. There is some minor repetition in the ideas presented. Ideas are logically organised, and cohesive devices are varied. Reference is used [This | they | their] but some inaccuracy in linking devices [Where as | On the otherside | Coming to], and some repetition [relatives | valuable] limits the rating in this area. Vocabulary is a strength, with frequent high-level content and some skilful collocation [spend valuable time | affecting children | maintain a stronger bond]. Some errors remain [falling back / falling behind]. Grammatical structures are also varied and show some flexibility and some multi-clause sentences. However, most sentences are not error-free, as there are slips with prepositions [to every child / for every child | in holiday / on holiday] and plurals [
1132shorter period of holidays | side / sides] and some missing punctuation. To achieve a higher score, the candidate could explore the 'value of long holidays' and 'arguments for shorter holidays' in more depth. A greater degree of accuracy in vocabulary and grammatical structures would also improve the score.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/product/2700250101",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c20-a-3-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 20 Practice Test Academic Student's Book with Answers with Digital Pack",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 3 · Task 1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:5,taskPrompt:`The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. 1133 1134Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 1135 1136Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/cambridge-18-20-c20-a-3-t1.png",candidateResponse:`The illustration show information about a public library in a city which called Little Charfont. The member of library is mostly compose by Adults. It is around in half, the rawest is adults 65 and over. 1137 1138Fiction is the most popular category either children or adults. Both of them are recorded by 38%. Wheras, nonfiction is less popular than fiction. It is 13% and 6% for children. The visualisation's categories, such as DVDs and audio books are lowest in the same binding which is total number of loans. 1139 1140The bar is starting as the lowest in 2007. It is about 15,000. However, It has been slowly rised up until 2011. Unfortunately, It is likely to decrease as 2009 during 2012 to 2013. Nevertheless, It has been surprisingly increased by 2016. In 2016, It break new record In the chart. It could be about 21,000!`,responseWordCount:144,examinerComment:"This response does present data for each of the charts, and generally answers the question. There is limited detail though, for example, when describing the pie chart for the age of library members, we are told that the members are mostly adults, and those 65 and over are the [rawest]. There is no mention of children and young adults, and no reporting of the data in the pie chart itself. This means that only limited details are presented. Ideas are organised, and there is an underlying sense of meaning but some lack of progression. Sentences are not fluently linked to each other. Cohesive devices tend to be overused [which | Both | such as | However | Unfortunately | Nevertheless], and some are faulty [Wheras / Whereas]. There is some reference [It], but this is used repetitively, especially in the last paragraph. There is an attempt to use a range of vocabulary [less popular | visualisation's | break new record]; however, overall, the frequency of error, and the mistakes in word choice [rawest / lowest | binding / ?] limit the score for vocabulary. The range of grammatical structures is also limited. The response should be written using past tenses, as the data covers 2007 to 2016, but is mostly written in the present tense. Sentences are generally short, and the level of error is noticeable for the reader. This response could be improved by including an appropriate overview, and providing greater accuracy across vocabulary and grammatical structures.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/product/2700250101",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c20-a-3-t2",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 20 Practice Test Academic Student's Book with Answers with Digital Pack",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 3 · Task 2",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:7.5,taskPrompt:`Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether. 1141 1142Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses? 1143 1144Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 1145 1146Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`Many people nowadays have decided to stop flying or to limit the amount of times they use this form of transport. This will undoubtedly have great benefits for the environment, but it may mean that for individuals or businesses this can translate to higher expenses. I believe the disadvantages for individuals and businesses would be greater than the effects on the environment. This essay will discuss advantages and disadvantages of this. 1147 1148Environmental benefits of reduced air travel would have a direct effect in the amount of pollution in the air, which would mean a greener planet. However, this would also mean a rise in the use of other types of transportation. For example, if the amount of cars, buses or trucks on the road increases this also means greenhouse gas emissions increase too. 1149 1150On the other hand, for individuals or businesses this could mean higher travelling costs, as well as lengthy trips and possible delays in reaching their destinations. All of this can affect the companies resources and even possibly cause them to lose business deals, or not even commence them due to restricted trading times. Higher costs for companies can cause job cuts which can have devastating effects for families. 1151 1152In conclusion, I believe the disadvantages on individuals and businesses caused by a reduction in air travel are far greater. The potential implications for c
1152ompanies of higher travel and shipping costs, could reflect losses that can eventuate in job cuts. The effects on the environment would not be enough to merit such a drastic culture change and possibly pollution levels could rise as a result of the increase on other contaminants.`,responseWordCount:272,examinerComment:"This is a strong, detailed and well-developed response. There are several appropriate ideas; the position is presented in the first paragraph and it is evidenced consistently. To improve this response, there could be more detail on the impact on 'individuals' as most of the examples refer to 'businesses'. The ideas are organised logically and the paragraphs support overall coherence. Cohesion is used well throughout, and the message can be followed easily. Vocabulary is fluently and flexibly used [translate to higher expenses | devastating effects | potential implications] with accurate spelling and only occasional errors in word choice [commence them / start them | eventuate in / result in]. Similarly, the range of grammatical structures is wide. There are frequent multi-clause sentences and the response is mostly error free.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/product/2700250101",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c20-a-4-t1",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 20 Practice Test Academic Student's Book with Answers with Digital Pack",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 4 · Task 1",module:"academic",task:"task_1",taskGenre:"academic_task1",officialBand:6,taskPrompt:`The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo. 1153 1154Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 1155 1156Write at least 150 words.`,taskImagePath:"/official-scored-writing/task-images/cambridge-18-20-c20-a-4-t1.png",candidateResponse:`The given diagram describes the process of manufacturing bamboo fabrics. Overall, the process includes a few main stages, which are showen on the diagram and are numbered from 1 to 8. 1157The first stage, obviously, consists of planting and growing bamboo plants, usually happening in spring. 1158The second phase, We could say harvesting one, is happening in the middle part of the year in autumn. Bamboo stems are cutting off by the season workers, collecting and sendening to the special plants during this period. 1159In the plants, what are showed a the third and the forth stages. on the diagram, the bamboo stems are cutting into long strips, then produced strips are crushing to make liquid pulp. 1160During the next phase these pulp is filtering through the special types of sieves to separate long fibres from liquid. 1161Then the fibres, filtered by previous step, are being undergone through the softenning procedure. This procedure includes adding water and amine oxide. 1162The seventh stage is the sppinning the soften fibres to make a strong bamboo thread. 1163Produced yarns might be used to make fabric, which is the last - eighth phase, by weaveing them using special equipment.`,responseWordCount:195,examinerComment:"This is generally a good response, and it presents the key stages shown in the process. There is an overview, but it is rather generic and only tells us how many main stages there are [main stages ... are numbered from 1 to 8]. To improve the overview, instead of reporting the number of stages, there should be a summary of the main stages. Ideas are arranged logically. There are some nice linking expressions, appropriate for a 'process' [The first stage | then | During the next phase | which is] but there is some repetition [The first stage | The second phase | third and the forth stages | next phase | seventh stage | eighth phase]. Most of the sentences start on a new line - this means paragraphing is not present. Vocabulary is appropriate and spelling is generally well managed but there are errors. Grammatical structures are mixed but errors in verb forms are noticeable, particularly in passive structures [are cutting / are cut | are being undergone / undergo]. To achieve a higher score, the candidate should present an overview which summarises the main stages and paragraphing should be used to better organise the stages.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/product/2700250101",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"},{id:"c20-a-4-t2",sourceKey:"cambridge-18-20",sourceLabel:"IELTS 20 Practice Test Academic Student's Book with Answers with Digital Pack",sourceReference:"Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 4 · Task 2",module:"academic",task:"task_2",taskGenre:"task2",officialBand:7,taskPrompt:`Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends. 1164 1165How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? 1166Do you think this is a positive or negative development? 1167 1168Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 1169 1170Write at least 250 words.`,taskImagePath:null,candidateResponse:`The way many of us are dressed today is believed to be affected by the fashion industry. The reason why it is so importent for some people to choose their clothes according to the trends may be in our dependence on what is popular at the moment which is a double-edged sword. Of course, trying to keep up with modern fads consumes pretty much time and energy, but is it really that negative in terms of maintainig individuality? To my mind, it is not. 1171 1172Not surprisingly, global fashion has influenced people's tastes in clothing a great deal. We all see those celebrities on TV and on the Internet boasting their brand new outfit making many men and women jealous. Would blond hair in concert with a white dress have been so popular back in the day if it had not been for the voloptious Marlyn Monroe? world-wide famous fashion designers keep surprising consumers with their wild imagination producing more and more types of style. For instance over-sized winter coats have drawn attention not only from the youth but from the middle-aged as well. 1173 1174Fashions by many are believed to dictate people how to look. They impose new styles, and some people wear certain clothes just because another designer told them to do so. 1175 1176Looking on the bright side, there's absolutely no harm in getting advice from the fashion industry on what to wear this season. Moderation is the key. Do not overdo it. If you put on a garment that is really comfortable and suitable for you, it does not really matter whether it is fashionable or not. Your individuality won't be hurt if you simply like something that is in trend.`,responseWordCount:282,examinerComment:"This is a strong response overall. The first part, on the influence of global fashion trends is clear and detailed: people are influenced because they see celebrities on TV and the internet, want to copy famous icons like Marilyn Monroe,
1176continue to be surprised by designers' wild imagination and experience more and more styles. The response to the second part is less well covered. The 'negative' side of this question is not addressed very thoroughly, apart from saying it takes [time and energy] to keep up with modern fads. The 'positives' include that there is [no harm in getting advice] on what to wear. More focus on the second part would improve the response. Progression is logical. Linking expressions are appropriate [Of course | For instance | Looking on the bright side] with some good examples of reference [their | those | another] and paragraphing is helpful (although paragraphs 3 and 4 could be combined as they cover the same idea). Vocabulary use is strong with some precise meanings and effective collocation [keep up | modern fads | influenced people's tastes | impose new styles]. There are some small slips in spelling [importent | maintainig | voloptious] although the meaning is clear. Sentences are varied and contain complex structures. There are multi-clause sentences with a range of structures, including conditionals [if], but a few errors remain. Overall, this is a good response. To achieve a higher score, the candidate should include a few more ideas around the 'positive or negative' influence of global fashion trends.",sourceUrl:"https://shop.cambridge.org/english/product/2700250101",sourcePageLabel:"Source page verified",sourceConfidence:"page_image_audited"}],I={1:{task2:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"128â129",candidateResponse:["Scientific developments are occurring at a great rate but some of them do not seem to be of help to people. In fact, sometimes scientific innovations are regretted by those who invented them. This essay will argue that science should never harm people but scientists should aim to further their understanding as much as to improve people's lives.","On one hand, there is a strong argument that the public good should be the top priority for scientists. They are the ones who have the potential to make discoveries and invent things that can change the world. Electricity, modern medicine, telecommunications and the internet are just some of the scientific innovations that have changed lives for the better.","On the other hand, sometimes scientists do research just in the hope of adding to their knowledge. While they should make absolutely sure that their experiments do no harm, they may not know until they have finished how their findings will be used and whether they will improve people's lives. The scientist Nobel invented dynamite to help with mining, not knowing that it would one day be used in weapons, and the scientist who discovered the life-saving drug penicillin did so quite by chance.","Overall, it seems that science should improve the lives of people and that ought to be one of its aims. However, knowledge and discovery are aims in themselves and are just as important for scientists. Sometimes scientists do not know how their scientific breakthroughs will be used until their work is done."],examinerComment:["This response presents a well-developed response to the question and concludes that the aim of scientific discoveries should be to improve peopleâs lives, but that the process often results in unexpected outcomes.","The candidate agrees with but adds to the statement. This is acceptable in a âto what extentâ question, as the candidate is explaining that the extent cannot always be predicted.","The candidate presents the argument that the true aim of science is gaining new knowledge and discoveries. They agree that this should be to improve peopleâs lives but that the results canât be predicted.","The second paragraph gives examples of discoveries that have changed peopleâs lives for the better [Electricity, modern medicine, telecommunications and the internet].","To improve the response, this paragraph could be expanded so that the list of discoveries is fully aligned with the question.","The third paragraph presents the other side, that scientists do not often know what they will find. Examples of two innovations are given [dynamite | penicillin] to support this point.","Ideas are logically organised and paragraphs have clear central topics. Cohesive devices are used appropriately with some appropriate referencing [them | their | it], although linkers often appear at the start of the sentence, which can seem a little mechanical [On one hand | On the other hand | While | Overall | However | Sometimes].","In order to improve the overall rating, the second paragraph could be further extended and the use of cohesive devices could be less mechanical and n
1176ot always at the start of each sentence.","However, this is a strong, higher-level response to the task."]}},2:{task2:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"131",candidateResponse:["Students attend university to improve their prospects and find suitable employment after graduation. For this reason, some feel that they should focus all their energy on their main subjects to gain a relevant qualification. Others want a more well-rounded education, so they try to learn about additional subjects.","It is perfectly reasonable for students to enter university with a strong sense of curiosity and a desire to learn as much as possible. Unfortunately, we tend to put subjects into artificial boxes, suggesting that business, art and science are not connected. If students become too focused on a single area, it may stifle their initial curiosity, limiting their potential. They could also graduate with a very narrow skill set that doesn't translate well to the current job market, which often favours those who have taken a multidisciplinary approach to their studies.","Despite this, caution is certainly needed. The more we learn about a subject, the more complex it becomes. Gaining an in-depth, specialist knowledge of a subject requires a certain level of focus and dedication over a long period. If we try to learn about too many things at once, our knowledge may lack the depth required to obtain a qualification. If they are not careful, young people could begin to lose interest in their main subjects, which would be detrimental to their studies.","While learning about other subjects is not necessarily a bad thing, I believe university students should ensure that their main subjects remain the priority so that they do not lose sight of their objective: gaining a qualification. Then they can calculate how much time, energy and headspace they have left for learning about other topics."],examinerComment:["This response addresses both parts of the task and presents a clear opinion at the end. The second paragraph explains how the current university system is set up to [put subjects into artificial boxes] and how this narrow focus can disadvantage students. The third paragraph presents the benefits of [Gaining an in-depth, specialist knowledge] and the dangers of trying to include too much. Both sides of the question are addressed in well-developed paragraphs.","To improve the response, it would be helpful to set out the opinion at the start, for added continuity of the position.","Vocabulary is natural and sophisticated [stifle their initial curiosity | Gaining an in-depth, specialist knowledge | detrimental to their studies] without errors.","Grammatical structures are wide-ranging, with a range of tenses and conditional [if] and modal [may | could | would | can] structures embedded in complex, flexible sentences.","This is a high-level response which fully addresses the task."]}},3:{task1:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"132",candidateResponse:["The diagrams show Central Library before and after changes were made to its layout.","Clearly, the library has been updated to include dedicated spaces for events and now has an open space in the centre.","Twenty years ago, to the left of the entrance there was a reading room with newspapers and magazines and to the right there was an enquiry desk. Now thereâs a computer room on the left and a café where the information desk once was. Adult fiction has moved to the right-hand side of the room and all reference books are now on the left. There is a smaller information desk with self-service machines in what once was the adult non-fiction section.","There was a room at the back left-hand corner that had computer games, CDs and videos that has since been enlarged and houses childrenâs fiction. It has a space with two sofas where storytelling events are held. There is a lecture room in the back right-hand corner where childrenâs books used to be."],examinerComment:["This response covers the main changes that have occurred over the 20-year period. An overview is presented in the second paragraph which is quite general: it refers to the [dedicated spaces for events] but this could be improved by giving a summary of the key changes (dedicated spaces for events, self
1176-service facilities and a café).","Ideas are arranged logically: the changes to the front of the library are presented in the third paragraph and the changes to the back section in the final paragraph. This shows a logical approach to reporting the changes and there is some good cohesion [once was | now on the left | has since been].","There is a good range of vocabulary. In this kind of task, vocabulary from the floor plan needs to be used to report the changes, but the use of different words shows some flexibility and precision [been updated | dedicated spaces | houses].","In terms of grammar, there are error-free sentences and some variation in structures used when describing changes [has been updated | what once was | has since been enlarged].","The response could be improved by extending the overview to include more of a summary of the main changes but overall, this response captures the main changes in a logical way."]},task2:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"133â134",candidateResponse:["Statistics show that the worldâs population is increasing rapidly. It is expected that most of us will be living in cities within the next few decades. The question of whether urbanisation is a positive or negative development remains controversial.","A rapid influx of people moving from rural to urban areas is bound to cause problems. Firstly, pressure on resources such as housing and transportation intensifies. It is becoming difficult for many people to afford adequate housing in cities. A by-product of this is the creation of slums causing low-income families to group together in neglected parts of the city. These people often become trapped in a cycle of poverty that is difficult to escape.","As mentioned above, the growth of urban areas can also lead to severe traffic congestion because more and more vehicles travel into the city from the suburbs. This has many knock-on effects, such as problems with air quality. It also leads many city dwellers to experience mental health issues because travelling across large cities is tiring and stressful.","All of this being said, I don't believe that urbanisation is a wholly negative development. There are advantages to living in large cities that are well managed. For example, there are more schools which means more education opportunities. Access to higher-quality health care is often better in cities. Some cities have also introduced ride-sharing, e-bikes and park and ride services that reduce environmental problems.","My opinion is that many of the problems associated with urbanisation are avoidable but dealing with increasing populations in cities is a formidable challenge. How governments, businesses and society respond to this challenge will dramatically affect the future of our world."],examinerComment:["This response addresses both sides of the question and presents a position, that the movement to cities is not a [wholly negative development]. The second and third paragraphs lay out the problems that can be caused by a [rapid influx] of people to urban areas [housing | transportation | traffic congestion] and the fourth paragraph presents some of the advantages [education opportunities | higher-quality health care | environmental transport initiatives].","However, the part of the question about âthe population in the countryside ... decreasingâ is not covered. The candidate would need to include it to provide a full answer to this question.","Information and ideas are logically organised and there is a clear progression, starting with the challenges and ending with a range of advantages.","Vocabulary is used with a natural and sophisticated control [bound to | trapped in a cycle of poverty | severe traffic congestion | knock-on effects], although rare errors remain [education opportunities / educational opportunities]. Grammar is flexible and accurate, with a wide range of structures included. There are some shorter sentences which could be extended and more multi-clause examples could be included to add complexity.","To improve this response, consideration should be given to the impact of the shrinking population in the countryside."]}},4:{task1:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"135",candidateResponse:["From the line graph, we can see the average monthly rise or fall in how much copper, nickel and zinc cost throughout 2014.","Overall, nickel started with the highest percentage change of the three but ended with the lowest. Zinc started with the smallest change and ended with the highest, and copper prices fluctuated. Prices for all three metals dipped in June.","In January the price of nickel was up six per cent, but this dropped to negative three percent in June, ending the year with a one percent increase in both November and December. Copper began the year with an increase of two percent and by May, the price was dropping (by slightly less than one per cent). It rose again, increasing by a percentage point in July, August and September. Zinc saw its most dramatic increase in February, with three per cent and the price fell in June (a one percent decrease). The change was negative until October/November when it began to rise."],examinerComment:["This response reports the main data for each of the three metals. There is an introduction in the first paragraph and an overview in the second, followed by the presentation of the main trends of all three categories in the third. Some details are missing (copper after September and no percentage changes for any metal from July to September).","The candidate identifies the âdipâ for all three in June, but to score more highly, they could also have mentioned that overall, percentage changes fell at the beginning of the year, remained static from July to September and rose after October to the end of the year.","Information is arranged coherently; each metal is taken in turn for data reporting. There is good use of cohesive devices [Overall | but | with | when], but there could be more.","Vocabulary is adequate with some attempts to use less common items [fluctuated | dramatic increase] and attempts to use synonyms [ended with the lowest | dipped | dropped].","There is a lack of complex structures, as most sentences are simple or compound. However, there is some variety in structures, including comparatives [highest | smallest | most dramatic] and continuous tenses [was dropping].","To improve the response, the candidate could extend the overview to reflect some common trends and should include some of the missing details."]},task2:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"136â137",candidateResponse:["The population in most parts of the world is ageing; people are living longer and there are fewer younger people in many places as birth rates fall. This phenomenon has pros and cons, but this essay will contend that, on balance, the advantages of having an older population outweigh the negatives.","The first issue that occurs to many people when considering the ageing population is the expense. If people live longer, they may have more than 30 years of retirement and may need to be supported financially by the government or their families. If they experience age-related illness, this impacts the health system and takes up resources needed by other people in society. Whatâs more, when older people are financially independent, it might be hard for younger people if they have to compete to get a foot in the door of the housing market or gain employment.","That being said, older people have a lot to contribute in terms of wisdom, experience and skills. Many people are active and productive for longer than their counterparts were 50 years ago and are an asset to the economy and society well into their old age. They are able to work for longer and after retirement they contribute in many ways too, such as by doing charitable work, spending money as consumers and supporting their families. Grandparents often care for their young grandchildren, making it easier for both parents to work.","While it is true that an ageing population poses challenges for governments, it is clear that these are outweighed by the significant benefits that elderly people bring to society."],examinerComment:["This is a good response to the task. Both sides of the argument are presented, with the ideas extended for both. The candidate makes their position clear from the beginning, that there are more advantages than disadvantages.","The second paragraph addresses the expense of looking after the elderly, the health system and the cost for governments. It also captures the challenge that older people take up houses and jobs so younger people cannot progress.","The third paragraph presents the advantages of the [wisdom, experience and skills] older people can bring: that they are more active and remain productive for longer, not only working, but also [doing charitable work, spending money as consumers, supporting their families and even grandchildren for the working parents].","This means that the conclusion is relevant and justified.","Ideas are organised and cohesion has good progression.","Vocabulary is skilfully used, with some high-level terms [phenomenon | age-related illness | impacts the health system] and some sophisticated examples [get a foot in the door | counterparts].","There are a range of complex grammatical structures, including several conditional structures [if]. The conditionals are used to emphasise the challenges presented and are without errors.","This is a high-level, fully developed response with i
1176deas that are well supported, extended and engaging."]}}};function x(e,t){return I[Number(e)]?.[t]||null}const A={1:{task1:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"131",candidateResponse:["Dear Mia","Itâs great to hear from you; your project sounds really interesting. Iâd be happy to tell you about Tet in Vietnam.","Tet is short for Tết Nguyên Äán and itâs our New Year according to the lunar calendar. Itâs the first day of spring and itâs usually in January or February. Itâs really important to us as itâs a chance for the family to come together and we visit the graves of our ancestors. Itâs probably the biggest festival in Vietnam and itâs a public holiday. We say if good things happen on the first day of the new year, the whole year will be full of blessings.","I always loved it as a child because I would get a red envelope with money inside it from the older members of the family. Now I like visiting friends and the extended family on the week of Tet and enjoying the lovely candied fruits that we have on this occasion.","I hope that helps. Do ask if thereâs anything else youâd like to know.","All the best"],examinerComment:["This is a full response to the task. The candidate addresses the first two bullet points in the second paragraph, then covers the last bullet in the third, but could add more about how New Year is celebrated. They mention [the biggest festival ... public holiday] but give no details about how it is celebrated.","However, the enthusiastic tone is just right for a letter to a friend, and progression in the response is clear. There are some effective linking expressions [according to | because | Now], although in the second paragraph, most sentences start with [Itâs], so a wider range would improve the response.","The range of vocabulary includes some less common items and some good collocation [come together | good things happen], but it could be wider. Similarly, there is a mix of grammatical structures, including conditionals [if], but generally, the range is limited with simple structures and short, compound sentences. Overall, this is an appropriate and engaging response. To improve it, the range of cohesive devices and grammatical structures could be widened."]},task2:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"132",candidateResponse:["Job seekers often question whether it is better to work for a large or a small company. I would personally prefer to work for a larger company, but Iâd like to consider the advantages and disadvantages of both.","In general, larger companies can support their employees more effectively because they have access to more resources. These could include higher salaries, end-of-year bonuses, and other perks such as an excellent food service and even sports facilities. Large companies may also contribute more to your professional development, offering regular conferences and training courses.","The size of a large company is also an indication of their success, meaning that it can offer greater stability. There is also a better chance for promotion and career development in companies with many departments and a larger management structure. Of course, advancement may not come easily because it is hard to stand out when many employees are vying for the same role.","In small companies, you may feel less like a number and that your efforts actually make a difference. You will also need to wear different hats, which helps you develop a skill set that might not be possible in a larger company. The downside is a higher chance of strained relationships because working in close proximity with the same small group of people every day can be challenging. Small companies can also be unstable. If they lose a large account or consumer tastes change, your position could suddenly become precarious.","Based on the above, Iâd say that the kind of company you work for depends on personal preference, but your future career prospects may be better in a large company."],examinerComment:["This response covers both aspects of the task, including the pros and cons of each type of workplace, with some useful detail and good supporting ideas. Ideas are logically organised and cohesion is very well managed throughout.","There are a range of linkers [Of course | Based on the above] and other cohesive devices [both | your | their | which], which means it is easy to read. Paragraphing is generally good, with the introduction and conclusion sitting separately. However, the second and third paragraphs would be better combined, as they both address âlargeâ companies.","Vocabulary is strong and there are some natural and sophisticated examples [vying for | wear different hats | strained relationships]. Grammar is flexible and accurate, with a range of structures including modals [can | may | could] and conditionals [If] as part of complex, multi-clause sentences. Errors are rare.","This is a good example of a high-level response."]}},2:{task1:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"133",candidateResponse:["Dear Sir or Madam,","I am excited to be starting work experience at the REN Broadcasting Corporation on 10 June and I would like to thank you very much for this opportunity. I am grateful to have the chance to gain some insight into the industry I wish to work in one day.","As I mentioned in my interview, I am especially interested in community television and would love to build on my skills in sound engineering. Besides this, I am hoping to develop my soft skills in areas such as teamwork, problem solving and effective communication.","I was wondering if it has been decided which team I will be working with and whether I will have a mentor assigned to me. I would like to prepare ahead of time if possible by doing some research. I also wanted to clarify whether I will be at the studio in Newtown or the headquarters in the city centre.","I am looking forward to hearing from you.","Kind regards"],examinerComment:["This is a strong response to the task; it addresses all three bullet points and uses a suitable tone to communicate with the manager of the organisation. The response is presented in the correct letter format, with an appropriate ending, and there is clear progression throughout the letter.","The range of vocabulary is wide and precise [gain some insight into | develop my soft skills | mentor assigned], without errors. The writing contains a wide range of structures, including conditionals [if] and passives [it has been decided], with accurate multi-clause sentences.","This is a good example of a higher-level response."]},task2:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"134",candidateResponse:["Some people say that we form an opinion about a person within thirty seconds of meeting them. A personâs clothing, facial expression, and even the way they shake hands can have a profou
1176nd effect on our judgement. But is this natural human tendency good or bad?","There is something unfair about our inclination to judge people too quickly. Many people have had unfortunate life experiences that can affect their confidence when meeting new people. Shyness may make them appear aloof and cold, but this initially icy persona melts away when we allow them a bit of time to warm up. Others do not have the means to dress in a way that leaves an impression. Inevitably, if we write people off too quickly, we could miss out on potential friendships, business opportunities and even romantic relationships.","There is another side to this that is also worth considering. We are all aware of the effect first impressions can have. There is even a saying: you donât get a second chance to make a first impression. Awareness of this reality should motivate us to always treat people in a friendly, respectful manner. If we strive to make a good impression on the people we meet, it increases our overall happiness and sense of well-being.","On balance, there is no doubt that judging people too quickly can have negative consequences. But knowing the power of first impressions can keep us on our toes, motivating us to question how we come across to others. Aside from this, the ability to read people quickly could also prevent us from being easily taken in by somebody with ulterior motives."],examinerComment:["This response presents both sides of the argument and the ending concludes that forming impressions early can be either positive or negative. The second paragraph presents the downsides of judging too rapidly: the impact of low confidence, being shy or not having smart clothes. It also notes that people could miss out on friendships, opportunities and romance if they judge too harshly.","The third paragraph is not entirely relevant. The question asks about the evaluation people make about the âkind of personâ and whether âwe like themâ but this paragraph mainly gives advice on how to behave when meeting new people. It should be more aligned to the question and present the advantages of forming early impressions.","There is a very wide range of vocabulary with some higher-level items [affect their confidence | aloof | icy persona | strive to make | come across]. Overall, the response includes a variety of accurate complex grammatical structures, with many long sentences containing a number of clauses.","Vocabulary and grammatical structures are very strong, accurate and flexible throughout. To improve the response, the third paragraph could present more clearly the advantages of quick decisions about the people we meet."]}},3:{task1:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"135",candidateResponse:["Dear Sir or Madam","I am writing to complain about the information on your website and the service I received at Central Station. Yesterday my elderly uncle and I arrived at Central intending to use the tickets we had purchased online to travel to Newcastle at 5.50pm. Unfortunately, we were told that our tickets were for off-peak and we couldnât use them.","When I bought the tickets, it was not clear on the website that they were just for certain times. This needs to be clarified on your website as I canât be the only one who has made this mistake. However, what really upset me was the unhelpful manner of the staff. When we asked what to do, instead of helping us to pay the difference and catch our train, the attendant waved us in the direction of a ticket machine with a long queue. We missed our train and waited an hour for the next one. Please train your personnel to be more proactive in future.","I hope you find this feedback useful and take it on board.","Yours faithfully"],examinerComment:["This is a very strong response to the task: all three bullet points are addressed with a good level of detail, and the tone is suitable for a letter of complaint. There is clear progression throughout the letter and a very natural style.","The range of vocabulary is wide and includes many higher-level items [unhelpful manner of | pay the difference | direction of | proactive]. There is only one slip [off-peak / off-peak travel].","Overall, the response includes a variety of complex grammatical structures [intending to use], with numerous long sentences containing a number of clauses, including past perfect and modal forms [had purchased | couldnât use].","This is already a very high-level response. To improve it, the final bullet point could be developed further, perhaps with an example of how the staff could be âmore proactiveâ."]},task2:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"136â137",candidateResponse:["It is increasingly common for people to hold down more than one job. Gone are the days when people could rely on one source of income to satisfy all their financial needs. I would like to consider the reasons for this change and outline its advantages and disadvantages.","People take on extra work because making ends meet has become so challenging. In re
1176cent years the cost of living has risen exponentially, making it a real challenge to break even at the end of the month. Additionally, advertising companies relentlessly promote the idea that more wealth means more happiness, a concept that many people believe. They may take on freelance jobs or weekend work in the hope of improving their lot in life.","A person with more than one job may experience several benefits. Diversifying your skills and gaining more experience can make you more employable when negotiating the highly competitive job market. Avoiding putting all your eggs in one basket is also a wise move as you have something to fall back on if one source of income stops.","There are also many downsides to this situation. Working for more than one company can quickly leave a person feeling overworked and burnt out. It also leaves limited time for being with family and friends or doing things you enjoy. Whatâs more, when you are spread too thin, you may produce poor-quality work.","Overall, I think it is important to remain balanced. Having an additional source of income can be beneficial if you keep work in its place, but it is not worth damaging your health and relationships for the sake of a slightly larger bank balance."],examinerComment:["This is a strong response. The candidate has addressed both questions and provided a range of extended ideas.","The reasons given for having more than one job include the need to earn more to keep up with the [cost of living] and the idea, sold to people by advertising, that we should earn as much as possible [more wealth means more happiness].","The pros and cons of having more than one job are well covered. Advantages include increasing your skills and experience to make you more employable and avoiding putting [all your eggs in one basket] in case you lose one job. Disadvantages include feeling [overworked] or [burnt out], and [limited time] to spend with family and friends and on hobbies, and producing [poor-quality work].","The response is logically organised with well-managed cohesion. There are some very good linkers [Gone are the days when | Additionally | Whatâs more] and accurate reference and substitution.","Vocabulary is accurate and wide ranging [satisfy ... financial needs | take on | risen exponentially | break even | improving their lot] with some sophisticated resource [putting all your eggs in one basket | burnt out | spread too thin]. Similarly, the range of grammatical structures is wide and flexible.","This is a very good example of a higher-level response."]}},4:{task1:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"138",candidateResponse:["Dear Ms Karim,","Thank you very much again for sending me on the Workplace Safety course. It was valuable training and I now feel a lot more confident that I know how to prevent accidents in the factory. We covered points such as safe storage, keeping access ways clear and fire safety.","I can report that I have already used the skills I learned; when I noticed some cables that were a trip hazard and also a large bin that was partially blocking the exit, I was able to identify and fix those problems straight away.","I understand that employees who started working with us this year have already received this training as part of their orientation but for those who have been here longer, it would be a good opportunity to refresh and add to their knowledge.","It is a well-run course that is very relevant to our workplace and I am grateful for the opportunity.","Many thanks"],examinerComment:["This is a good response to the task: it addresses all three bullet points, uses a suitable tone to communicate with an employer and is presented in the correct letter format. There is clear progression throughout the letter, but there could be more evidence to justify why the course might not be suitable for colleagues (the final bullet point). There are some effective cohesive devices [that | those who], but a wider range of linking expressions than [and | but] would improve the final rating.","Vocabulary is used well, and there is some effective collocation [prevent accidents | trip hazard | partially blocking]. Grammatical structures include simple and complex examples [started working with us | have been here longer], but most of the letter is in the past simple and past simple tenses.","To achieve the highest scores, the candidate would need to include a wider range of cohesive devices and grammatical structures. They could improve the response by providing further suggestions on why the course may not be suitable for other colleagues. Overall, it is a good response."]},task2:{sampleKind:"examiner_model",sourcePages:"139",candidateResponse:["It is true that nothing in life is permanent except change. Changes in society and our own lives are inevitable. We all get older, friends and family move away, and our employment situation can suddenly change. Understandably, many people wish everything could stay the same. In this essay, I would like to consider the reasons for this view and explain why it is better to embrace change.","Wanting to feel in control of our lives is perfectly normal. We often feel vulnerable when events in society occur which are beyond our control or when we cannot be sure of the outcome of something. The uncertainty caused by the COVID-19 pandemic is an example of this. Changes in our personal circumstances can also be hard to accept. For example, when a friend or family member moves away, we may experience a deep sense of loss. Ironically, even good changes can bring uncertainty. If we receive a promotion, we may struggle with imposter syndrome and wrestle with a fear of failure.","Despite these perfectly natural feelings, I think it is good to embrace change. Since change is unavoidable, it is much better to accept reality than to become consumed by negative thinking. When we remain positive, we may find that a change actually benefits us in the long run. Adapting to change also helps us develop resilience, a quality that can help us face an obstacle and see an opportunity in it.","As highlighted above, sooner or later, we will all face change. While change is unsettling, it is vital to keep focused on the positive aspects of our circumstances. Doing so can help us unlock new opportunities we didnât know were available to us."],examinerComment:["This essay is a high-level response that c
1176overs all aspects of the question. In the second paragraph, reasons are presented on why people in society as a whole and individuals might resist change. Then, the third paragraph gives clear reasons to suggest that, overall, this is a positive process. The position is consistent and the conclusion ties both areas together for a strong finish.","Ideas are logically organised. Cohesive devices [Ironically | Despite these | As highlighted above | Doing so can] are used highly effectively and paragraphing is helpful.","Vocabulary is natural and sophisticated [embrace change | deep sense of loss | consumed by negative thinking | develop resilience]. Sentence structure demonstrates full flexibility, with a wide range of complex examples within a range of largely error-free multi-clause sentences.","Little needs to be added to improve the rating other than possibly an example to illustrate why changes should be seen as positive, in the third paragraph. However, this is a very good high-level response."]}}};function S(e,t){return A[Number(e)]?.[t]||null}const C={1:{task1:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:6.5,sourcePages:"125â126",candidateResponse:["Dear Risham,","Good morning! Long time no see, hope you doing well. Do you still remember me? I am singing genius, that was a nickname you gave me 13 years ago. Also, for sure. I miss you so much!","As you know, we were left college for about 10 years. So I want to celebrate this 10th anniversary with our classmate and friends. Honestly, I do no know what should we do at first: but I remembered that in the last month of our college lives, Jessica let us to wrote a letter to the 10 years laterâs us. I think this letter can be the theme of our anniversary. Moreover, we can bring some gifts to our firends and classmates. This will be a great chance to remind our enjoyful and lovely teenager school lives.","Iâm really curious about the letter, I canât remember anything of the letter. I really hope I did not write nay embrassing events. However, could you please help me to contact with Jessica and ask her about the letters? If you can I will really appreciate that. Meanwhile, Iâm going to contact with Jasmeen and Annie, they were the âSocial Queenâ of our school; they might can help us to contact with our classmates and friends. Then we can build a group chat to discuss the details of our 10th anniversary.","Talk to you later! I really want to say that again: I really miss you! See you later!","Your Bestie,","Singing Genius."],examinerComment:["This letter is a strong response and it covers each area of the task, including: an idea for the kind of celebration, reasons for using the letters they wrote 10 years ago as part of the celebration, and asking for help to contact the other school friends.","Organisation of ideas is generally logical and there is a clear progression. Linking devices are used well, with a range of referencing [me | this], although there is some inaccurate use [10 years laterâs us] and repetition [letter]. Overall coherence is variable.","There is appropriate vocabulary [theme | ask her about | really appreciate that | build a group chat] but noticeable errors [firends / friends | enjoyful / enjoyable].","There are some effective grammatical structures, including modals and a conditional [If] form and some examples of multi-clause sentences. However, there are errors [they might can help us]. Overall, sentences are short and the level of error in grammar does have an impact on the score.","To achieve a higher score, a greater range of vocabulary and grammatical structures should be included."]},task2:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:7,sourcePages:"127â128",candidateResponse:["I absolutely agree that everyone should have hobbies, at any stage of their life. As âhobbyâ, I consider any activities tha someone do for pleasure purposes only.","For example, children and young adults have their time at school, they do different sorts of activities, but they have a educational purpose.","Children and young adults should be able to get home and do something only for fun. Even when the activity involves learning something, when itâs a hobby, thereâs no pressure, no stress, only the fact that theyâre doing what they enjoy, for fun. Such as playing an instrument, or only listening to music, playing outdoors with friends, painting, playing sports, etc. A hobby can involve commitment, or not. In my case, I used to play with friends on the street when I was a kid. This was my hobby. As I was growing up, I started to listen to music and play guitar and found myself enjoying other hobbies.","The same applies for retired people. They should all have hobbies in their lifes. After so many years spent mostly working, itâs great for them having some activities to focus on. But, again, no pressure involved. Ret
1176ired people usually have more free time to spend doing what they actually enjoy, so, if they have the chance, the should accumulate as many hobbies as they can and relax during retirement.","People then might find easy to say that kids, teenagers and retired people should have hobbies, since they usually have more free time. But what about working people? Yes, they definitely should have hobbies, and I would say that they need those.","Bring a working person nowadays itâs not easy. People spend several hours at work, on the way to work, on the way back home, taking care of their family, cleaning their houses, doing shopping, cooking the next dayâs lunch, etc. Theyâre plenty of tasks that canât be skipped, so, when do these people enjoy themselves and do something for fun? Itâs important to have this in mind and value any free time doing any sort of hobby that make them feel relaxed, instead of productive. Working people are the ones who mostly need a hobby, so they can enjoy life as it should be enjoyed, with no pressure, deadlines or bosses. Just doing something because it makes them feel good."],examinerComment:["This is a strong response which covers each aspect of the task, and includes all the age categories: children, young adults, working people, the retired. The position is clear, that [everyone should have hobbies].","Ideas are well organised and sentences are linked together effectively [Even when | Such as | But what about...?] with some effective use of referencing [This | The same applies | these people | who], making this response easy to read and logical. There are a handful of errors and quite frequent repetition of [they].","Vocabulary is strong, with examples of good collocation [accumulate ... hobbies | have this in mind | makes them feel good]. Only a few errors remain [tha / that | lifes / lives | Bring / Being]. Similarly, a good range of grammatical structures is used, including modal forms [should | I would say | canât be skipped] and comparatives [more]. A few grammatical errors remain, such as article use and subject/verb agreement [do / does | make / makes].","This is already a strong response, but to achieve the highest ratings, the ideas could be more fully developed around âyoung adultsâ and the conclusion could refer back to all the categories being presented. There is also room for even greater levels of accuracy in cohesion, vocabulary and grammatical structures. It would also be helpful to avoid the âone sentence paragraphsâ to ensure paragraphing supports the sequencing of ideas within each section of the response."]}},2:{task1:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:5.5,sourcePages:"129",candidateResponse:["Dear Matilda,","Thank you for your question in related on study abroad as you know.","Well, I went to griffith university in Australia in 2015. I studied nursing and it took me four and half years to achieve. However, finally I graduated in the early of february 2020.","As you know, study abroad is challenging. My first day in Australia was annoying. I did not have any friends to comunicate with. So rang my mom and talk with her. But, a month later I got along with many international friends.","The reason I chose to study overseas was that the education system in Australia is better in our own country. There were lots of practical rather than theory. And also the lectures and students are friendly and helpful. Studying abroad is helpful because it easy to get a job. I have being working in Timorese International hospital for two years.","Good luck."],examinerComment:["This response covers the main points within the task. The writer addresses the first bullet point, âwhereâ they studied, and the third, âhow the year was helpfulâ. However, there is no real answer to the second bullet point around, âwhat you learnt about the country you studied inâ. To improve task achievement, some information about what they learned about Australia should be included.","The letter is logically organised and the ideas can be followed, although the linking words are quite simple and repetitive [So | But | And also] and there is some inaccurate use [As you know]. A wider range of linking devices would improve the rating.","There is some good use of vocabulary [to achieve | challenging | reason I chose to] but there are errors in word choice [early of] and the range is rather limited. Similarly, the grammatical range is limited, for example, inaccuracy in comparative forms [better in / better than in | easy / easier] and does cause some difficulty for the reader.","To improve the score, the second bullet point around âwhat you learnt about the country you studied inâ should be included and a wider range of accurate vocabulary and grammatical structures."]},task2:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:7,sourcePages:"130",candidateResponse:["I do think family owned businesses have more advantages than disadvantages. For businesses ran by family members, the members feel a strong sense of pride for the business and in that regard they are more vested in the positive outcome of the business. Meanwhile if the business has primarly employees running the business, for them it is just a pay-check. The success of failure of the business is not their responsibility. Therefore it may less likely be that a family owned will fail. One may argue however that the family members may not posess the required skill set for a particular job and that may spell disaster for the company. Hence it will be best to outsource the job to more qualified candidates. As true as this may be, the family has the option of choosing a member to be trained to fill specific roles. Another advantage of a family owned business is, the children are exposed to the business from very early in their lives. They are able to experience the inner workings of the company from different levels, this in turn would translate into a greater appreciation for the business. Currently I work for a large company which by in large a family owned company. The company has been around for more then 50 years, they have weathered many different economic climates and are able to still remain relevant in the business sphere. This is mainly due to the fact that the business has remained in the family. With its humble beginings the business has been able to generate wealth for over 4 generations."],examinerComment:["This is a strong response to the task. It is unfortunate that this candidate has not used paragraphing, as this is a requirement of IELTS Task 2, and the score for Coherence and Cohesion is limited due to this.","The position is clear, and the ideas presented are relevant and well developed. The candidate agrees that there are more advantages, illustrates why they think this is true, and gives the example of the company that they currently work in.","Apart from the lack of paragraphing, the message is very easy to follow. There are higher-level linking expressions [in that regard | Meanwhile | One may argue | As true as this may be] and cohesion is generally well managed, although there is some repetition due to some lack of reference [business].","Vocabulary is flexibly used, with some skilful examples, and collocation [strong sense of pride | spell disaster | outsource the job | greater appreciation | remain relevant | generate wealth]. Some minor spelling errors remain [primarly | posess | beginings]. Grammatical structures are also flexibly used, with the majority of sentences without error, and examples of multi-clause sentences. Occasional errors remain [ran / run], including in word order [may less likely be / may be less likely].","This is an example of a response that has suffered a penalty for the absence of paragraphing. The band score could be improved by the use of paragraphing, to supp
1176ort the sequencing of ideas within this high-level response."]}},3:{task1:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:6,sourcePages:"131",candidateResponse:["Dear Mr Smart,","I am... ..., the manager of K entertainment company. I am writing to invite you to the new theatre we are going to open soon. The new theatre is buiit for both new actor and musician who are talented but have not given any opportunities and public who would like to enjoy new cultural experiences. The famous architect Mr oh drew this building and a variety of people from different fields joined to this project to be completed. Finally, this newly built theatre is going to open on 17 March.","I was wondering if you could come and join to the new start of it. I understand you are very hectic with a lot of schedules but it would be greatly appreciated if you could come and congratulate this new start.","It will be very meaningful time for not only you but also audiences who know you effort as you have been funderising for some organizations that suffer from finance issues but pass the cultural services over.","I hope you can come and enjoy together this openning. I look forward to hearing from you soon.","Regards,"],examinerComment:["This response is a good attempt; the writer has addressed all the bullet points: information about the new theatre includes who it is built for, the name of the architect and the reason it was built, the actor is invited, and the reasons why he would be a good person include his work in fundraising for cultural organisations that suffer finance issues. There could be more expansion on the third bullet point for a higher task achievement score. The tone is appropriate to make this request to a famous actor. Organisation of ideas is generally logical, with linking devices used well [Finally | but] with some effective use of referencing [who | this project | it] although cohesion within sentences can be faulty.","Vocabulary is generally good, with some examples of a wider range of resource [talented | new cultural experiences | from different fields] but overall, the errors in word choice are noticeable [congratulate this new start | pass the cultural services over]. The errors in spelling do not impede communication [buiit | funderising | openning].","Similarly, there are some effective grammatical structures, including [if] structures and multi-clause sentences. However, overall, these structures are not always very accurate. There are errors with plural forms [actor and musician] prepositions [join to] and articles.","For a higher score, the third bullet point could be expanded, and greater accuracy in linking expressions, vocabulary and grammar would also be helpful."]},task2:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:7.5,sourcePages:"132â133",candidateResponse:["Eternal youth has always been some type of desired myth on every civilization. Even if science has already proven that it is impossible for humans to stop the process of getting older, it is possible, on a surface level, to make this process less visible.","Nowadays there are tons of brands and laboratories especialised on products that retard the natural aging of our skin. The primary components on those types of products are collagen and hyaluronic acid, which is great, because our organism already produces those naturally, but as we get older, it decreases the productions, causing flacid and dull skin.","The big concern on this topic is the beauty standarts and how it affects peoples self steem. It is not seen, anymore, as a natural, human thing to get the appearance of being old. On platforms such as Instagram and Youtube, there are a lot of content creators that advertise products of that kind and reinforce that the real beauty is to be young.","On that note, as much as it is not dangerous and unhealthy, on a phisical level, to use those products â when we talk about those that are tested and approved by vigilance organisations â it is very compromising for peopleâs mental health to be subjected to this extent of standart, one that makes them think that a natural process shouldnât be happening to them.","On another side, we have the treatments made on clinics, and those can be seen as dangerous. Modifying their bodys and injecting substances on them are the easiest way for people to mantain the youth, - again, on a surface level â but the real question is, at what cost, what good can this give them? None, should be the answer, but people go throught any pain to be accepted."],examinerComment:["This is an example of a strong response. It certainly explores the topic and includes reference to the products and the treatments that people pay for to look younger. The position becomes clearer as the response develops. Ideas are communicated well, and include: the products people use, the impact of social media on self-esteem, and the mental health implications of ageing (to think we should not be ageing). The conclusion is appropriate: that these dangerous treatments have no real benefits, but people do it to be accepted.","This is already a strong response, but there is room to develop and clarify what the writer thinks are the benefits and drawbacks of having access to these products and treatments.","The response is easy to read, with good cohesion. Ideas are logically ordered, with effective paragraphing to supp
1176ort overall coherence. There is a range of cohesive devices [Even if | Nowadays | The big concern | On platforms | On that note | On another side]. However, as almost every sentence starts with a linking device, there is some âoveruseâ.","Vocabulary is flexible, with some good collocation and higher-level items [Eternal youth | content creators | to be subjected to] with only a few errors in spelling [especialised | self steem | phisical | standart] or word form [vigilance / vigilant]. Similarly, there is a wide range of grammatical structures, including comparatives [less visible | easiest way] and multi-clause sentences, but a few errors remain.","To achieve the highest ratings, the candidate should link the points more tightly to whether it is âa good or bad thingâ for people to spend their money in this way, and demonstrate a greater degree of accuracy in vocabulary."]}},4:{task1:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:7,sourcePages:"134",candidateResponse:["Dear Sir or Madam,","I am writing with regards to your service, which I solicited and made use of on August 10th. All things considered, I would say that I am highly satisfied with the work your company has done.","First of all, the punctuality of the employees was remarkable. Once they arrived in the location, the job proceeded smoothly. By midday, all of the furniture was correctly tied up and ready to be relocated. I especially appriciated the help offered by Ted Stone who single-handedly secured all of the sharp objects before carrying them to the truck.","Unfortunately, there has been one aspect of the service which I was absolutely unsatisfied with: the price. As far as I am concearned, if the customer is asked to cover the gas expences, the amount of money that you canrge should be considerably lower.","In summary, even though I strongly suggest a 20% reduction of the final cost, I absolutely recommend your service. If it is needed again it the near future, I will come to you at once.","Yours faithfully,"],examinerComment:["This is a strong response to the task; all three bullet points are clearly addressed and a suitable tone is used to communicate feedback to the company. The response is presented in the correct letter format and ideas are arranged logically.","The range of vocabulary is good, with some higher-level examples [punctuality | remarkable | proceeded smoothly | single-handedly]; however, some spelling errors remain [appriciated | concearned | expences | canrge]. The writing shows a variety of structures, including passive forms [was correctly tied up] and conditional forms using [if]. However, overall sentences are short. To achieve the highest scores, the candidate would need to include a wider range of grammatical structures and try to avoid errors in vocabulary.","This is a good example of a higher-level response to this Task 1 question."]},task2:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:6.5,sourcePages:"135â136",candidateResponse:["In our modern world we face huge social differences. Some countries are incredibly rich while others are terribly poor. People who were lucky to be born in wealthy countries spend too much on food and clothes.","Why does it happen? I believe there are at least three reasons for this. First of all the amount of advertisement they receive via TV, Instagram, Youtube, you name it. People see a variety of outits that is offered with a discount, so they continue to buy more clothes. Sometimes they wear it once or even let it wait for the perfect moment that will never comes in the closet. Second reason is poor financial health. People do not know how to save and invest money, so they spend the better half of their salary at the nearest store. The third reason is the events any big city offers. Those who visit cinemas, restaurants, bars, concerts want to look chic. So you simply have to spend money on your looks in big cities.","How can we stop buying clothes we do not need? I think you could watch less add on TV, be yourself, buy only comfortable thing. If you need to attend an event, do purchase clothes you will be ale to wear in your everyday life. By the way decluttering is a moder thing to do now. It saves your home from extra clothes and things and it also saves your money for travelling! Do become a minimalist traveller!"],examinerComment:["This response addresses both elements of the question. The writer provides three reasons why people buy too many clothes, and there are examples given on how people can be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes that they buy. There is appropriate content within the response, but it could be improved by a more comprehensive conclusion.","Ideas are arranged logically and the paragraphing is helpful in sequencing the response. Cohesive devices are used to good effect, especially in the first half [I believe | First of all | Sometimes | The third reason] and there are examples of reference [while others | they | Those who visit] but the final paragraph reads more like a list (maybe the candidate was in a hurry to finish) with fewer effective cohesive features.","Vocabulary is generally appropriate, with some stronger items [huge social differences | incredibly rich | terribly poor | perfect moment] but also errors [outits / outfits | add / adverts | ale / able | moder / modern]. Similarly, grammatical structures are varied, but the level of error is high and limits the rating here.","To achieve a higher rating, the third paragraph should be more fully developed, with a concluding section. The vocabulary and grammatical resource in that paragraph should also be at a higher level."]}}};function _(e,t){return C[Number(e)]?.[t]||null}const P={1:{task1:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:6,sourcePages:"124â125",candidateResponse:["Dear Sir or Madam,","Lately iâve been encountering some major problems regarding my neighbour, who also rents his flat from you. The issue started since last week and involves on him making really loud noises late at night while he is probably playing videogames.","The noise produced by him is hugely impacting on my sleep schedule and quality, with me having problems on falling asleep and also having multiple interruptions throughout the night, which is impacting my overall mood and disposition during the day. I reached the point in which i had to visit a doctor in order to check my headaches that is giving me through the day, caused mainly by my low quality sleep.","I would like to kndly request you to please message or phone the renter explaining how his behaviour is disturbing all other of his neighbours and also soliticiting him how we can come to a solution to this problem."],examinerComment:["This letter is a good response which covers each area of the task. It includes: when the problem began [last week], how the noise has affected them [impacting on my sleep], actions requested from the agency [message or phone the renter]. All bullet points are covered and the purpose is clearly presented. The tone is consistently polite. However, the format of the letter is incomplete as there is no âclosingâ (e.g. Yours Faithfully, Best wishes), this does impact the score for Task Achievement.","There is clear overall progression, although at times, the sentences are not as fluently linked as they might be.","There is a good range of vocabulary that is more than adequate. Although there are errors, there are also many examples of accurate choice and appropriate modification [multiple interruptions | low quality sleep]. A mix of simple and complex structures is used, but mistakes with prepositions and slips with verb forms, limit the rating for this criterion.","This response shows some features of higher-level performance, but weaknesses in format and grammatical control limit the overall rating to Band 6."]},task2:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:7,sourcePages:"126â127",candidateResponse:["It is argued that the change in peopleâs habits and opinions occurs as they get older. In my opinion, I strongly believe that this statement is true because people are constantly expose to external stimulations and strongly affected by this.","Throughout the long period of human life, people experience numerous events and have relation with countless people. When people reads a certain book whether it is interesting for them or not, people tend to develop some kind of notion in their mind. This also happens when encountering a piece of artwork in a gallery or somewhere. People may be struck by it and have an impression on it, which leads to gaining of knowledge. Moreover, socialising with people has a similar effect. Through communications, one could develop their current idea or revise their thoughts by being expose to other peopleâs opinion. It is obvious that we are easily affected by others.","Human habits are highly depen
1176dant on current circumstances. Once people have an ailment, their eating habits has to be changed to a healthier one and they might have a regular exercise from then. If they change their goals for the future like going to universities, they would have to introduce themselves with a reading or studying habit. When I was in high school, I changed my aiming university from a lower level to a higher level. As a result, this made me change my studying habit to a very intense one.","In conclusion, people easily change their habits and opinion, because people think it it better to do it by instinct."],examinerComment:["This is a strong response to the task. The position is clear, and the ideas presented are supported and developed. The candidate agrees that it is common for people to change their habits and their opinions, illustrates why they think this is true, and gives examples from their own experience. The concluding paragraph is rather too general and could be more strongly focussed on the question.","The message is easy to follow. There are higher-level linking expressions [Throughout | Moreover | As a result] and cohesion is generally well managed, although there is some repetition due to a lack of reference [people].","Vocabulary is flexibly used, with some skilful examples, and collocation [countless people | struck by it | similar effect | current idea]. Some minor errors in word formation remain [relation]. Grammatical structures are also flexibly used, with the majority of sentences, without error, and examples of multi-clause sentences using [if | which]. Occasional errors remain, including [expose to / exposed to] and missing articles.","This is already a strong response, but to achieve the highest ratings, the ideas could be more fully developed around âas they get olderâ and the conclusion should refer back to this aspect of âgetting olderâ. There is also room for even greater levels of accuracy in cohesion, vocabulary and grammatical structures."]}},2:{task1:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:7.5,sourcePages:"128â129",candidateResponse:["Dear Sir or Madam","I have been enjoying long walks in the near countryside for years. Admiring the thriving nature is a great pleasure. I love observing wild animals roaming around and take pictures of them. It is my passion and it gives me much happiness. The countryside is a place where I can forget about the problems of my everyday life. I am sure that it brings everyone joy.","However recently I have started noticing large piles of rubbish being left around the place. I have found enormous amounts of plastic bags, bottles, containers and even tires. Not only does it destroy the beauty of the countrysideâs landscape, but it also destroys the delicate environment of the place. The litter can be dangerous to animals. I have found things such as gasoline containers.","The problem has to be dealt with immidiately. I would support having people pay fines for leving the rubbish in such places. The town council could also set up cameras, to catch such people. Another way of dealing with the problem could also be sending police patrols to control the situation.","I hope my proposition will be considered","Sincerely,","XYZ"],examinerComment:["The writer has covered the three bullet points in detail: the passion for walking, the types of litter [plastic bags, bottles, containers | tires | gasoline containers], and the suggestions for solutions [pay fines | cameras | police patrols].","The response is easy to read, with good cohesion. The writer has used a range of cohesive devices [however | Not only | but | also] and used referencing [them | such people] to achieve this.","There is flexibility in the use of vocabulary, with some good collocation and higher-level items [thriving nature | delicate environment | dealt with | control the situation], and only a few errors [immidiately / immediately | leving / leaving]. Similarly, there are a variety of grammatical structures, including modal forms and some multi-clause sentences. However, many of the sentences are fairly short, single clause sentences and, in the second paragraph, there is repeated use of the present perfect.","This is already a strong response to the task. To achieve the highest ratings, there could be greater accuracy in use of vocabulary, and wider use of multi-clause sentences."]},task2:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:5,sourcePages:"130â131",candidateResponse:["In this globalised eon, without any qualms that the Olympics or the football World cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Some people coincide that others say that these events created competition, not friendship, between countries. Howbeit, I debunk from them to proffer that, I believe that international sports events, are a good way to bring countries together. All the teams are playing very well and all the countries teams, and team members are well-mannered.","Compelling the obtainable avidances to demonstrate that some peopls thinking are worng becaus itâs just gameâs and if all the member playing personality, concrete the reason is if any team or team member showed bad behave and they represent thier country. To go hand in hand which drag me to persist is the team member should behave good whenever they loss the match.","To the snopsiye, I put the pen itâs a just entertainment show for others how they teams play. In the last, In my opinion people shouldnât more serious about games. When you loss the game you should apperi
1176ate and congratulate the winning team."],examinerComment:["The response addresses the part of the question about âbringing countries togetherâ but does not cover the aspects of âcreating competition between countriesâ and is, therefore incompletely addressed. The position is stated at the end of the first paragraph [I believe that international sports events, are a good way to bring countries together] but the development is not clear. There is a focus on the behaviour of the players rather than how this impacts on the countries. To improve this response, there should be more focus on whether sporting events âbring countries togetherâ or harm relationships between them.","Information is organised into three paragraphs and some cohesive devices are used [which | whenever] but overall, there is a lack of progression.","Vocabulary is minimally adequate with some correct resource [well-mannered | Compelling | demonstrate] but spelling can be inaccurate [avidances | snopsiye] and the range is not very wide. There is a limited ability to use grammatical structures and errors are frequent.","To achieve a higher score, the candidate should present more ideas around the second part of the question and ensure the conclusion relates fully to the question. They should also demonstrate a greater level of accuracy with vocabulary and grammatical structures."]}},3:{task1:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:6.5,sourcePages:"132â133",candidateResponse:["Dear Sir Kowalski,","I am writing in connection with a series of free concerts that took place this summer in our local park. You asked me to attend one of the concerts and wanted me to give you feedback about it.","I have to say that there were many interesting concerts and I had a huge problem choosing one of them. I wanted to go to each concert but I chose only one I had time to go there. The name of the music group was Kensington â just like the Palace in the United Kingdom. There were four young men. Two of them played the guitar, one played the piano and the last sang. They played very loud but their music was nice to listen and dance. I have see many dancing people during their performance.","My suggestions for the next summerâs concerts are to keep the direction. Everybody who listened to those concerts was happy. I asked a few questions and a woman above me said that she loved it and want such a kind of events every year.","I enclose a short movie I have recorded.","Yours sincerely","Renata"],examinerComment:["This letter is a strong response and it covers each area of the task, describing the concert attended [Kensington], saying why it was enjoyable [nice music] and including an overall suggestion to keep the summer concerts going. These points should be extended further for a higher score, for example, including clearer ideas on how to improve the concerts, rather than [keep the direction].","Organisation of ideas is generally logical and there is a clear progression. Linking devices are used well, with a range of referencing [one of them | the last | their], although there is some inaccurate use [to go there | such a kind of].","There is appropriate vocabulary [in connection with | huge problem choosing] with a few errors [above] that donât detract from the meaning. There are some effective grammatical structures, including multi-clause sentences and a range of tenses. However, the range of structures overall is limited, and there are errors [I have see / I have seen | want / wants]. Overall, sentences are short and the level of error in grammar does have an impact on the score.","To achieve a higher score, the bullet points should be more fully explored, and a greater range of vocabulary and grammatical structures should be included."]},task2:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:5,sourcePages:"134â135",candidateResponse:["Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country","In my opinion this is good opinion to develop companies and make it grown up, also it can be prove their staff more skills and have more knowledge by this way.","Everyone known the world that we live in is a faster like the higher speeding weel, change every day. The companies need to move ahead and stateges need to shift. their leader, managers, technologers, and more staff need to study more. It will be have a high level after a period of time studing. I think more advantage for companies and for staff spend a period of time living and working in another country.","There are more multiple couture in another countries. transport and economice bring us big way to easy to living and working in another country.","Just keep going progress with learning more from another country, you can gain richfull knowledge and skills. Eventually you can find the would will rewards you. and the international companies which you work to will be bigger and stronger!"],examinerComment:["The first paragraph, and the end of the third paragraph are copied from the question. The writer does agree that this kind of opportunity to live and work in another country is a positive one, but beyond this, the development is not clear. The main ideas are limited and we do not really hear why it is good for employees, and good for the company in any detail.","Organisation is not very logical but there is a sense of underlying coherence.","Simple vocabulary is used accurately, but overall, there are frequent errors [weel / wheel | technologers | couture | richfull | would / world] that are noticeable for the reader. There are some complex structures used but, overall, sentence control is very weak and this makes some parts, such as the conclusion, very hard to follow.","Note: wording that is copied from the question is not assessed by the examiner. Test takers should try not to simply copy the question within their response."]}},4:{task1:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:5.5,sourcePages:"136â137",candidateResponse:["Dear Sir,","I appreciated your time in help me, by beeing my coach. I though write a letter will help you to meet me better and optimize our process.","I have being working in marketing area for over ten years. I started in a Junior position and my last role I was working as marketing coordinator, leader of a group of fine persons.","Althoug I have a vast experience in field, I continue to study, now I am a student at Adelaide University, doing a Master Degree in Marketing.","I was wondering if you could help me understand how representative is the e-commerce in this company and introduce me to the time.","I send to you an invitation for our first meeting. I had checked your agenda before. But, please, feel free to suggest another day. And let me know if you any addicional information.","I want to thank you in advance for making time for coach me through this process. Start a role in a new company can be very chalenging.","Regards,","Bianca Goncalves"],examinerComment:["In this response, all the bullet points are covered and the purpose of the letter is generally clear. The introduction to the new mentor includes information about previous areas of work, and current studies, an indication of the area of help [e-commerce], and an invitation for the first meeting. Overall, more clarity and more detail across bullet points 2 and 3 would improve the TA rating. For example, in bullet point 3 [send to you an invitation], we do not know if this meeting is online or face-to-face, or any other details around arrangements. This could be added to improve the response.","The letter is organised and ideas can be followed but the sentences are not linked together well. There are some effective examples of reference [our | this] but, overall linking words are quite simple and repetitive [and], sometimes cohesive devices are not accurate [Althoug] and, often, missing altogether. This makes the response rather repetitive.","Vocabulary is mixed. There are some effective examples [Junior position | vast experience | checked your agenda] but overall control is weak, with errors in word choice [meet me better | time] and spelling [beeing / being | fine / five | addicional / additional]. The grammatical range is limited and rather repetitive.","There are some accurate structures and attempts at complexity [if], but overall structures are used repetitively, for example, most sentences start with [I] and tend to be short.","Overall, the bullet points are covered, but to improve the score, more detail for bullet points 2 and 3 should be included. As well as effective paragraphing to supp
1176ort the organisation of ideas and greater accuracy and range in grammatical structures."]},task2:{sampleKind:"scored_candidate",officialBand:7,sourcePages:"138â139",candidateResponse:["Vitamins play a vital role for a healthy life. We can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy balanced diet. Instead, Some people Spend large amount of money on vitamin pills.","Firstly, Some people believe that they donât get enough vitamins from their diet. So, they spend more money on vitamin pills. In fact, our body doesnât need more than what we need. They believe taking vitamin pills on top of a healthy diet makes them more healthier without knowing the facts. Secondly, some people donât like fruits and vegetables and they donât get enough vitamins. In this case, with doctors advice they spend more money on vitamin pills.","People Can get enough vitamins through a balanced diet. They can get enough vitamins by eating more vegetables and fruits. Vitamins are essential for all, especially growing children. Encouraging them by different tactics would make them eat healthy diet. For example, place colourful vegetables and fruits in a âfaceâ shape on their plate would attract them to try to eat. Teaching them from very young age to eat healthy foods are necessary for a healthy life.","Moreover, awareness should be create about our diets and health. People can get ideas and knowledge about vitamins by watching videos and reading books that are relevant to vitamins and vitamin intakes. Additionally, people should be aware that taking vitamin pills without doctorâs advice is not advicable. Having said that, yoga can also helps a person to eat healthy. People whoever practices yoga in daily life said that, after practicing yoga they cannot put any unhealthy foods on their body.","In conclusion, we can get enough vitamins by eating healthy diet like vegetables and fruits. Children should be encouraged from very young age to consume vegetables, fruits and milk or milk products (if they are tolerant to lactose). People should always Consider their doctors before taking vitamin pills. I believe that people can save more money if they started eating a healthy diet and not spend on vitamin pills which they donât require."],examinerComment:["This is a strong response. It addresses the requirements of both parts of the task. There are two reasons given for spending money on vitamin pills in paragraph 2, followed by several tactics on how people can be persuaded to improve their diet instead. These ideas are extended and supported.","Ideas are well organised and logically ordered, with ideas sequenced across 5 paragraphs. Cohesive devices are helpful, with linking words [Firstly | For example | Moreover | Additionally | Having said that] and reference [their | which].","Vocabulary is used well, with some good resource [play a vital role | balanced diet | different tactics | tolerant to lactose], there is some error with spelling [advicable / advisable] but, overall, a wider range of lexis would improve the score. Grammatical structure is mixed, with some multi-clause sentences, including conditionals [if] and modal forms [can | should] there are also a few slips and errors e.g. with the modal forms [should be create | can also helps], punctuation and missing articles. Again, the range is not sufficiently wide for a higher rating.","This is a good response, with relevant content. To achieve a higher score, the range of vocabulary and grammatical structures should be increased."]}}};function L(e,t){return P[Number(e)]?.[t]||null}const p="cambridge-18-20";function u(e){return Array.isArray(e)?e.map(t=>String(t||"").trim()).filter(Boolean).join(` 1177 1178`):String(e||"").trim()}function E(e){return String(e||"").trim().split(/\s+/).filter(Boolean).length}function W(e={}){const t=String(e.id||"").match(/^c(\d+)-(a|gt)-(\d+)-t([12])$/);if(!t)return null;const[,a,n,i,l]=t;return(n==="gt"?v:k).find(s=>Number(s.book)===Number(a)&&Number(s.test)===Number(i))?.[l==="1"?"task1":"task2"]||null}function R(e={}){const t=e.task==="task_1"?"task1":"task2",a=t==="task2"?"task2":e.module==="general_training"?"general_task1":"academic_task1",n=e.sourceKey===p?W(e):null,i=a==="academic_task1"&&(n?.imagePath||e.taskImagePath)||"";return{taskType:t,taskCategory:a,taskImageRequired:a==="academic_task1",taskImageSourcePath:i,prompt:String(n?.questionText||e.taskPrompt||"").trim()}}function q(e){const t=R(e);return{taskType:t.taskType,questionText:t.prompt,imagePath:t.taskImageSourcePath}}function O(){const e=new Map(m.map(a=>[a.id,a])),t=[["academic","a",k],["general_training","gt",v]];return[21,20,19,18].flatMap(a=>t.flatMap(([n,i,l])=>l.filter(o=>Number(o.book)===a).sort((o,r)=>Number(o.test)-Number(r.test)).flatMap(o=>["task1","task2"].flatMap(r=>{const s=N(a,o.test,r,n);if(!s)return[];const h=r==="task1"?1:2,d=`c${a}-${i}-${o.test}-t${h}`,g=e.get(d);if(g)return[{...g,sampleKind:"scored_candidate"}];const f=u(s.candidateResponse),c=o[r],y=Number(s.officialBand),w=Number.isFinite(y);return[{id:d,sourceKey:p,sourceLabel:"Cambridge IELTS 18â21",sourceReference:`Cambridge IELTS ${a} · ${n==="general_training"?"General Training":"Academic"} Test ${o.test} · Task ${h}`,module:n,task:r==="task1"?"task_1":"task_2",taskGenre:r==="task2"?"task2":n==="general_training"?"letter":"academic_task1",sampleKind:s.sampleKind||(w?"scored_candidate":"examiner_model"),...w?{officialBand:y}:{},taskPrompt:u(c?.questionText),...r==="task1"&&c?.imagePath?{taskImagePath:c.imagePath}:{},candidateResponse:f,responseWordCount:E(f),examinerComment:u(s.examinerComment),sourceUrl:o.sourceUrl,sourcePageLabel:s.sourcePages?`Student's Book · pages ${s.sourcePages}`:"Student's Book",sourceConfidence:"official_book"}]}))))}const B=O();function M(e){return e?.id===p?B:m.filter(t=>t.sourceKey===e?.id)}function b(e){return String(e||"").split(/\n\s*\n/).map(t=>
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